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The River

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Meadowmuse
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The River



Do you hear? A riverbank just beyond the night
Where morning pauses to unfold her light
And the river that rolls beneath the new day's sun
Whispers of love and of thoughts that are spun
Into shimmering threads, cascading emotions
Touch upon touch, hearts ripe with devotion
And just as the water's calm caressings will soothe
The most jagged of rocks into stones dark and smooth
Your words flow evenly over my barest of soul
as the flood of the river's deep scent takes control.

And for a moment I all but forget, precious lover,
That you lie on one bank, and I, on the other.


Dear LadyClaire



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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 03-04-2000 02:39 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Meaddow,
An exquisite poem, I would say an epoppe.
JamesMichael
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"And just as the water's calm caressings will soothe...the most jagged of rocks into stones dark and smooth" this is lovely.  And you are only a river apart.   So close yet so far away.  James
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Claire, this is lovely...the last two lines made me sigh...but then I thought of bridges.
Elizabeth Santos
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Claire,
I loved the twist at the end.
A superb poem, as always
Liz
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5 posted 03-04-2000 05:34 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Claire, this is so beautiful! Your poems always are!

Denise
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6 posted 03-04-2000 05:36 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Claire~
Such an exquisite longing.

I hear the moving waters of your heart,
flooding the mind with scheme.
Building bridges to love
now will be the lover's dream.
~*Marge*~


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7 posted 03-04-2000 07:31 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Claire
This poem has such deep meaning, very deep indeed
The riverbanks are covered in love's seed

Eine Traene faellt
Um niemals zu trocknen

A teardrop falls
Never to dry

Beautiful, sad and yet beautiful
((((you))))
L. & S.P.


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Compgirl
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Very Beautiful. Loved the ending!! Although the text is a little hard for these eyes to read.. ) Take care..
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Claire,
Its only a short swim to the other side, if you can't swim maybe he can.

Parker.... liked alot.
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Soft and beautiful, Meadowmuse.  This is a great one to read aloud, it flows wonderfully.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

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Thank you, Seymour...exquisite from you is exquisite, indeed.

James...yes, so close and yet so far...thank you, James.

Martie...thank you for reading this, and yes, sometimes bridges can be built.

Liz...thanks Liz, I'm glad you enjoyed this and the twist.  

Denise...thank you, I appreciate your reading them.  

Marge...yes, the longing is an exquisite dream. Thank you so much for reading and for your beautiful verse.

Helmut...Yes, love's seeds flourish and continue to grow
               on the banks of the river, where true hearts know.
Thank you for your poetic response.
(((you)))
L. and S. P.

Compgirl...Thank you...I'm sorry about the font! It doesn't look small on my computer...could be our graphics are set differently.. thanks so much for reading though!

Parker...the water is sometimes too wide to swim, but thank you so much for your encouragement. (and for reading!)

Alwye...I love reading poetry aloud, and listening as well. Thank you so much...I'm glad you enjoyed this!

~ Claire
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Mystical and magical, as all your poems are!

Corinne
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Wonderful piece Claire....beautiful to read this cool evening..

Chris
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Soft and beautiful, this reads like the gentle stream of which it is written  
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Lovely... and I like the twist. *S*
Meadowmuse
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Corinne ~ The mystical magical mood is what usually inspires me to write. Thank you for reading.

Chris ~ thank you, Chris. Sometimes poetry and the outside elements just seem to fit together, one inspiring the other, perhaps?

Hoot Owl ~ thank you...so glad you enjoyed it.

Suthern ~ thank you, for reading and letting me know you enjoyed it.  

~ Claire

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17 posted 03-05-2000 01:25 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Claire, you obviously put a lot of thought in your poetry and, doing so, cause your readers to think, also. This is no exception. Excellent work.
Mistikman
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This is excellent Clair. I would offer some advice, but seeing as I am in a situation just as perplexing, I will just leave you with Thank you. It was a treat to read this.
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wow this is incredible...sigh
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Wonderful Meadowmuse. . . you have indeed the gift for expressing the subjects of your name. . .

The river flows for all of us. . . you have captured that well. . . and it's nice to see your picture for the first time!

---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Meadowmuse
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Thank you, Balladeer. I do put a lot of thought into what I write, but sometimes wish I could just write fancy free without the thoughts, you know? Thanks for reading this.

Mistikman...thank you for the "thank you"    

Corazon...thanks for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Sven...This is the first poem of mine that you've read? Well, I thank you for reading this time...glad you survived the photo.  

~ Claire
 
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