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infinat3 sadn3ss
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somerset england

0 posted 2000-03-07 02:58 PM


The red light is on ,
but the power is down .
i re-try the switch ,
and i give it a little frown...

...still nothing ,
so i revert to silence ,
the only thing i hear is my own sobbing nonsense ,
and in the back of my mind
the words...
..."one day"
but for now ill keep those words at bay.

The sky is blue ,
but its getting dark .
and now the dog ,
begins to bark .

Im all by myself , im all alone
so i let out a littlie moan
The words "4 REAL" carved into my arm,
i have been caused so much harm .
I lay on my bed and begin to cry
i always end up aking myself why
why me , what have i done ?
where is this "black hole sun"?.
im ready now take me to bed
all this mess up inside my head .

if only the power was on....


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mystery
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since 2000-02-21
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1 posted 2000-03-07 03:42 PM


very original poem!, nice work
PREACH
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since 2000-02-07
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2 posted 2000-03-07 04:28 PM


I see a lot of ways to look at this poem.  Can you explain it a little for me please?
infinat3 sadn3ss
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somerset england
3 posted 2000-03-07 05:10 PM


thankyou mystery .

PREACH , id be glad to . well...actually i cant think of a specific meaning . i wrote it tonight (tues)after some emotional strife . the fist verse is kind of me thinking about my stereo not working and i suppose my own energy and the rest was what i had been doing and thinking . you can look at it any way you like , thats the beauty of poetry
thankyou for reading.
ill look out for you.

[This message has been edited by infinat3 sadn3ss (edited 03-08-2000).]

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
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england
4 posted 2000-03-08 06:24 AM


**Cabes,
I can't decide what to do...I want to scream, I want to cry, I want to tell everyone to go **** themselves...
This poem is like you wrote it FOR me....I have so much love and respect for you that I don't know what to do with it...I just hope I'm showing you some of it...
All my love.....< !signature-->

 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


[This message has been edited by mete out (edited 03-08-2000).]

infinat3 sadn3ss
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somerset england
5 posted 2000-03-09 07:34 AM


hi folks,
         im not being cheeky , i just thought i would put this back to the top , cos i want people to give me their opinions
thanks

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
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england
6 posted 2000-03-13 06:31 AM


Up to the top we go...

Hold on tight!


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

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