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Fly Upon the Wall

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Mistikman
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0 posted 03-05-2000 08:59 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mistikman

Upon this wall I perch
Seeing and hearing all
For her beauty I search
My heart it does enthrall

Seeing that which I cannot touch
At times it seems too much
Why am I forbidden in her world
She made mine become unfurled

So I sit here and observe
As she smiles and laughs
How could she have the nerve?
I feel she is my other half

So I sit here, watching from a distance
Her unaware of my existence
Completely removed from her life
Forced to sit back and watch with strife

Seeing her happy without me
Makes me want to crawl
Over to her and voice my plea
But alas, I am just a fly upon the wall
© Copyright 2000 Travis Welton - All Rights Reserved
busylisa_ca
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1 posted 03-05-2000 09:28 PM       View Profile for busylisa_ca   Email busylisa_ca   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for busylisa_ca

Excellent poem. Don't feel so bad because you are not the only person who has experienced this.  Look ahead to the future and you will no longer feel like a fly on the wall!

from busylisa
Michael
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2 posted 03-06-2000 03:04 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Oh Jeeze that is a painful place to be.  hard not to just fly off that wall and pester the heck out of them too, I bet.  Can relate, Mistikman.  Good poem.


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Severn
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3 posted 03-06-2000 06:34 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Well done...and a hurtful situation to be sure.

Nicely expressed.



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life enriches writing'
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Poet deVine
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4 posted 03-06-2000 07:59 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Interesting rhyme scheme..and a good poem. Keep your chin up or someone will swat that fly on the wall!  
passing shadows
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5 posted 03-06-2000 10:07 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

Mistik, I know how ya feel  
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 03-06-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

You caught me with this title...I've often wanted to be a fly on the wall...but in this case, not a good thing to be, eh?  
Mistikman
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7 posted 03-06-2000 05:55 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

busylisa_ca- The future is hard to see when all I can see is her... Thank you...

Michael- Oh don't I know it. I used to talk with her all the time, but I agreed to stop trying to get her to like me, because it was hurting her every time she rejected me, so now all I can do is sit back and watch her enjoy life... Thank you...

Severn- Thank you

Poet deVine- It would be grande if someone would swat me and put me out of this misery, heh.

passing shadows- Thanks

hoot_owl_rn- Oh, it feels like about the worst place to be right now. I have the same Calculus class as her, so I anticipate and dread going there. I want to see her, but I know seeing her hurts more than anything else. Thank you.
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8 posted 03-06-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

Mistik, you keep making me think of the poems I've written...

Sometimes It Hurts

sometimes it hurts to look at you
knowing you won't love the way I do
but still seeing something you don't want me to see
like maybe you want but just can't love me

sometimes it hurts to sit beside you
drawn in too quickly, too deep inside you
knowing how wrong it is to be
inside of a world that isn't free

sometimes it hurts to think about you
when I sit in the darkness alone without you
and want so badly for you to come
to show me where I can get light from

sometimes it hurts but other times it doesn't
sometimes I think it was when it wasn't
or I think it wasn't when it was
but I'll keep holding on because

there's no other like you near or far
I like these things the way they are
I say I'll leave but you know I won't

sometimes it hurts...sometimes it don't.



 ~shadows dance by the light within~

Mistikman
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9 posted 03-06-2000 10:08 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

passing shadows- And again words fail me. Thank you. Your responses to me are no short of excellent  
Songbird
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10 posted 03-07-2000 12:54 AM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

Funny I should find this poem here, after just the other day reading about fly spies, the future of  spie  tactics and thinking how I had often wished to be a fly on the wall but thinking in reality this might not be such a great thing. Next thing we know we might even be allowed a private thought, and that is scary..
Mistikman
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11 posted 03-07-2000 04:26 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Septsong- Well, im not really talking about spying or anything like that. I am talking about being forced into that position, where I am not allowed to take part in her life, and all I can do is watch from a distance. Thanks anyway though  
 
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