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LenMcC1
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 68


0 posted 2000-03-04 06:56 AM


If I fall will you catch me?
If I grieve will you console me?
If I smile will you smile with me?
If I love you will you love me?

Everything I know
Is nothing without a world to live in
Everything I feel
Is nothing without someone to touch me
Everything I see
Is nothing but a silhouette of a dream

Hope to love
Is not on my path
Hope to hate
Is somewhere on the way
Hope to be lonely
Is always a reality

Knowing the truth
Is a lie to myself
Knowing how to live
Is death to my soul
Knowing her
Is all I have

Everything I know
Is nothing without a world to live in
Everything I feel
Is nothing without someone to touch me
Everything I see
Is nothing but a silhouette of a dream


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INclan
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since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024
Indiana, USA
1 posted 2000-03-04 07:41 AM


Well done.  I liked the contrasts and the repeated refrain. Don't loose heart. Anything worth having is worth fighting for.....persistance pays off.

INclan

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-03-04 12:12 PM


Great poem! Well done!

Denise

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