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Parker
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0 posted 2000-03-06 03:48 PM


I Slept with You last Night

It was quiet when we talked, alone.
You and me in the evening glow
I could even see a smile,
In the luminescent light

I really wanted to hold you
But knew I could not, at least yet
And your lips danced in my mind
With every word, that you said

You told of dreams and loss
All those changes in your life
And really, I listened very hard
But all I could think of was a kiss

You laughed at my simple jokes
So sweet to humor me so
And my heart would ache
With every one of your smiles

I touched your lips with my mind
So soft and warm, as I thought
I wanted more with every touch
But was afraid that you would run

When we lay down to sleep
I just held you in my arms,
kissed your shoulder and your neck
and saw our future in my dreams.


James Parker Haley   Mar 8, 2000





[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-06-2000).]

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Corazon
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1 posted 2000-03-06 04:09 PM


this is so beautiful...really love it  
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2000-03-06 04:32 PM


Very nice writing.  I think us poets can be very giving and understanding.  I hope this works out for you.  Sounds lovely.   James
Martie
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3 posted 2000-03-06 04:35 PM


Such tender thoughts James, and so well expressed.
sonjes
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4 posted 2000-03-06 04:37 PM


Absolutely, positutely beautiful.  Most women's desire, to be held in the arms of a man without complications, to sit and talk without worries.  You have stated everything so perfectly.  Ah, I miss those days...

  Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma

devina
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5 posted 2000-03-06 04:38 PM


Sounds like a beautiful night James...these things really mean the most...you're quite a man!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Marina
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6 posted 2000-03-06 04:55 PM


James this is perfect.  It had a beautiful flow and such sincerity to your words.  I might have get my kleenex box out yet. I liked the third verse the best.

Marina

CMGrimm
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7 posted 2000-03-06 05:49 PM


OK Buddy.....now you're really making things hard for the rest of us guys in here...all this talk of holding and kissing and snuggling...my wife is yelling in my ear right now..."WHY CAN"T YOU BE MORE LIKE THAT?!?!?"
She wants me to print it out and hang it in the bedroom....LOL....j/k

Very beautifully written piece James....very beautiful...

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

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8 posted 2000-03-06 07:10 PM


NIce romantic poem...

 "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb

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9 posted 2000-03-06 07:27 PM


Parker~
Purrrrrrrr !
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Parker
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10 posted 2000-03-06 08:11 PM


Thank you all for your comments. I'm just a hopefull romantic.

Parker

hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 2000-03-06 09:31 PM


Oh Parker...I got to second Marge on this on. Heck with the stuff in the adult section, give me this anyday to get me heated up...lol. I've yet to decide whether I'm a hopeless romantic or just plain hopeless. Lovely poem here, got this girl sighing  
Denise
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12 posted 2000-03-06 10:14 PM


This is romance at its finest! Well done!

Denise

Meadowmuse
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13 posted 2000-03-06 10:21 PM


"When we lay down to sleep
I just held you in my arms,
kissed your shoulder and your neck
and saw our future in my dreams"

...this is absolute beauty, Parker.

~ Claire

[This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 03-06-2000).]

Corinne
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14 posted 2000-03-07 12:18 PM


Very lovely,

Parker!

Corinne

Parker
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15 posted 2000-03-07 02:07 AM


hoot, Denise, Claire, thank you all.....


and Corinne... a sweet thank you.

Parker

Marina
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16 posted 2000-03-07 02:55 AM


The more I read it, the more I like it.  She is a very lucky lady.

Marina

Nurse Crachet
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17 posted 2000-03-07 05:21 AM


This poem would be a ladies dream come true. Something about the line,
"I touched your lips with my mind"
really got me, it sounded so beautiful, what a talent you have. I think it fair to say we all would love more.

Michael
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18 posted 2000-03-07 05:24 AM


*sigh*
This is beautiful and romantic...and all that mushy stuff.  Wonderful poem, James... read like a breath of fresh air to me. Truly, the heavens are shining on you, my friend.

michael

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19 posted 2000-03-07 09:45 AM


I like the way you wrote this totally without gender... gave it a more universal appeal... great!
Butterflies_dont_cry
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20 posted 2000-03-07 09:57 AM


This is so precise and with so much feeling, you captured the words of the heart with a breathtaking view.  Thank you for allowing your gift to be shared.
Corinne
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21 posted 2000-03-07 10:11 AM


What a poet you are, Parker!

Sung with an Irish lilt:

Oh sail with me to County Cork,
on a maiden voyage of gentle seas
and run thru the mire and the mists,
on a lover's mystical journey.

Cor

Parker
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22 posted 2000-03-07 04:59 PM


Marina, thank you again.

Nurse Crachet, I will do my best to comply.

Michael, I would love to say that that's 100 percent true. I keep a positive attitude toward the posibility. Only the future knows for sure, but I do believe that I am the crafter of my own destiny. Thanks for your kind words.

Rebel, Oh, there was lots of gender involved,
but I can see your point, from the readers perspective. Thanks

Butterflies_dont_cry, thank you for reading.

Corinne, You do the singing, and I'll buy the tickets. Have you sung many celtic songs?
Celtic music is very popular up here these days. Its so alive. There was a musical up here called River Dance, that I missed. Just, waiting for it to come back. I'm sure it was Celtic. Thanks for your sweet reply.

Parker


Dark Angel
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23 posted 2000-03-07 06:21 PM


This is beautiful, so tender, so Romantic!
Well Done.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



A Romantic Heart
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24 posted 2000-03-08 03:07 AM


The title caught my eye, and the poem caught my heart, very classy and romantic. I love the detail and the way you express yourself.
Very open and real!


 "Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove.
O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare



Parker
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25 posted 2000-03-08 10:03 AM


Dark Angel and A Romantic Heart, thank you very much for reading and liking.

parker

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