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In A Whisper Of Your Name
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In A Whisper Of Your Name |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
In A Whisper Of Your Name In a whisper of your name I feel my desperate defeat In the shadow of your victory Now my life sadly incomplete Is this my destiny? In a whisper of your name I still feel your cold touch The void in my hopeless heart I had loved you so much You used me right from the start In a whisper of your name I’m scolded by the flame To you love was just a passing game In a whisper In a whisper of your name…… Marina Feb 26/2000 |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Sad, but written so well, enjoyed it very much. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I can't tell you how much I "felt" these words as I read them. It's truly ashamed how loosely the word love is used these days - and the pain left to those who believed it true. Beautiful, but sad. Michael |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Truly, sadly, beautiful. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marina~ This whispers sadly, yet beautifully. *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Very well done, beautiful  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Marina. . . I could really feel the pain in this poem...I am sorry that you suffered so. . . And I can still hear my own whispers.. . ------------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, this is a very saddly beautiful poem. True pain read from the heart. James |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know its sad when you want to give so much and they want to give so little. This is a beautiful flowing poem. James |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Septsong: thank you very much Michael: yes unfortunitly you are very right. Sunshine,Marge and Starrgazer: thank you for your kind words. Sven: You are truly my knight. You are so sweet to me,what would I do without you! James: The pain that excisted in my heart has healed, as it has every time it has been broken. Better to have loved and lost.... James: You always have such kind words for me. Thank you |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I don't know Marina. . . what would you do without me? ---------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Love or the lack of it has probably caused more mental and physical pain than anything else. Someone once said "the one who loves the least controls the relationship". Sad that we never truly know how someone feels when words are tossed around. Hope your doing alright. Enjoyed the poem. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Danny, yes I think your right. It's funny how we stay always believing we can make the other change. But this was a long time ago and yes I'm better now ....thank you. Sven, Sven, Sven, Sven......so many things come to mind and I'm not sure if I'm allowed to say these things here. Marina |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
Marina-This is a well written poem... It really allows the reader to feel the pain of being in a manipulative relationship--atleast I think it does..maybe I'm just relating to it though. Anyway... I DID really relate to this poem and I think you did a lovely job portraying the way these things can make us feel. Well done. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Marina, this is beautifully written, yet sad. enjoyed the read. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
MyPenNameIsSam: Your asumption was correct. It is unfortunite when we choose the wrong person to share our lives with. Normally I would be glad you could relate to this ,but in this case I am saddened. Thank you very much for you comments. Dark Angel: Thank you for your complaint and I'm glad you liked it. Marina |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Marina, then why not tell me in private. . . you know where I am. . . ------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Compgirl Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 85USA |
I have to agree..sad but GOOD!!! |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
The title itself flows so readily from the tounge, as if it were waiting years and years for one aspiring poet to unleash it upon the hearts of the many who have read it. I give you my condolences for your seemingly bad luck with the relationship this work portrays. Godspeed, blessed poet |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sven: What is it you would like me to whisper to you in private? Compgirl and EagleScorpion: thank you very much for your compliants. They are much appreciated. Marina |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marina~ Really touching. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thank you Marge! |
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