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In A Whisper Of Your Name

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Marina
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0 posted 03-07-2000 12:30 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marina

In A Whisper Of Your Name


In a whisper of your name
I feel my desperate defeat
In the shadow of your victory
Now my life sadly incomplete
Is this my destiny?


In a whisper of your name
I still feel your cold touch
The void in my hopeless heart
I had loved you so much
You used me right from the start


In a whisper of your name
I’m scolded by the flame
To you love was just a passing game
In a whisper

In a whisper of your name……

Marina Feb 26/2000

© Copyright 2000 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-07-2000 12:39 AM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

Sad, but written so well, enjoyed it very much.
Michael
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2 posted 03-07-2000 05:46 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I can't tell you how much I "felt" these words as I read them.  It's truly ashamed how loosely the word love is used these days - and the pain left to those who believed it true.  Beautiful, but sad.


Michael
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Truly, sadly, beautiful.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 03-07-2000 07:38 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Marina~
This whispers sadly, yet beautifully.
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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5 posted 03-07-2000 11:26 AM       View Profile for StarrGazer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for StarrGazer

Very well done, beautiful  
Sven
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Marina. . .

I could really feel the pain in this poem...I am sorry that you suffered so. . .

And I can still hear my own whispers.. .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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7 posted 03-07-2000 02:48 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Marina, this is a very saddly beautiful poem. True pain read from the heart.

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8 posted 03-07-2000 03:16 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I know its sad when you want to give so much and they want to give so little.   This is a beautiful flowing poem.    James
Marina
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9 posted 03-07-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Septsong: thank you very much

Michael: yes unfortunitly you are very right.

Sunshine,Marge and Starrgazer: thank you for your kind words.

Sven: You are truly my knight. You are so sweet to me,what would I do without you!

James: The pain that excisted in my heart has healed, as it has every time it has been broken. Better to have loved and lost....

James: You always have such kind words for me. Thank you
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10 posted 03-08-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

I don't know Marina. . . what would you do without me?

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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Love or the lack of it has probably caused more mental and physical pain than anything else. Someone once said "the one who loves the least controls the relationship". Sad that we never truly know how someone feels when words are tossed around.
Hope your doing alright.
Enjoyed the poem.
Marina
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12 posted 03-09-2000 11:44 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Danny, yes I think your right. It's funny how we stay always believing we can make the other change. But this was a long time ago and yes I'm better now ....thank you.

Sven, Sven, Sven, Sven......so many things come to mind and I'm not sure if I'm allowed to say these things here.

Marina
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Marina-This is a well written poem... It really allows the reader to feel the pain of being in a manipulative relationship--atleast I think it does..maybe I'm just relating to it though.  Anyway... I DID really relate to this poem and I think you did a lovely job portraying the way these things can make us feel.  Well done.
Dark Angel
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Marina, this is beautifully written, yet sad.
enjoyed the read.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Marina
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MyPenNameIsSam: Your asumption was correct.  It is unfortunite when we choose the wrong person to share our lives with.  Normally I would be glad you could relate to this ,but in this case I am saddened.  Thank you very much for you comments.

Dark Angel: Thank you for your complaint and I'm glad you liked it.

Marina
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Marina,
       then why not tell me in private. . . you know where I am. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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17 posted 03-10-2000 12:06 AM       View Profile for Compgirl   Email Compgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Compgirl

I have to agree..sad but GOOD!!!  
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The title itself flows so readily from the tounge, as if it were waiting years and years for one aspiring poet to unleash it upon the hearts of the many who have read it. I give you my condolences for your seemingly bad luck with the relationship this work portrays. Godspeed, blessed poet
Marina
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19 posted 03-10-2000 02:22 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Sven: What is it you would like me to whisper to you in private?


Compgirl and EagleScorpion: thank you very much for your compliants. They are much appreciated.

Marina
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Marina~
Really touching.
~*Marge*~


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Marina
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Thank you Marge!
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