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Dark Angel
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0 posted 03-07-2000 06:10 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel


You

You
came
with love
and warmth
You jumped into
the tiny pool of love
stored within my heart
left there lonely, abused,
neglected and pulled apart.
Heated it through, and melted
down the blood dripping icicles.
Smoothed out all the Jagged edges
and hammered out the indentations
You polished the deep scratches
gave to me divine inspiration
and washed away the ashes
from burned interrogation
You cleansed my soul
filling me with light
with warmth and
joy, with hope
and with
Love.


Dark Angel
2000




 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge






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Severn
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1 posted 03-07-2000 06:33 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Maree, you have done so well with this - including the flow...  

And I envy your format - it is wonderful.

And these are the lines that get me:

You jumped into
the tiny pool of love
stored within my heart
left there lonely, abused,
neglected and pulled apart.

Well done sister mine.

K



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
JamesMichael
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2 posted 03-07-2000 07:07 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This is lovely dark angel and I'm glad that you have a special "you".    James
Butterflies_dont_cry
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3 posted 03-07-2000 07:13 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

You wrote this beautifully, and captured the true essence of the saving grace of true love.
Poet deVine
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4 posted 03-07-2000 08:57 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is wonderful! So hard to do and make it flow! Good job.  
Sven
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5 posted 03-07-2000 01:29 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Maree,
      I am continually AMAZED at the way your words can not only sound wonderful, but LOOK wonderful as well. . .

This again reminds me of the Concrete poetry of the 60's and 70's. . .and the words are indeed from the heart. . .

Well put my friend. . .

----------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

monique
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6 posted 03-07-2000 02:38 PM       View Profile for monique   Email monique   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for monique

It looks like a Christmas ornament
If you were talking about Jesus
Who shed His blood for us according to the bible
It would be an appropriate analogy
With the celebration of His birthday
Bringing inner peace and love in this world
You have the whole thing
Wrapped up in this meaningful poem


monique
Dark Angel
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7 posted 03-08-2000 07:06 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Sweet Butterfly, thanks so much. Thanks for your imput as well, I appreciate it.  

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jmlee, thanks  for your lovely reply.  
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b_d_c, thank you so much for your lovely reply.
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Sharon, thank you honey.  
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Why thank you Sven.  
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Monique, thank you.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


8 posted 03-08-2000 07:33 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Nice, good formatting and clever thoughts!
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 03-08-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

This is wonderful. It reminded me of a big waterdrop in it's presentation and very fitting for the poem  
EagleScorpion
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Here, Now, Forever


10 posted 03-08-2000 02:03 PM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleScorpion

hmm.. blood icicles..sucks being alone dosent it?
Dark Angel
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11 posted 03-08-2000 08:46 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Christopher, thanks so much  
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Ruth, Thank you my dear friend.  
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ES, Thanks  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


WhtDove
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12 posted 03-08-2000 09:47 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

DA, you've been writing some of the finest darn poetry! I love this! The format and all, tis excellent!!!
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