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Forever

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Michael
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0 posted 03-05-2000 06:11 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

FOREVER


Seems my whole life I've been searching,
For something I saw once in a dream.
Walking along a long and twisted
Tale of inconsistent theme.

Seems my whole life I've been lonely,
Though people surround me flourishing love.
As if my heart could answer solely
To something set further above.

For Love is something I saw once,
Looking through a younger man's eye.
But Love it seems boasts restless wings,
I found her only flying by.

Yet stealing something from of me,
For which I'll ever pay the cost.
Love cut me and left me bleeding,
And Love left my soul lost.

Lost in the mists of eerie dreams,
Come but to torment the mind.
Dreams of Sweet Love escaping with
That part of me I never could find.

Now, after years searching about me,
I wonder, should I just look inside?
Within those giant walls of stone,
Where that wounded heart must hide.

That heart, itself, which once was stone,
Till a curse upon my name
Turned it to clay to lay alone
In hollowed-out pits of shame.

Perhaps an answer lies there,
Or clues to help me end this quest.
Something to make me whole again,
Lay this anxiety to rest.

So softly I approach the tomb,
Cutting the barbed-wire strands of pride.
Slowly rolling the stone away,
To take a look inside.

Everything is dark and gloomy,
Like a turned-off  T.V. set.
The air is damp and deathly cold,
I'm not sure what I've found, not yet.

Memory hangs upon the walls
Where blood still stains the floor.
For open wounds have never healed,
On a heart begging for more...

Curled up in the corner,
Cobwebs lingering overhead.
Playing chess with the emotions,
That with it were left for dead.

As shadows slowly move about,
There, paying me no heed.
The faceless images of yesterday
Paying Destiny's deed.

As standing face to face with them,
I Wonder why they won't awaken.
For are they not still a part of me,
If eternally forsaken?

I scream and yell and kick and cuss,
Never so much as turning a head.
Till I sight the glance of Sweet Romance,
Set cross-legged on a heart-shaped bed.

Whispering softly in a stinted voice,
Her painted eyes wild, yet trite.
An instant, color illuminates the room,
Then everything falls black and white.

Behind me I hear something slam,
As her soft lips whisper, "more!"
And I know the stone's resumed its place,
Pride guarding, heretofore.

As distant shades of laughter
Bring all sense to sharp incline.
Then fade unto the darkness,
In a voice that sounds like mine.

Saying, "Welcome to Forever,
The lonely catacombs in your chest.
Where notions serve time for thoughtless crime,
Where emotions are put to rest.

Your sentence is a simple one,
The rest of your life will do.
You're charged with having feelings,
You know you weren't supposed to."

Now I realize that part of me
That many years ago was torn;
Is just the prison of indemnity
For feelings far away forlorn.

Such a tantalizing name, "Forever",
Not quite what I was searching for.
A pit of confusion around my heart,
For abased emotion to explore.

A place for notions, such as I
In emptiness to be forgot.
Before we ever dare to dream
Of becoming conscious thought.

Still it's funny, though, In all my searching,
I guess I never really had a clue.
You see somehow I always thought Forever,
Was a place meant for me and you.

Michael Anderson




 'Tis true, Love lasts forever,
Only her memory slips away.







[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-05-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
INclan
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1 posted 03-05-2000 07:22 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

OUTSTANDING Mike!

Please tell me this is simply a poet looking at the opposit of himself and not true to life for you.

Although it is a longer poem, you held my attention all the way through. For me, the poem is well written and your subject well said.

Thanx for sharing.

INclan
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 03-05-2000 07:55 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Forever is a word of dreamers
Nothing stays the same
Except the moon and stars
And love that's whispering your name

But love, my friend, often comes
When we would least expect
And sorrow is the product
Of too much introspect

There is a sun that shines each day
Upon your weary head
And he may be asleep near you
In a little child's bed

If energy from all the grief
Were harvested and bound
And used instead to fill his day
With pleasant thoughts you found

You would find that you would heal
Much faster from the blow
For just his laughter heals the wounds
In ways you wouldn't know

And as for love, it cannot ever
Come from lover's dreams
For what's to be or not to be
Is not our will, it seems

The love and heartache slowly fade
The spirit's depth from pain is made

Liz

Forgot to say, this poem was captivating, and I like the darkness in the poetry.




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-05-2000).]
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Micahel...this is so sad  
They can only take from us what we allow them to, remember that my friend and chin up, okay?
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4 posted 03-05-2000 09:34 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Michael Anderson~

This is absolutely BRILLIANT !
You've a depth of feelings
from which to pull the most
intense of verse.

'Till I sight the glance of Sweet Romance,
Set cross-legged on a heart-shaped bed.'

What an image to behold !
I am a romantic that loves the term FOREVER ..
When the stone rolls away ...
you will find ~forever~.
Love you~
~*Marge*~

*Love Lizzie's poetic response.  


