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I Slept with You last Night

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Parker
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I Slept with You last Night

It was quiet when we talked, alone.
You and me in the evening glow
I could even see a smile,
In the luminescent light

I really wanted to hold you
But knew I could not, at least yet
And your lips danced in my mind
With every word, that you said

You told of dreams and loss
All those changes in your life
And really, I listened very hard
But all I could think of was a kiss

You laughed at my simple jokes
So sweet to humor me so
And my heart would ache
With every one of your smiles

I touched your lips with my mind
So soft and warm, as I thought
I wanted more with every touch
But was afraid that you would run

When we lay down to sleep
I just held you in my arms,
kissed your shoulder and your neck
and saw our future in my dreams.


James Parker Haley   Mar 8, 2000





[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-06-2000).]
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Corazon
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1 posted 03-06-2000 04:09 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

this is so beautiful...really love it  
JamesMichael
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2 posted 03-06-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very nice writing.  I think us poets can be very giving and understanding.  I hope this works out for you.  Sounds lovely.   James
Martie
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3 posted 03-06-2000 04:35 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Such tender thoughts James, and so well expressed.
sonjes
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4 posted 03-06-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for sonjes   Email sonjes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sonjes

Absolutely, positutely beautiful.  Most women's desire, to be held in the arms of a man without complications, to sit and talk without worries.  You have stated everything so perfectly.  Ah, I miss those days...

  Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma
devina
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5 posted 03-06-2000 04:38 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Sounds like a beautiful night James...these things really mean the most...you're quite a man!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Marina
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6 posted 03-06-2000 04:55 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

James this is perfect.  It had a beautiful flow and such sincerity to your words.  I might have get my kleenex box out yet. I liked the third verse the best.

Marina
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7 posted 03-06-2000 05:49 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

OK Buddy.....now you're really making things hard for the rest of us guys in here...all this talk of holding and kissing and snuggling...my wife is yelling in my ear right now..."WHY CAN"T YOU BE MORE LIKE THAT?!?!?"
She wants me to print it out and hang it in the bedroom....LOL....j/k

Very beautifully written piece James....very beautiful...

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
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8 posted 03-06-2000 07:10 PM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Rosalind Palafox

NIce romantic poem...

 "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb
Marge Tindal
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9 posted 03-06-2000 07:27 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Parker~
Purrrrrrrr !
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Parker
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10 posted 03-06-2000 08:11 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Thank you all for your comments. I'm just a hopefull romantic.

Parker
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Oh Parker...I got to second Marge on this on. Heck with the stuff in the adult section, give me this anyday to get me heated up...lol. I've yet to decide whether I'm a hopeless romantic or just plain hopeless. Lovely poem here, got this girl sighing  
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12 posted 03-06-2000 10:14 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is romance at its finest! Well done!

Denise
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13 posted 03-06-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

"When we lay down to sleep
I just held you in my arms,
kissed your shoulder and your neck
and saw our future in my dreams"

...this is absolute beauty, Parker.

~ Claire

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Corinne
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Very lovely,

Parker!

Corinne
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hoot, Denise, Claire, thank you all.....


and Corinne... a sweet thank you.

Parker
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16 posted 03-07-2000 02:55 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

The more I read it, the more I like it.  She is a very lucky lady.

Marina
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17 posted 03-07-2000 05:21 AM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

This poem would be a ladies dream come true. Something about the line,
"I touched your lips with my mind"
really got me, it sounded so beautiful, what a talent you have. I think it fair to say we all would love more.
Michael
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18 posted 03-07-2000 05:24 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

*sigh*
This is beautiful and romantic...and all that mushy stuff.  Wonderful poem, James... read like a breath of fresh air to me. Truly, the heavens are shining on you, my friend.

michael
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19 posted 03-07-2000 09:45 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

I like the way you wrote this totally without gender... gave it a more universal appeal... great!
Butterflies_dont_cry
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20 posted 03-07-2000 09:57 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

This is so precise and with so much feeling, you captured the words of the heart with a breathtaking view.  Thank you for allowing your gift to be shared.
Corinne
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21 posted 03-07-2000 10:11 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

What a poet you are, Parker!

Sung with an Irish lilt:

Oh sail with me to County Cork,
on a maiden voyage of gentle seas
and run thru the mire and the mists,
on a lover's mystical journey.

Cor
Parker
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22 posted 03-07-2000 04:59 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Marina, thank you again.

Nurse Crachet, I will do my best to comply.

Michael, I would love to say that that's 100 percent true. I keep a positive attitude toward the posibility. Only the future knows for sure, but I do believe that I am the crafter of my own destiny. Thanks for your kind words.

Rebel, Oh, there was lots of gender involved,
but I can see your point, from the readers perspective. Thanks

Butterflies_dont_cry, thank you for reading.

Corinne, You do the singing, and I'll buy the tickets. Have you sung many celtic songs?
Celtic music is very popular up here these days. Its so alive. There was a musical up here called River Dance, that I missed. Just, waiting for it to come back. I'm sure it was Celtic. Thanks for your sweet reply.

Parker

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23 posted 03-07-2000 06:21 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

This is beautiful, so tender, so Romantic!
Well Done.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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24 posted 03-08-2000 03:07 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

The title caught my eye, and the poem caught my heart, very classy and romantic. I love the detail and the way you express yourself.
Very open and real!


 "Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove.
O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare


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