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mete out
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since 2000-02-16
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england

0 posted 2000-03-07 11:13 AM



We can't feel any kind of kinship now
not like we used to
because something has shifted
and so violently.

We're growing up
but so confusedly
because we want to hang on to our past
to our childhood
because in contrast to now it was all so beautiful.

There is so much in our heads
but nothing concrete or solid  
and therefore unsortable
Nothing seems complete or straightforward to us
it's all part of the tangled mess
laughingly passing for our lives.

We are too cowardly to face our problems
We just hide behind these useless words.



 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

© Copyright 2000 Louise Parsons - All Rights Reserved
infinat3 sadn3ss
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 85
somerset england
1 posted 2000-03-07 02:44 PM


hey babes,
          "its like all we are ever trying to do , is climb back up into the womb".do you agree ?. im sorry, ill read this one again soon , but ive got placebo on and i cant concentrate 'cos of the days activities.ill speak to you soon.
love ya
cabes

Thinker
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 8

2 posted 2000-03-07 05:47 PM


hey babe.
I know how your feelin inside..
I love you and I want you to just remember that everythin is oing to be ok and Im always here for you.
After tonihts talk i was really angry at your sister but I dont know what to do..
sometimes I feel helpless.. Like a sectator on your life.
I love you and I deerley wish that I could just take you away from everything, Always remember that your not on your own anymore.
your baby!

Thinker

 To think is a right
To know is to be too sure of your own exsistance

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
3 posted 2000-03-08 06:55 AM


***Cabes,
I long for the innocence of childhood...but, although it hurts, we have to accept what is thrown at us.
I'm sorry you're in pain.
I see so much of me in you and yet I still can't seem to help you.
I'm sorry.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
4 posted 2000-03-10 05:01 AM


***Baby,
You are not merely a spectator...you are a very active part in my life...I live to hear your words, your nuggets of wisdom....I am going to spend the rest of my life with you angel...
I will never be alone again babe, I know this and there is no need to feel helpless or for you to wish you coulld do more, because you and I both know you are doing all you possibly can for me...
I love you.   xxx


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

5 posted 2000-03-10 05:47 AM


I remember this feeling - sometimes I still have it...childhood is never appreciated until it is gone - though it can be rough for many, it is still precious I suppose.

Hugs.



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
6 posted 2000-03-17 08:50 AM


***Severn,
My childhood is so precious to me. It may not have been idyllic, but just about anything could beat the way I felt when I wrote this poem.
The hugs are much appreciated.    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Enola
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 138
England
7 posted 2000-03-17 09:05 AM


How did I miss this?  I'm familiar with the feeling.  I suppose in some way, we could blame the society that we live in, but what good would that do?  I think that everyone should have those precious, child-like moments.  I'm attempting to make my childhood last as long as I can, I don't suppose it'll make any difference.  Yet again, great poem.  For some reason, I always seem to identify with your wotk.

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

nona
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 139
Fla
8 posted 2000-03-17 09:10 AM


Beautifully said mete...You expressed your feelings well..I hope by now you realize that this was just one of the "passages" of time we all must go through as we pass from the security of childhood to an uncertain world.We profess to ourselves that we are grown up & at the same time fear & feel vunerable    nona
mete out
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9 posted 2000-03-20 08:30 AM


***Enola,
It seems we have a lot in common.
Some of our ideas seem to be similar too.
Thank you so much for all your replies and your support.
love lou   xxx



 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
10 posted 2000-03-21 04:45 AM


***Nona,
I must have missed this, sorry...
Thankyou for your kind and intuitive words.
It's greta to know that someone knows where I am coming from..  


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


AndreaA02
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 8
Corpus Christi, TX
11 posted 2000-03-21 05:01 AM


You deeply moved me with your words. There are obvioulsy many people that share your view. ...Very emotional...I loved it.
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
12 posted 2000-03-22 11:19 AM


I would love to be able to view life through the eyes of a child once more. No expectations, no fears, and reality what we make it  

 There are only two ages of people...living and dead and you all look about the right age to me :)

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
13 posted 2000-03-23 07:02 AM


***Andrea,
Thankyou for your kindness.
It is a comfort to know that you liked this poem.    

***Hoot,
It would be truely great to do as you say...
The signiture is fantastic by the way....Thankyou!


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


Tess
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
14 posted 2000-03-23 08:41 AM


Hi there

First thanks for posting a comment about my poem..as a newbie here it was much appreciated..reading the fantastic poems here made me feel a little overwhelmed..but your comments have encouraged me..
Second I have read this and your poem about "I scare myself" and i can totally relate to what you were saying...emotions can be so strong..and so depressing sometimes...and words are our way of coping with them..but remember there are always peple around who love and care about you...sometimes families can suck...lm sorry thats so..but I think friends are those we can count on...I wondered whether this was past stuff or recent..but going by other replies I'd guess its recent...good luck in working it out...
and i'm a real good listener if you need a semi stranger to unload onto !!  
take care
Tess

 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle


Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
15 posted 2000-03-23 09:59 AM


This is excellent expression of the passing from the days of uncomplicated youth to the expectations and obligations of becoming an adult. Wouldn't it be nice if there was a Yellow Brick Road that could take us back for a visit to childhood, if only for a day.
Good job with this piece.
Also, thanks for responding to my poem.
Danny

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
16 posted 2000-03-23 10:04 AM


***Tess,
Thanks for your extreme kindness.
I am glad you liked my poem and you are more than welcome regarding me replying to your poem, your work is absolutely beautiful...
You have no reason at all to feel over-whelmed..although I do know how nerve wracking the whole thing is in the beginning I am sure that you will find a very happy and fulfilling home here at Passions.

Check your e-mail!!


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


David2
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 407

17 posted 2000-03-23 10:45 AM


We are too cowardly to face our problems
We just hide behind these useless words.



I am not too sure that I agree that these words are useless but I loved your poem!
Keep it up!   David2

infinat3 sadn3ss
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 85
somerset england
18 posted 2000-03-23 02:27 PM


i have just seen your reply to me on this poem . to be honest i am now mad at you .
you know that i wouldnt be half as happy or as confident without the support you have given me over the past few months . i treasure you SO dearly as a friend , and you have never failed to be there for me . i hope you can feel the same for me . you are the only person i am glad to see and i always pray you will be there to greet me when i arrive at college .
well , now ive said that ....
...how the f**k do u manage to knock out so much good poetry?.
love ya
cabes

[This message has been edited by infinat3 sadn3ss (edited 03-23-2000).]

mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
19 posted 2000-03-24 09:10 AM


***David2,
Thankyou for your kind wods.
I wrote this poem for a friend and it seemed to me that we seemed to communicate through other peoples words, song lyrics etc. The line about useless words was a reflection on this cowardess.
I'm glad you enjoyed.    

***Cabes,
Darlin', darlin', darlin'.
Check your e-mail for a longer read...

I want to ask you the same question honey, I admire your talent and courage soooo much...

I love you too.
   Love Lou  xxx


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
20 posted 2000-03-28 04:10 AM


***Danny,
I'm sorry, I seemed to have overlooked your reply.
As ever, thankyou for your words. They are greatly appriciated.    
Maybe one day we will find the contentment we once took for granted in our younger days.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


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