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5 posted 03-05-2000 09:57 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I cannot tell you how impressed I am with your talent..this is wonderful..but then all your work is! We all have a clinker now and then, but I've never seen one of your poems that doesn't seem like perfection! How do you do it!?  You are like the poet's poet! Your words can descibe the most haunted soul of any of us.... this is your year Michael. I can feel it....  
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6 posted 03-05-2000 10:01 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

Michael, this is very deep, very sad, and touching very close to a reality of my own. I can certainly relate to the shadows, darkness, struggling, confusion. The last line really hit hard.

*clapping hands*   brilliantly done!

 ~shadows dance by the light within~

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7 posted 03-05-2000 10:21 AM       View Profile for Compgirl   Email Compgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Compgirl

Wounds are hard to heal. I know that all too well. Just remember that GOD is guiding you. Your pain creates beautiful poems so maybe that is the good that is comming from your darkness. Remember to take a special time, the same time each day to say your prayers. The devil like to take us offguard. He does that well! You are in my prayers friend. You are loved by those that know your heart. I do hope that you remember that.  
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Simply exquisite!  What a sad, touching and beautiful poem.  I only hope that you can find some peace and find true love again.

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee  
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9 posted 03-05-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent writing, Michael! As always!  

Love yours too, Elizabeth!

Denise
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10 posted 03-05-2000 12:26 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Yet another masterpiece Michael. I wish I knew where you get such wonderful inspiration from. This poem had me captivated from start to finish.
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You really have a fantastic talent to write about your innermost feelings.   James
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Both pride and fear,
Do play a part,
In the slamming of the door.
Do not fear,
The light you see,
It can warm you,
Forevermore.

The light is patient,
Kind and warm,
Don't worry about time.
Always and forever,
Was not built in a day,
Watch light creep in your life,
And never fade away.

(Sorry about this...it isn't great and written quickly... )
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"Yet stealing something from of me,
For which I'll ever pay the cost.
Love cut me and left me bleeding,
And Love left my soul lost.
--------
As shadows slowly move about,
There, paying me no heed.
The faceless images of yesterday
Paying Destiny's deed.

As standing face to face with them,
I Wonder why they won't awaken.
For are they not still a part of me,
If eternally forsaken?

-------

Your sentence is a simple one,
The rest of your life will do.
You're charged with having feelings,
You know you weren't supposed to."

Now I realize that part of me
That many years ago was torn;
Is just the prison of indemnity
For feelings far away forlorn."

my god,Michael... the emotions expressed in this one takes my words and breath away...literally...jm

"we live in the light"...

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie

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14 posted 03-05-2000 10:16 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Few words can do proper judgement to the excellence of this poem. Excellent  will have to do.
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15 posted 03-06-2000 01:24 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

With words, you are a master. With feelings expressed, you are a king. You've an incredible gift m'friend for an outpouring. With words in rhyme you portray a sense of whatever you wish, enerringly. Bravo again my poet friend.
Michael
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INclan,  I wish I could tell you this wan't my "true to life" perspective of forever, but then I'd probably be lying now... Glad you liked the poem, anyway.

Liz, your poem was beautiful.  If it's true, I must have a pretty deep spirit by now...LOL Seriously,  thank you for the heartfelt words.

Ruth, They can only take what we allow them to, or what we openly offer   ...

Marge, I am a hopeless roamntic myself.  It was, indeed, intriguing to delve into the term "forever" as that is what this poem merely was - my perception of "forever".  I hope you're right, but that's an awful heavy stone and I'm an awfully tired man.  One may never know.

PdV, believe me I have my share of clinkers...LOL  I hope you're right about this being the year though - I am certainly pushing for it.

Compgirl, I remember that.  I have some of the best friends in the world out there always offering me support.  And I have felt much love out there for me.  Most importantly, God will always be in the lead in my life...I will never question where I am too much so long as I know where I am ultimately going.

Melissa, As I do, also.

Mistikman, I wouldn't exactly call my inspiration wonderful...LOL  You are more than welcome to it.  So glad you enjoy the work, nonetheless.  

Marilyn, I will bask in the light so long as it visible to me.

Balladeer, I hold a compliment such as that from you to be the highest honor.   TY

Dang, Chris - After a complimant like that I can only humbly assume - "You must want something!"  You know I'm coming up next week - what are you sucking up to me over?...LOL  Just kidding.  You, being the King of freeverse and gifted in imagery as you are, I am seriously humbled by your words.

Thank you one and all for the kind replies.


Michael

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17 posted 03-06-2000 02:03 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Such a tantalizing name, "Forever",
Not quite what I was searching for.
A pit of confusion around my heart,
For abased emotion to explore

Beautiful

Michael - I can see the effort that has gone into this and I am impressed. It is sometimes difficult to maintain the consistent beauty of phrase within a long piece - but this succeeds.

BIG well done from me.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
 
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