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poetFemmeFatale
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0 posted 2000-03-05 06:49 PM


~  Oh to feel the Passion  ~

Oh to feel the passion
in the wind of sultry breeze
basking in a brand new sun
To my chest I draw my knees
lay my head on them to rest
as I close my eyes & sigh
breathing deep the air of you & me
and smiling to the sky...

Oh to feel the passion
in the wind of sultry breeze
To be tossed upon the waves
to be sailing on the seas...
Lay my head upon the sand
as I close my eyes & sigh
breathing deep the air of yesterday
my dreams go flitting by...

Oh to feel the passion
in the sultry breeze of you
I have yet to kiss your smile
I have yet to know it's true...
Lay my head upon your whisper
as I close my eyes to dream
breathing deep - the scent of love
All my faith, you do redeem.

March 5, 2000


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Poet deVine
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1 posted 2000-03-05 07:09 PM


Oh, to read the passion you write.... this too is excellent, Femme....very good writing.
Loneheart
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2 posted 2000-03-05 07:29 PM


truly beautiful

 Loneheart

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3 posted 2000-03-05 08:11 PM


PoetFemme~
Very, very sultry.
I like the feel of it.
~*Marge*~


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4 posted 2000-03-05 10:35 PM


I know just the place. . .

Love this one Femme. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Tony Di Bart
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5 posted 2000-03-05 11:31 PM


Great read.

Your passion rang loud and clear and I could hear the sound of that ocean. But most
of all I like that you lay your head upon his whisper.  Wow that one line made the whole poem form me.  For me everythinfg else in the poem was there to take me to that line.


Thanks for posting.

 Death makes angels of us all
and gives us wings
where we had shoulders
smooth as raven claws

Jim Morrison

Christopher
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6 posted 2000-03-06 01:27 AM


Sigh...when you go girl, you go girl! Bravissimo Gen, another hit!
poetFemmeFatale
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7 posted 2000-03-06 11:13 AM


Thanks to everyone, and nice to meet you Tony!  Thank you for the really nice reply!  And to er.....
Christopher - - I sense some of that sarcasm from you sir, that I truly miss!     You're the only guy I've ever known who can say something that makes me want to get in a *ring* with, and do a few of my kickboxing moves on!!  ROFLMAO  No mercy.....

Danny Holloway
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8 posted 2000-03-06 11:24 AM


Oh, that sultry breeze.  Let those soft winds blow.
Very nice pFF, I also liked "lay my head upon your whisper".
Soooooooo nice!

PoeticKnight
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9 posted 2000-03-06 12:08 PM


i can't quite put my finger on it, but this one really speaks to me. I feel the words and the atmosphere, very sensual and calming at the same time. Wonderful lines...every single one.
Craig
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10 posted 2000-03-06 06:58 PM



I like this one too!!

In fact if I was to choose between this and the last one, this one would win (just). I think it's the knee and chest bit that swung it.  

Craig

 Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.


January Flowers
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11 posted 2000-03-06 08:47 PM


Okay, pFF...
I'm of the female gender, so
unlike the replies of Mr. Danny
and the other masculine poets,
my view on this writing are from a way
different perspective...
THANK GOODNESS, RIGHT?
This was a great poem, enjoyed the repitition of the 'sultry breeze' thing,
and the line that 'got me' was the one where you pull your knees into your chest and lay your head to rest...
I SOOOOOO relate to this poem,
and often find myself absorbing all of nature's passions...allowing for a clearer conscience and more tangible thoughts on that special person...

Wow!  You do have a way of writing
exactly what so many of us have felt.
Thanks!

devina
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12 posted 2000-03-06 09:07 PM


I think you had me with just the title Gen...

Lay my head upon your whisper...this is purely beautiful!!!! But I'm sure you know that!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Toyy
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13 posted 2000-03-07 07:13 PM


         ~  Oh to feel the Passion  ~

And I do! This is very beautiful, you have written from my heart!! I am new here and read quite a few poems, all of which I have liked, but this is my favorite, your writing is lovely...thank you!!

gil

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