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busylisa_ca
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since 2000-03-01
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0 posted 2000-03-06 11:56 AM


Dreaming of a Future

When the sun goes down
And the moon comes up
I feel a sense of goodbye.
All the world has turned around
right before my eyes.
Complication fulfills a dream for life
while it occurs to be so simplistic.

The flowers are budding
As the dark clouds disappear
Our future has brightned for another year,
But what will happen when the flowers
Die and the clouds turn into a shadowy black tear
All the expectations for the future
Will turn back to a desirable dream.

busylisa

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mystery
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since 2000-02-21
Posts 79

1 posted 2000-03-06 01:11 PM


I love this poem because at one point in my life, I was very confused about the future and what was to come out of it. So I can relate to your feelings. My comment for this poem is when the flowers die and clouds turn black, this is just a slow point in our lives or a turning point. When things die out, they always blossom better than the first time before, look forward to these times, for they are times to learn from.
Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
2 posted 2000-03-06 01:14 PM


Would like to echo what mystery said.  There is always a brighter day, if we keep looking for it.
Nice poem. Welcome to Passions.

[This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 03-06-2000).]

busylisa_ca
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since 2000-03-01
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3 posted 2000-03-06 03:49 PM


Thank you for a warm welcome into passions.  No one knows what the future holds unless it is discovered!
bboog
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 303
Valencia, California
4 posted 2000-03-06 05:38 PM


Nice!
best wishes,
bboog

twinsgd
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since 2000-02-13
Posts 416
Ontario,Canada
5 posted 2000-03-06 10:31 PM


Thank you for the inside look Lisa. You are working hard and doing fine, a very nice poem.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
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Michigan
6 posted 2000-03-07 12:19 PM


I've often asked this same question but not as graceful and touching as you did.  
Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
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Missouri
7 posted 2000-03-07 12:42 PM


Welcome to Passion, enjoyed this very much. Poems written from the heart are so special.
busylisa_ca
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since 2000-03-01
Posts 39

8 posted 2000-03-07 10:09 PM


Thank you to everyone who has welcomed me to passions.  Your responses are encouraging.





passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
9 posted 2000-03-07 10:23 PM


light at the end of the tunnel...yes!

 ~shadows dance by the light within~


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