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Alias
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 30


0 posted 2000-03-06 04:33 AM


she cries some nights,
her head resting in her palms
her eyes red and worn
she looks up to the psalms

she says "god, i need you now.
i know you're here for me;
won't you touch my heart
lord, i want to see."

stressful situations and busy days;
the combined effect is an unseen weight
upon her shoulders and upon her back
yet still she prays to change her fate

Her strength is a solid bar
melted, weak and worn.
my love for her grows ever more;
more so when the bar is torn.

her love for us causes many tears
more tissues and cheeks of rose
her eyes tell an intricate story
the impossibilities and the problems; all she knows.

When everything seems over
I just want you to know
That I’ll always be here
Just let those tears flow.

mum, i love you. you're the strongest person with the biggest heart. we all love you to bits.
Thomas

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AnthonyEV1
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 17
St. Charles, IL, USA
1 posted 2000-03-06 04:37 AM


That is so nice how you wrote a poem about your mom, I'm sure that if she reads it, if she hasent already, that it will bring a smile to her face. Great poem, and keep on showing your mom you care, I'm sure it brightens up her day no matter how bad it gets.  
mete out
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
2 posted 2000-03-06 04:45 AM


Thispoem is WONDERFUL!  
Your mum sounds incredibly strong....as do YOU. You are a beautiful person to both support your mum and to recognise her love for you.
Yoou and her are very lucky to have eachother.
Fantastic......  
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 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


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Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

3 posted 2000-03-06 05:31 AM


This is a beautiful poem, and I applaud the expression of your love for her.

Many of us, I think, can identify with how it feels to see their mother with head in hands, hurting. A horrible sight.

Well done - oh and welcome to Passions, Alias.





 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

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4 posted 2000-03-06 07:08 AM


Thomas~
Beautifully done.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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