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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-03-06 01:34 PM


        I-95

I ninety five is alive,
It twirls and curls,
Over rivers and dregs,
On seven league boots,
On concrete legs.

Undulating passing flow,
A flood shunting blood,
Like a vein around bone.
Cloned cars, in mass,
Passing round, glass and stone.

Siphoning food like a whale,
Through baleen gates,
Feeding, depleting
By filtering booths,
Eating, excreting.

We are Jonahs swallowed,
Disgorged each morn.
Souffle, digested each day.
Surviving, arriving,
Thriving our way.

No longer do I, respire quagmire,
For I, conspired these old bones retire.


© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2000-03-06 01:42 PM


Sy, you describe gridlock with your usual charm ...and make an enchanting poem from rush hour...loved it!
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2000-03-06 07:11 PM


Martie,
Enjoyed your comment, thank you for the read. *L*

Denise
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3 posted 2000-03-06 09:20 PM


I gave up I-95, too treacherous. I wouldn't mind being retired myself, though! Great poem, Sy!

Denise

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4 posted 2000-03-06 09:58 PM


Seymour~
I recognize the grind of this road for sure.

How I can relate to the 'baleen' gates.
Being an admirer of Schrimshaw and after studying the Baleen whales ... this word
stirred me to comment on it.
You continue to amaze me.
Fascinating image, sir.
~*Marge*~


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Meadowmuse
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5 posted 2000-03-06 10:36 PM


Always ever
clever
from words
inferred
even more
stirred

when
heard

I liked this, Seymour...you're a pip.

~ Claire

Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 2000-03-06 11:03 PM


Sy, you are amazing
Claire, loved your response
Liz

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