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AnthonyEV1
Junior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 17
St. Charles, IL, USA

0 posted 2000-03-07 07:43 PM


This isn't as good as my last one, but I did put a lot of feeling into it though.


I feel my heart
Sink to my chest
I feel my mind
Almost explode

How could a guy
Do such a thing
As to force things
Onto these girls

Doesn’t he know
It tears them apart
Doesn’t he know
It takes a part of them away
Each time this happens

Doesn’t he care
He is messing these girls up
Doesn’t he care
She can never be the same
That this feeling will always be in her

Doesn’t he hurt
When he hurts these girls
Doesn’t he hurt
To know he makes girls pregnant
Doesn’t he hurt
Knowing how he kills these girls insides

He does not hurt from this
So I shall make him hurt
It may not be right
But he deserves it

He should get back
Just a small splinter of hurt
That he has caused these girls

He has hurt them physically
He has hurt them mentally
Now I will hurt him physically
And sit and watch him cry

© Copyright 2000 Anthony Verzi - All Rights Reserved
EagleScorpion
Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever
1 posted 2000-03-09 11:57 PM


KICK HIS ASS!!! I was in the same predicament as you and I resolved the matter with a baseball bat. Never seen the guy since, dont give him a splinter of pain, splinter his god forsaken spine.
AngelDust
Junior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 30
Minnesota
2 posted 2000-03-10 12:01 PM


Wow, very moving...  I'm going to have to agree with EagleScorpion here though, KICK HIS ASS!  It was a very good poem though, good job and nice expression.

-Angel-

AnthonyEV1
Junior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 17
St. Charles, IL, USA
3 posted 2000-03-10 12:51 PM


Thanks for the replies, I didn't think anyone would respond to it. And I was surprised that both of you thought I should beat him up hehe. I thought if I did get a responce it would be something like, "no don't do that it's wrong" Not that I would listen to that though...   This guy just deserves whats coming to him, he has gotten a few girls pregnant and still does this every day. And not a thing is being done about it....
Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
4 posted 2000-03-10 06:19 AM


When you're done with him I have a name, an address and a plane ticket.....lol, For those who have told me that an eye for an eye is not the right way to feel....well they just don't know how it really is now do they? I know it wouldn't take away any of my pain but................ Great release of feeling you are a great writer with a pure heart.  Thank you for allowing me a moment to vent myself  
AnthonyEV1
Junior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 17
St. Charles, IL, USA
5 posted 2000-03-10 10:49 AM


LOL Butterflies_dont_cry   I probably would take you up on that offer hehe. Good way for me to vent and I wouldent feel bad about it cause the person deserves it. Seeing that guy get the crap beat out of him would make you feel a tinny bit better probably. It really wouldent solve anything, but would be fun to do and fun for you to watch hehe.   Thank you for reading it and replying, and if you ever need to vent, I've got a email address and ICQ. It's fine by me if you ever want to talk or just need someone to yell at.  
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