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The State I'm In
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The State I'm In |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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THE STATE I'M IN < !signature-->I got a house in California, But my heart's in Tennessee. Yet more and more it's lookin' like Neither's the place for me. I have some family in Nevada, I had a dream in Arkansas. Yet daily I watch each slip away Through a memory flaw. My feet planted next to nowhere, Leave my mind but free to roam. Still no matter where Life takes me, It seems I never find my home. I've hitched a ride with Ambition. And I've rode the train of Rage. I saw Love die in fruition, Yet I still walk her timeless cage. The mile markers of Infinity Leading me further on. The destination is Serenity, But it seems Hope's already gone. Made a wrong turn somewhere in Texas, Not really sure where I've been since. The highway is Destitution, But the toll is Innocense. No, I never realized the price A man might pay to dream. Till I crossed the line from Denial To forgotten self-esteem. Till the stars above looked foreign, And the streets came without name. Till I wandered the night's desert Bearing but this cloak of Shame. Till the rivers ran melancholy, Till the sun of Blackness shone Across the Valley of my Heart Leaving me to die cold - alone. By the peeling grief of Starkness, Or the soul it bared within. Eyes ever adapting to Darkness, Never realize what state I'm in. Michael Anderson 'Tis true, Love lasts forever, Only her memory slips away. [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-10-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Michael. I'm searching too. Now you got me listening to Highway 61 Revisited. James |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Excellent, excellent, excellent poem. Wow. Seriously - this one had such a chill of loss...I am left shivering - fantastic Michael.  K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Michael~ This haunting poem wanders wherever the four winds blow. I am in awe of your ability to draw a map of emotions you've visited. 'The mile markers of Infinity Leading me further on. The destination is Serenity' Hope serenity is just up the road. You are amazing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
I really like this one. Keep up the good work. One touch of nature makes the whole world kin. -William Shakespeare |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
There you go again - with all your talent rolled up in yet another good'n..  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
You never fail to awe me with your ablity to write your feelings. I wish I was able to do so. I can always seen to touch my own sorrow when I read your work. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow...guess I will have to steal marge's word..but haunting describes this perfectly...great work |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow Michael...this is impressive |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Sounds to me like you are in the state of confusion. Keep up the excellent work Michael, this was superb. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Snif....whiping eyes...I'm sorry, this moved me to tears. It's all too familiar. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Someone once said it is the journey, not the destination. Hauntingly beautiful, Michael! Come on, this train's not waiting! Corinne |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
How's 61 sound James? I think I'll be o.k. if I stay off 40 and 80 for awhile... Never can tell though. Severn, ditto on the shivers thing...you do that to me a lot you know. Marge, I certainly hope so, too, but which way is it back to the road? Marilyn, there no greater achievement for a poet. Mistikman, most definately. Munda,  I didn't mean to make you cry. O.k., really, I did. But I'll never cop to it.Corinne, that would have been Stephen Tyler of Aerosmith - have you seen that guy? I mean up close, seen him? Yeah, it's been a journey alright...LOL Seriously, got the train ticket right here, I ain't missing out on the rest of it, don't worry. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
No, I never realized the price A man might pay to dream. Till I crossed the line from Denial To forgotten self-esteem. Till the stars above looked foreign, And the streets came without name. Till I wandered the night's desert Bearing but this cloak of Shame. Till the rivers ran melancholy, Till the sun of Blackness shone Across the Valley of my Heart Leaving me to die cold - alone. By the peeling grief of Starkness, Or the soul it bared within. Eyes ever adapting to Darkness, Never realize what state I'm in. M, this is such exceptional work...you evoke such emotion with your imagery alone...then add to it your expressions of loss and pain... leaves me weak and in awe...once again... jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Just follow the I-10, Incredible Michael... serenity is at mardi gras, learning how to smile again. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very impressive writing, Michael. Well done! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This reminds me, almost, of one of Gunslinger's pieces, but with your own signature "feel" to it. I like it very much, and now I think I'm going to find James and see if I can listen to Dylan with him. Good writing, Michael. ~ Claire |
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