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The End of the Dance

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Martie
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The End of the Dance

I found my husband’s apron
locked in a mad embrace
with my favorite blue sweater.
I could tell by the rumpled effect
of their dance
that they had twirled long and hard
‘round and ‘round ‘til they were wet.

What first seemed playful
jostling in the current with the others
became a rough entanglement,
an arm had been twisted
in his long denim sash
until all shape had been squeezed
from its delicate blue appeal.
They were so caught by the machinery
of the music that played them
that its very core was undone.

Overalls and aprons
cannot twist and circle
again with this rich beauty
that delights the eye when
fluffed until every crease is softened,
unless some trick that only poets know
allows their close embrace again,
upon the dance floor
they are through.



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-07-2000).]
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Martie,
Full of sentiment and longing. A beautiful poem. *L*
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2 posted 03-07-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~

I swear, I can just see this as
the next commercial sweeping the nation !
What did you use in the washing machine ...
SNUGGLES ?  CHEER ?
Adorable !
You have me smiling broadly with this one !

~*Marge*~



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3 posted 03-07-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh Martie...to have your vision
How do you do this?
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4 posted 03-07-2000 10:23 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Well, if you feel the need to expose your dirty laundry in public, the least I can do is to applaud it! APPLAUSE!!!!!
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ah...laundry IS fun, ain't it?  

 ~shadows dance by the light within~

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Exceptional poetry as always my friend.  For some reason, it struck me different than the others.  Beautifully done.
Martie
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7 posted 03-08-2000 02:37 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Just was trying to have some fun here..Thank you for reading and commenting and I hope for maybe a smile.  

Sy--was only supposed to be funny--the longing was to unloose the grip of one garment on another..

Marge--LOL--Tide free, but I don't think that had anything to do with the problem.

Ruth--my vision is for clean and wrinkle free.

passing shadows--I was so frustrated, I thought I'd make it fun.

Mike--I don't usually write about the laundry.  Thanks for being a friend.


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wonderful...now to come up with a version of "Tiny Bubbles" for my hot tub...seriously, very creative.
Martie
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Balladeer--Opps, sorry I missed you before.  LOL--dirty laundry--that's a good one.

RSEvans-- Thank you so much.
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Very interesting... it shows what a wonderful poet you are that you can write about laundry and make it sound so beautiful.  I truly enjoyed this poem.  
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