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Serenaded To Sleep

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hoot_owl_rn
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Serenaded To Sleep

You laid your head
on my pillow last night,
snuggled up close
to my ear,
and began to sing to me.

Your song
soothed my mind
and I drifted off,
content in its melody.

I could feel your warmth
beside me
through out the night;
your breath falling
softly upon my neck;
and each time I woke,
you serenaded me
back to sleep
with your song.

When daylight broke
through the windows,
I reached to touch your body,
stroke your fur;
and once more
you began to purr.






 Have you ever noticed
That the words...
"Goodbye"
"I'm sorry"
"I love you"
Are so easy to pronounce
...Yet so hard to say
~Javan
© Copyright 2000 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-05-2000 08:46 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Ruth, you got my heart with this one, how precious the love of a dear kitty cat. That sound could serenade anyone to sleep.
Marilyn
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Beautiful Ruth. Nothing like that sort of song to relax you and send you drifting into a peaceful sleep. I loved the surprise ending.  
suthern
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3 posted 03-05-2000 09:13 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Awwww... I love this one, Hoot!!!! That serenade is wonderful, isn't it? *S*
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 03-05-2000 09:23 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Ruth !

You got me with the twist !
Here I thought you got lucky
with a balladeer !
(not to be confused with THE Balladeer)
(hmmmm !  He does profess to be a
wandering minstrel)?
LOL !
I really adore this !
Wonderful to see your humor, gal !
~*Marge*~


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hoot_owl: I liked this one lots.  
Honeybee
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Yet again, another beautiful poem.  You never cease to amaze me.  I loved the twist at the end, here I thought you were talking about a man, when instead you were talking about your cat, that is very sweet.  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee
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7 posted 03-05-2000 10:34 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ahhhh......this is so sweet! Precious! I love the twist at the end too!

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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Smiling and saying out loud, "this is adorable"
Liz
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9 posted 03-05-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot, You had me fooled and did it well. *L*
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Hey, Ruth! Sounds like a purr-fect relationship to me!! Just make sure it's not an alley-cat  


Excellent writing, btw  
wildbill58
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Hoot,i put you to sleep all the time!
bboog
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Hoot: This is a cute poem that might be even better with just a few adjustments. I think that you repeat the word "song" too much.
For example: Instead of
"snuggled up close
to my ear,
and began to sing to me."
Maybe:
"snuggled up close
to my ear
and hummed a lullabye to me"
This is your poem and I did enjoy it, then again, I am new here so maybe I'm being too direct. (Feel free to rip into my posts too- in this forum and the critical one.) Best of luck to you.
bboog
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What a funny twist at the end!  You took us down one road and quickly shifted gears!

I like that!

Corinne
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14 posted 03-05-2000 05:45 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

This is a keeper! Reminds me of my baby Tia...she was always such a comfort to me.
The poem was good when i thought it was a man, and it was excellent when i found out it was a cat!


 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."
                                      
                                 -Charles Brugnot





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hoot_owl_rn
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Everyone...thanks for reading and your remarks...glad you liked the twist.

bboog...hey, I listen to any and all comments posted on my poetry. Actually I really don't care a lot for this one, but considering my lack of inspiration as of late, right now I'll take any subject matter I can come up with. Feel free to make suggestions at will, I never mind.  

Michael
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Oh jeeze - you cat lovers can be so sneaky.  just give me a good old fashioned "stupid as dit" dog that's wants nothing more than to lick my face 24-7 and I'll be happy...LOL  Good poem, Ruth - ya got me!


Michael
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Nothing like it...nothing at all. Such comfort.

Wonderful, Ruth!

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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Great post Ruth...(of course, what else could I expect to see coming from u)..
I always deeply enjoy reading your work.

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
hoot_owl_rn
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Thanks everyone  
Corazon
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well lol, you did make me smile...I could no more sleep with a cat than a frog...but...lol this was great   loved it
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