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Anybody else ever have one of these nights???

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CMGrimm
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0 posted 03-05-2000 01:40 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for CMGrimm

Sitting here
staring at a half
empty bottle
of some cheap whiskey I bought
to make myself feel brave...

Cigarette smoke in my eyes
making them feel tired and dry...

(or maybe that's from the bottle??)

I sit here
Wishing, that somehow my life
has been...
different.

Wishing, that somehow my life
could be...
changed.

(Turning up the bottle again....)

blowing smoke rings.

I look into the other room
and see you laying naked in my bed
on old dirty dry-rotted sheets...
I wish I knew who you are...wish
I knew your name...wish
I could remember how I met you last nite...
and wish I had never met you wherever I was...

I wonder how we made it back here?

(turning up the bottle again)
staring deep into my life through the bottom...
(cheap whiskey is a darn good magnifying glass...)


Realizing it doesn't really matter...
you'll be gone when I wake up again.


 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
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Poet deVine
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1 posted 03-05-2000 01:56 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

She replies!

I pretend to be asleep
But see you in the corner of my eye
Drinking, smoking and Iím sure
Just a little high

We had a little fun
Took away the pain for me
But now I wish for something
Something thatíll never be

At first I was excited
I thought maybe you were the one
Then realized that you
Were only in it for the fun

So I let myself be used to feed
your lonely ego tonight
Now I lay on sweat stained sheets
Knowing it wasnít right

I wait for you to nod off
Into your whiskey slumber
So I can quietly dress and go
Without leaving my name or number

As I tiptoe from your place
I glance back at your bowed head
Wishing I knew your name
Wishing words better unsaid.




[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 03-05-2000).]
Alicat
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2 posted 03-05-2000 02:03 AM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

*in a quiet awed voice* DAMN!!!!

Exquisite 'slice of life' poetry CMGrimm.
And leave it to deVine to create an excellent rejoiner.  

Alicat
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If only two people could communicate in real life circumstances as we can through our poety this world would be a much better place...of course...then we would have nothing to write about....

Thank you poet for the wonderfully poetic reply.

Chris.

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
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4 posted 03-05-2000 03:02 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

ChrisG~
Didn't have to have 'one of those nights'
to feel your 'bottled' pain.
Nope, it was all there ...
you write these tales well.
~*Marge*~

*PoetdeVine~
Loved your replied response.
~*Marge*~


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hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 03-05-2000 08:21 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Chris...I see, you leave us for a short while and come back and sit something like this in our lap. What can I say but WOW!! The imagery and feel of this was fantastic!!

PDV....what an excellent reply to a already fabulous post!!
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6 posted 03-05-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Ah, so life~true, Chris. Thanks for this one. And Poet deVine's reply very well done.

~ Claire
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7 posted 03-05-2000 12:02 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yes, well done, Chris and Sharon!

Denise
CMGrimm
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8 posted 03-05-2000 10:37 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks everyone....sorry to have been gone for so long...but I have been busy...as you can see...

CHris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
Marilyn
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9 posted 03-06-2000 12:21 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wow. I have never been in either of those positions but I can relate to the sentiments depicted here. Well done both authors.
CMGrimm
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10 posted 03-06-2000 07:04 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks everyone...and Im sure PDV will thank you also.

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
Nurse Crachet
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11 posted 03-06-2000 07:37 AM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

I have to say Wow too, this is just awesome writing from Poet deVine and yourself. I applaud both of you equally for a job well done.
CMGrimm
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12 posted 03-06-2000 02:43 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks Nurse Cratchett....and Im sure Pdv will thank you also....glad you could enjoy it...


Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
sonjes
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13 posted 03-06-2000 02:48 PM       View Profile for sonjes   Email sonjes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sonjes

hmmm...actually, in my younger year, i had nights like that, unfortunately.  Of course, PdV's interpretation I experienced before yours.  Sorry to say.  
Loved the poem, and welcome back. I had been wondering what you were up to.  Looking forward to reading more once again.

  Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma
CMGrimm
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14 posted 03-06-2000 02:54 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks Sonjes....sorry to have taken a little hiatus...hadda get busy on new projects.  just thought I'd stop in a little and see what was up and who was new.  Had to post a couple to let everyone know I still was breathing...lol...
ANYway...thanks for the nice replies...nice to know people are thinking of me.

Chris.

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
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15 posted 03-06-2000 04:51 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I think Chris should take credit for my poem, after all he inspired it!!! Thanks for the kind words!  
CMGrimm
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16 posted 03-06-2000 05:40 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks Poet-deVine....however it is you who are an inspiration to all of us in here.

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
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