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Tan
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since 2000-03-05
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0 posted 2000-03-06 01:27 AM


Never in motion, I move without pause
Unjustified actions yet always with cause
Achieving perfection with infinite flaws
Deceitful, intriguing, eternally yours



© Copyright 2000 Tan - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 2000-03-06 01:30 AM


Short - but intriguing.  love the ending....


michael

Severn
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2 posted 2000-03-06 06:23 AM


There is so much underlying this piece - I like it! Like Michael I am intrigued.



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 2000-03-06 10:42 AM


SO much said in so few words....there is nothing wrong with being brief at all when your thoughts run deep  
Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
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4 posted 2000-03-06 09:05 PM


The conflicting phrases make this an interesting piece. Enjoyed it.


devina
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Cali
5 posted 2000-03-06 09:12 PM


Short and to the point...very well put!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Denise
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6 posted 2000-03-06 10:18 PM


I think it takes great talent to say so much with few words! This is great!!

Denise

Toyy
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Reno Nv.
7 posted 2000-03-07 06:51 PM


Wow!! Awesome! I love this piece, MORE MORE!!
So short so much!
Gil

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