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Alicat
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0 posted 2000-03-07 10:00 AM


"It's time," one said
As I was chained hand and foot
Led down the grey walk

The room is too bright
Eyes burned with afterimage
Of a comfy chair

Tubes and bottles wait
Needled lines waiting for me
Like transparent snakes

In the dark they wait
They, my final audience
Come to see me die

"Do you have last words?"
As I am strapped to the chair
Soft leather comfort

The snakes bite my skin
And the I.V. drip begins
"I am Innocent!"

The fire burns my veins
And I look through the mirror
At my audience

Fading fast I hear
The preacher intoning God
Dying as they watch

The audience cheers
"Justice has prevailed!", although
I was Innocent


Alicat the Persnikitty


 As I sit here dimly thinking
Watching modem lights a-blinking
Churning out poetic hash.
Lord, in all Your piety,
Help me keep my sanity:
Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat


© Copyright 2000 Alastair Adamson - All Rights Reserved
mete out
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1 posted 2000-03-07 10:16 AM


***Alicat,
A fantastic poem.
Deeply insightful...


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Denise
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2 posted 2000-03-07 11:25 AM


A tragedy. I'm sure it happens more often than we realize. Well written, Ali!

Denise

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3 posted 2000-03-07 01:34 PM


well written indeed, and sadly portrayed.

 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


RainbowGirl
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4 posted 2000-03-07 03:41 PM


I have to say I'm at odds with the death penalty although incidents involving children will always find me reversing that thought but there is a part of me that says...if we got it wrong, that is one decision that cannot be revoked and we do get it wrong from time to time and when there is an element of doubt...but then I see the death of an innocent child and I could murder someone myself...conflict, huh?

HUGS

Lost Dreamer
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5 posted 2000-03-07 04:02 PM


Excellent writing in this poem, even though it is sadder than sad. I don't even know how people can watch someone get put to death like that. It would not give me peace even if the person murdered one of my family, I would feel as though I were a murderer.
X Angel
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6 posted 2000-03-08 12:01 PM


Geesh! This was a bit on the dark side....should you repost in *Dark*? LOL
Good freaky poem

~X~

SEA
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7 posted 2000-03-08 12:08 PM


Alicat~ Wow. Sounds almost as though you were looking inside yourself, maybe judging yourself. This is a great poem! -SEA
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8 posted 2000-03-10 01:13 AM


This is scary! It could happen too....good poem...is this dead poet walking?
sonjes
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9 posted 2000-03-11 06:59 AM


Refreshingly original poem, Alicat.  I liked the dialogue thrown in to make it impact harder on the reader.  So dark, but true.  

  Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma

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