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The End of the Dance
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The End of the Dance |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The End of the Dance I found my husband’s apron locked in a mad embrace with my favorite blue sweater. I could tell by the rumpled effect of their dance that they had twirled long and hard ‘round and ‘round ‘til they were wet. What first seemed playful jostling in the current with the others became a rough entanglement, an arm had been twisted in his long denim sash until all shape had been squeezed from its delicate blue appeal. They were so caught by the machinery of the music that played them that its very core was undone. Overalls and aprons cannot twist and circle again with this rich beauty that delights the eye when fluffed until every crease is softened, unless some trick that only poets know allows their close embrace again, upon the dance floor they are through. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Full of sentiment and longing. A beautiful poem. *L* |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I swear, I can just see this as the next commercial sweeping the nation ! What did you use in the washing machine ... SNUGGLES ? CHEER ? Adorable ! You have me smiling broadly with this one ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Martie...to have your vision  How do you do this? |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, if you feel the need to expose your dirty laundry in public, the least I can do is to applaud it! APPLAUSE!!!!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah...laundry IS fun, ain't it? ~shadows dance by the light within~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Exceptional poetry as always my friend. For some reason, it struck me different than the others. Beautifully done. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Just was trying to have some fun here..Thank you for reading and commenting and I hope for maybe a smile. Sy--was only supposed to be funny--the longing was to unloose the grip of one garment on another.. Marge--LOL--Tide free, but I don't think that had anything to do with the problem. Ruth--my vision is for clean and wrinkle free. passing shadows--I was so frustrated, I thought I'd make it fun. Mike--I don't usually write about the laundry. Thanks for being a friend. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
wonderful...now to come up with a version of "Tiny Bubbles" for my hot tub...seriously, very creative. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer--Opps, sorry I missed you before. LOL--dirty laundry--that's a good one. RSEvans-- Thank you so much. |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
Very interesting... it shows what a wonderful poet you are that you can write about laundry and make it sound so beautiful. I truly enjoyed this poem. |
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