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The River |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
The RiverDo you hear? A riverbank just beyond the night Where morning pauses to unfold her light And the river that rolls beneath the new day's sun Whispers of love and of thoughts that are spun Into shimmering threads, cascading emotions Touch upon touch, hearts ripe with devotion And just as the water's calm caressings will soothe The most jagged of rocks into stones dark and smooth Your words flow evenly over my barest of soul as the flood of the river's deep scent takes control. And for a moment I all but forget, precious lover, That you lie on one bank, and I, on the other.  Claire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meaddow, An exquisite poem, I would say an epoppe. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"And just as the water's calm caressings will soothe...the most jagged of rocks into stones dark and smooth" this is lovely. And you are only a river apart. So close yet so far away. James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire, this is lovely...the last two lines made me sigh...but then I thought of bridges. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Claire, I loved the twist at the end. A superb poem, as always Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Claire, this is so beautiful! Your poems always are! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Such an exquisite longing. I hear the moving waters of your heart, flooding the mind with scheme. Building bridges to love now will be the lover's dream. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Claire This poem has such deep meaning, very deep indeed The riverbanks are covered in love's seed Eine Traene faellt Um niemals zu trocknen A teardrop falls Never to dry Beautiful, sad and yet beautiful ((((you)))) L. & S.P. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Compgirl Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 85USA |
Very Beautiful. Loved the ending!! Although the text is a little hard for these eyes to read..  ) Take care.. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Claire, Its only a short swim to the other side, if you can't swim maybe he can. Parker.... liked alot. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Soft and beautiful, Meadowmuse. This is a great one to read aloud, it flows wonderfully. *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Seymour...exquisite from you is exquisite, indeed. James...yes, so close and yet so far...thank you, James. Martie...thank you for reading this, and yes, sometimes bridges can be built. Liz...thanks Liz, I'm glad you enjoyed this and the twist.  Denise...thank you, I appreciate your reading them. Marge...yes, the longing is an exquisite dream. Thank you so much for reading and for your beautiful verse. Helmut...Yes, love's seeds flourish and continue to grow on the banks of the river, where true hearts know. Thank you for your poetic response. (((you))) L. and S. P. Compgirl...Thank you...I'm sorry about the font! It doesn't look small on my computer...could be our graphics are set differently.. thanks so much for reading though! Parker...the water is sometimes too wide to swim, but thank you so much for your encouragement. (and for reading!) Alwye...I love reading poetry aloud, and listening as well. Thank you so much...I'm glad you enjoyed this! ~ Claire |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Mystical and magical, as all your poems are! Corinne |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Wonderful piece Claire....beautiful to read this cool evening.. Chris |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Soft and beautiful, this reads like the gentle stream of which it is written |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Lovely... and I like the twist. *S* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Corinne ~ The mystical magical mood is what usually inspires me to write. Thank you for reading. Chris ~ thank you, Chris. Sometimes poetry and the outside elements just seem to fit together, one inspiring the other, perhaps? Hoot Owl ~ thank you...so glad you enjoyed it. Suthern ~ thank you, for reading and letting me know you enjoyed it. ~ Claire |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Claire, you obviously put a lot of thought in your poetry and, doing so, cause your readers to think, also. This is no exception. Excellent work. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
This is excellent Clair. I would offer some advice, but seeing as I am in a situation just as perplexing, I will just leave you with Thank you. It was a treat to read this. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow this is incredible...sigh |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful Meadowmuse. . . you have indeed the gift for expressing the subjects of your name. . . The river flows for all of us. . . you have captured that well. . . and it's nice to see your picture for the first time! --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Balladeer. I do put a lot of thought into what I write, but sometimes wish I could just write fancy free without the thoughts, you know? Thanks for reading this. Mistikman...thank you for the "thank you" Corazon...thanks for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Sven...This is the first poem of mine that you've read? Well, I thank you for reading this time...glad you survived the photo. ~ Claire |
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