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Balladeer
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(Haven't been writing and I'm afraid the quality of this shows it. Please bear with me as I try to get my poetic muscles back in shape)


When I was a young boy, my gramps was my sage,
My mentor, my teacher, my friend.
Though quite separated by young and old age
We traveled Life's road hand in hand.

He pointed one day to a rock on the ground
Then said, "Make that rock turn to gold".
I thought to myself....the old boy's gone unsound
Or, at least, is just getting too old.

"Hey, gramps! It's a rock! Are you playing with me?"
He said, "There's a lesson. Please see it.
A thing cannot be what you want it to be
Just because you may want it to be it."

Then he showed me a tree a full ten feet high
And he said, "Jump that tree, if you can."
I said, "Gramps, what the hell! I'm a boy, not gazelle!"
And I got a big smile from that man.

"There's a lesson", he said, "I will pass on to you.
Life is tough. This will help you get through it.
A man cannot do what you want him to do
Just because you may want him to do it."

"Son, you'll be on your own with Life's passions to taunt
You, but never forget, as a man
That a girl may not love you as much as you want
But she'll love you as much as she can."

So here I now sit, almost fifty years hence,
Filled with grief at how my life has turned.
My grandpa had warned me but I was too dense
And his lessons I never did learn.

I sit in my parlor - a young man turned old,
A beaten, pathetic old thing
With a sack full of rocks that will never be gold
And thin legs that have lost all their spring.

I sit here in the gloom and I feel so sad
As I bring back the memories so rough
Of the girl who had loved me with all that she had
Which I didn't consider enough.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-07-2000 10:12 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~

Oh, yeah ... like I can hardly wait
until you get back in 'shape' !

Well, you sure FLEXED with this one.
I do not lie ... it passes muster !
Nice twister ... mister.
~*Marge*~




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Balladeer....seems you've been working out somewhere out of site. This one is is a keeper  
Martie
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That's what getting older does, huh?  All those lessons and wisdom that we now know, when it's almost too late...well, it nerver is, too late...certainly not for you to write a wonderful poem, or to listen to your gramps.  Love this deer, in case you couldn't tell.
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4 posted 03-07-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

They're right, you know...

This is as poetically "fit"
As one can "git"  

A touching reminisce of your grandfather...thanks for sharing him with us.  He'd have to be proud of you.

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Sir Balladeer, This is a marvelous poem as always, the talent you have could not go sour as well as your outlook on life. Sometimes little hurdles get in the way, and we forget to jump.
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6 posted 03-08-2000 09:22 AM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

Oh, how I liked your poem, we all think of times gone by, and the what if's, and what could have been's.
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7 posted 03-08-2000 09:31 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
Well you know what the rock was for, to hit yourself in the head. You have a mind like a steel trap and I always get caught in it.
You know how I feel about your writing. Sy
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8 posted 03-08-2000 09:34 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

like this one, great writing...sighs and hugs
Christopher
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Ouch!
I will say Balladeer, that yo know how to wrap a poem up! You present it well, then close the loop and cinch in the reader!
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You silly old fart! Yea, when you're outta shape "poetry" wise...ya still kick everyone's ass! Now then, if you can get back on the Viagra, start reading those dirty magazines again, and do something with that gut and all those wrinkles, we may can get your love life back on track too.....
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Excellent! How can you say it's not up to your usual? This is wonderful...but I don't know who you're talking about in this one.. you can't be the man with the back of rocks...because you still have it!  
Corinne
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12 posted 03-08-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

You're a wise one, Balladeer, and your poetry is as perfect as ever!

Corinne
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13 posted 03-08-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Your writing muscles seem just fine to me! This is wonderful!

Denise
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I'd say you're in shape!  I have to laugh at Sey and Toe and their replies though.  The point is the lesson was learned, better late than never.  Certainly something for us all to think about.
Michael
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Uh, yeah - I wish my "out of shape" poetry looked so good.  A hard lesson here - but then Wisdom is a tough teacher - the lessons always come after the test....I think is how they say it.  LOL at thinking I should be talking about wisdom anyway - Just ignore me.

Great poem, though.
Two thumbs up for sure.

Michael
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Hmmmm... if you're out of shape poetically, the rest of us are up that infamous creek without a paddle! LOL. This is great, 'Deer one!
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I too have been gone,
and I'm sure it shows,
but with your talent
I doubt anyone knows.
You flex with much flare
and as a poet you dare
to show us your grief
with disdain and belief.
You are quite the gentleman
scholar it seems
and these nuggets of gold,
to us a smile brings.
Keep up the good work,
ole Balladeer,
and give us more gifts
that we can hold dear.
Balladeer
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18 posted 03-09-2000 01:28 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Big thanks to you all. I'm going to try to get back on track here. You all have always been great supporters and I thank you..Toe, being the athlete you are, I will consider you an athletic supporter!  
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Out of shape?
Nah.... I've seen pictures....

You don't get older, Deer - You get better..
 
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