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mete out
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0 posted 03-07-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for mete out


We can't feel any kind of kinship now
not like we used to
because something has shifted
and so violently.

We're growing up
but so confusedly
because we want to hang on to our past
to our childhood
because in contrast to now it was all so beautiful.

There is so much in our heads
but nothing concrete or solid  
and therefore unsortable
Nothing seems complete or straightforward to us
it's all part of the tangled mess
laughingly passing for our lives.

We are too cowardly to face our problems
We just hide behind these useless words.



 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
© Copyright 2000 Louise Parsons - All Rights Reserved
infinat3 sadn3ss
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1 posted 03-07-2000 02:44 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

hey babes,
          "its like all we are ever trying to do , is climb back up into the womb".do you agree ?. im sorry, ill read this one again soon , but ive got placebo on and i cant concentrate 'cos of the days activities.ill speak to you soon.
love ya
cabes
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2 posted 03-07-2000 05:47 PM       View Profile for Thinker   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Thinker

hey babe.
I know how your feelin inside..
I love you and I want you to just remember that everythin is oing to be ok and Im always here for you.
After tonihts talk i was really angry at your sister but I dont know what to do..
sometimes I feel helpless.. Like a sectator on your life.
I love you and I deerley wish that I could just take you away from everything, Always remember that your not on your own anymore.
your baby!

Thinker

 To think is a right
To know is to be too sure of your own exsistance
mete out
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3 posted 03-08-2000 06:55 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Cabes,
I long for the innocence of childhood...but, although it hurts, we have to accept what is thrown at us.
I'm sorry you're in pain.
I see so much of me in you and yet I still can't seem to help you.
I'm sorry.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
mete out
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4 posted 03-10-2000 05:01 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Baby,
You are not merely a spectator...you are a very active part in my life...I live to hear your words, your nuggets of wisdom....I am going to spend the rest of my life with you angel...
I will never be alone again babe, I know this and there is no need to feel helpless or for you to wish you coulld do more, because you and I both know you are doing all you possibly can for me...
I love you.   xxx


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
Severn
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5 posted 03-10-2000 05:47 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I remember this feeling - sometimes I still have it...childhood is never appreciated until it is gone - though it can be rough for many, it is still precious I suppose.

Hugs.



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
mete out
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6 posted 03-17-2000 08:50 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Severn,
My childhood is so precious to me. It may not have been idyllic, but just about anything could beat the way I felt when I wrote this poem.
The hugs are much appreciated.    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
Enola
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7 posted 03-17-2000 09:05 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

How did I miss this?  I'm familiar with the feeling.  I suppose in some way, we could blame the society that we live in, but what good would that do?  I think that everyone should have those precious, child-like moments.  I'm attempting to make my childhood last as long as I can, I don't suppose it'll make any difference.  Yet again, great poem.  For some reason, I always seem to identify with your wotk.

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
nona
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8 posted 03-17-2000 09:10 AM       View Profile for nona   Email nona   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nona

Beautifully said mete...You expressed your feelings well..I hope by now you realize that this was just one of the "passages" of time we all must go through as we pass from the security of childhood to an uncertain world.We profess to ourselves that we are grown up & at the same time fear & feel vunerable    nona
mete out
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9 posted 03-20-2000 08:30 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Enola,
It seems we have a lot in common.
Some of our ideas seem to be similar too.
Thank you so much for all your replies and your support.
love lou   xxx



 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

mete out
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10 posted 03-21-2000 04:45 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Nona,
I must have missed this, sorry...
Thankyou for your kind and intuitive words.
It's greta to know that someone knows where I am coming from..  


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

AndreaA02
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11 posted 03-21-2000 05:01 AM       View Profile for AndreaA02   Email AndreaA02   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AndreaA02

You deeply moved me with your words. There are obvioulsy many people that share your view. ...Very emotional...I loved it.
hoot_owl_rn
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I would love to be able to view life through the eyes of a child once more. No expectations, no fears, and reality what we make it  

 There are only two ages of people...living and dead and you all look about the right age to me :)
mete out
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13 posted 03-23-2000 07:02 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Andrea,
Thankyou for your kindness.
It is a comfort to know that you liked this poem.    

***Hoot,
It would be truely great to do as you say...
The signiture is fantastic by the way....Thankyou!


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Tess
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14 posted 03-23-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for Tess   Email Tess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tess's Home Page   View IP for Tess

Hi there

First thanks for posting a comment about my poem..as a newbie here it was much appreciated..reading the fantastic poems here made me feel a little overwhelmed..but your comments have encouraged me..
Second I have read this and your poem about "I scare myself" and i can totally relate to what you were saying...emotions can be so strong..and so depressing sometimes...and words are our way of coping with them..but remember there are always peple around who love and care about you...sometimes families can suck...lm sorry thats so..but I think friends are those we can count on...I wondered whether this was past stuff or recent..but going by other replies I'd guess its recent...good luck in working it out...
and i'm a real good listener if you need a semi stranger to unload onto !!  
take care
Tess

 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle

Danny Holloway
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15 posted 03-23-2000 09:59 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

This is excellent expression of the passing from the days of uncomplicated youth to the expectations and obligations of becoming an adult. Wouldn't it be nice if there was a Yellow Brick Road that could take us back for a visit to childhood, if only for a day.
Good job with this piece.
Also, thanks for responding to my poem.
Danny
mete out
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16 posted 03-23-2000 10:04 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Tess,
Thanks for your extreme kindness.
I am glad you liked my poem and you are more than welcome regarding me replying to your poem, your work is absolutely beautiful...
You have no reason at all to feel over-whelmed..although I do know how nerve wracking the whole thing is in the beginning I am sure that you will find a very happy and fulfilling home here at Passions.

Check your e-mail!!


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

David2
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17 posted 03-23-2000 10:45 AM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

We are too cowardly to face our problems
We just hide behind these useless words.



I am not too sure that I agree that these words are useless but I loved your poem!
Keep it up!   David2
infinat3 sadn3ss
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18 posted 03-23-2000 02:27 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

i have just seen your reply to me on this poem . to be honest i am now mad at you .
you know that i wouldnt be half as happy or as confident without the support you have given me over the past few months . i treasure you SO dearly as a friend , and you have never failed to be there for me . i hope you can feel the same for me . you are the only person i am glad to see and i always pray you will be there to greet me when i arrive at college .
well , now ive said that ....
...how the f**k do u manage to knock out so much good poetry?.
love ya
cabes

[This message has been edited by infinat3 sadn3ss (edited 03-23-2000).]
mete out
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19 posted 03-24-2000 09:10 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***David2,
Thankyou for your kind wods.
I wrote this poem for a friend and it seemed to me that we seemed to communicate through other peoples words, song lyrics etc. The line about useless words was a reflection on this cowardess.
I'm glad you enjoyed.    

***Cabes,
Darlin', darlin', darlin'.
Check your e-mail for a longer read...

I want to ask you the same question honey, I admire your talent and courage soooo much...

I love you too.
   Love Lou  xxx


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

mete out
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20 posted 03-28-2000 04:10 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Danny,
I'm sorry, I seemed to have overlooked your reply.
As ever, thankyou for your words. They are greatly appriciated.    
Maybe one day we will find the contentment we once took for granted in our younger days.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

 
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