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Anybody else ever have one of these nights???
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Anybody else ever have one of these nights??? |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA 
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Sitting here staring at a half empty bottle of some cheap whiskey I bought to make myself feel brave... Cigarette smoke in my eyes making them feel tired and dry... (or maybe that's from the bottle??) I sit here Wishing, that somehow my life has been... different. Wishing, that somehow my life could be... changed. (Turning up the bottle again....) blowing smoke rings. I look into the other room and see you laying naked in my bed on old dirty dry-rotted sheets... I wish I knew who you are...wish I knew your name...wish I could remember how I met you last nite... and wish I had never met you wherever I was... I wonder how we made it back here? (turning up the bottle again) staring deep into my life through the bottom... (cheap whiskey is a darn good magnifying glass...) Realizing it doesn't really matter... you'll be gone when I wake up again. Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
She replies! I pretend to be asleep But see you in the corner of my eye Drinking, smoking and I’m sure Just a little high We had a little fun Took away the pain for me But now I wish for something Something that’ll never be At first I was excited I thought maybe you were the one Then realized that you Were only in it for the fun So I let myself be used to feed your lonely ego tonight Now I lay on sweat stained sheets Knowing it wasn’t right I wait for you to nod off Into your whiskey slumber So I can quietly dress and go Without leaving my name or number As I tiptoe from your place I glance back at your bowed head Wishing I knew your name Wishing words better unsaid. [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 03-05-2000).] |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
*in a quiet awed voice* DAMN!!!! Exquisite 'slice of life' poetry CMGrimm. And leave it to deVine to create an excellent rejoiner.  Alicat |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
If only two people could communicate in real life circumstances as we can through our poety this world would be a much better place...of course...then we would have nothing to write about.... Thank you poet for the wonderfully poetic reply. Chris. Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ChrisG~ Didn't have to have 'one of those nights' to feel your 'bottled' pain. Nope, it was all there ... you write these tales well. ~*Marge*~ *PoetdeVine~ Loved your replied response. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Chris...I see, you leave us for a short while and come back and sit something like this in our lap. What can I say but WOW!! The imagery and feel of this was fantastic!! PDV....what an excellent reply to a already fabulous post!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ah, so life~true, Chris. Thanks for this one. And Poet deVine's reply very well done. ~ Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, well done, Chris and Sharon! Denise |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks everyone....sorry to have been gone for so long...but I have been busy...as you can see... CHris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wow. I have never been in either of those positions but I can relate to the sentiments depicted here. Well done both authors. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks everyone...and Im sure PDV will thank you also. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
I have to say Wow too, this is just awesome writing from Poet deVine and yourself. I applaud both of you equally for a job well done. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks Nurse Cratchett....and Im sure Pdv will thank you also....glad you could enjoy it... Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
hmmm...actually, in my younger year, i had nights like that, unfortunately. Of course, PdV's interpretation I experienced before yours. Sorry to say. Loved the poem, and welcome back. I had been wondering what you were up to. Looking forward to reading more once again. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks Sonjes....sorry to have taken a little hiatus...hadda get busy on new projects. just thought I'd stop in a little and see what was up and who was new. Had to post a couple to let everyone know I still was breathing...lol... ANYway...thanks for the nice replies...nice to know people are thinking of me. Chris. Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think Chris should take credit for my poem, after all he inspired it!!! Thanks for the kind words!  |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks Poet-deVine....however it is you who are an inspiration to all of us in here. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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