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What Do You see.........

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 03-07-2000 05:17 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry



Look into my eyes,
the window of my soul.
The place I tell no lies,
the place that I am whole.

Do you see silent cries,
of the horrors untold.
The pain of the lies
that cause me to withhold.

Do you see the fears
that I've never let go.
The unshed tears,
that my cheeks will never know.

Do you see the child I keep
hiding in the the darkness.
She only escapes in my sleep
when I am defenseless.

Do you see the chains
that hold me down.
Do you see the pains
within which I drown.

Do you dare to see
all that is true?
Or do you turn from me
because of what you hide in you.

© Copyright 2000 Butterflies_dont_cry - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
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1 posted 03-07-2000 05:40 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

This is so wonderfully written.  So sensitive and revealing. "the window of my soul". "do you see the child i keep"
I also like the structure and rhyme.
nicely done.
JamesMichael
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2 posted 03-07-2000 05:58 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This is intense...I see a woman reaching out for love and understanding.   James
passing shadows
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3 posted 03-07-2000 06:23 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

WOW, an awesome feeling came there at the end!   I like it!
Butterflies_dont_cry
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4 posted 03-07-2000 06:41 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Danny and P.S. thank you for your views and for sharing them with me.

James,
You may know me better than I know myself.
Janet Marie
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5 posted 03-07-2000 07:23 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

HI to Butterfly...
welcome to passions...this is an emotionally strong and excellent poem. I just read your first post as well, your poems are VERY touching, I relate to the pain expressed in your words...I hope you find the healing in writing that I do. Come visit us over in Dark Passions...
and may I say you have such great taste in your ICON choice(smile)
take care,
janet marie

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie

Honeybee
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6 posted 03-07-2000 07:26 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee



My God, is this an amazing poem.  I am at a loss for words, simply because your poem is that good and emotional.  This poem hit home very hard, it's like you knew about my life and wrote it for me.  Wow!

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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7 posted 03-07-2000 07:33 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Melissa and Janet,
Thank you both, I open my soul when I write and let the poem form itself so I really can't take the credit, I am only the tool to release the pain and hopefully heal in the process.  When I write it gives me a chance to escape and in a sense to forget. I'm glad that you have been touched and I'm sorry that you have shared the same pain that lives within me.
busylisa_ca
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8 posted 03-07-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for busylisa_ca   Email busylisa_ca   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for busylisa_ca

Insightful poem. Wow, I don't know what to say other than thank you for sharing such graceful writing

busylisa
Butterflies_dont_cry
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9 posted 03-07-2000 10:12 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Busylisa,
I send thanks in return for allowing me to share my poems with someone other than myself   I can only hope that they can touch others as I have been touched by the poetry I have read here.
hoot_owl_rn
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"Or do you turn from me
because of what you hide in you."

Insightful...we all hide some things inside and what we see in others is often directionally proportional to what we see in ourselves. Nice job  

Welcome to passions  
Meadowmuse
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11 posted 03-07-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

This is an exceptional, expressive piece of writing, Butterfly. As for its content, I feel as though I know where you're coming from, perhaps. It's so difficult to keep that child in darkness, and sometimes even more difficult to allow her out. I have a poem here somewhere called "Forever Out" that addresses this subject, as well as many very gifted writers here who have written on the subject of accepting and loving one's inner wounded child. It can be a wonderful healing release, expressing your issues through poetry. Keep writing!

~ Claire
Butterflies_dont_cry
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12 posted 03-08-2000 06:32 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Hoot and Clair,
Thank you so much for welcome to passions and also your words of praise mean so much, in reading your own breathtaking poetry I'm honored that you liked mine.  
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


13 posted 03-08-2000 07:46 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

I'll add my welcome here, (ask everyone, I'm always late.)
Once again we come to the masques which people wear. In this you depict quite aptly the facade (we) wear in the presence of others. But you've also braved the waters and extrapolated it to show that oft times when we shade what lurks inside ourselves, we can also blind our sight to the beauty inside others. A veritable two-edged sword, seldom wielded properly. It's a shame to miss out on the wonders of another's soul, simply because we're so unsure of the glory of our own.
Well wrought poem here, applause from this corner of the assylum.
EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...


14 posted 03-08-2000 07:46 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Annother fabulous piece. Your work is open, honest, and full of feeling.I hope you will share more of your work.

It seems that we write for similar reasons, a form of escape. To open your soul and let the feelings flow I think is the only way.
First__Knight
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15 posted 03-08-2000 07:51 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

To be so open and giving in such verse is that of a true soul of sharing.  What a expression of sharing while in the end you bring out the want and the need of the sharing of the one of whom you speak.  Done with elegance and style.  Bring me more please  

 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.

Michael
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16 posted 03-08-2000 08:48 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

This is beautiful.  Your poetry speaks straight from the heart...leaves quite an impact.  I feel that maybe there is an innocent child somewhere in me too at times...only daring to come out in dream...This poem was powerful to me - but the last line most of all...wow!  A wonderful work.


michael
Butterflies_dont_cry
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17 posted 03-08-2000 04:12 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Christopher, Eagle_One, First_Night and Michael,
First of all let me say that I am not lumping you together as one for you each expressed individual views that made me so happy, not that you gave me praise because that is not why I write, but that you found something in this poem that you enjoyed and that made you feel common ground with it and with the feeling that surrounded it.  Thank you each for sharing your thoughts with me and making me feel welcome...if you only knew what that meant.
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18 posted 03-08-2000 06:03 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Butterflies~ your words come straight from your heart and touch mine. Wonderful poem! -SEA
 
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