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My Eyes Are Like Hands
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My Eyes Are Like Hands |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
MY EYES ARE LIKE HANDS 3/3/00 My eyes are like hands, firm, yet tender skinned, Holding you up from sinking softly, down And absorbing the senses taken in, As feet remain planted on solid ground Countless sights, and pleasures the eyes will bring, Empowered by sight alone to touch thee Held transfixed by a gaze unrelenting, Yet tragic, that the hands can also see The imprint of thy image, volumes speak, Of touches that I can furtively steal Across time, distance, a sensory feast, Through the eyes, my flesh can faithfully feel My eyes caress like hands across your skin Let me feel you like that, and take you in |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Nice rhyme and imagery i think. This piece has a true poetic feel. Good piece. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JML~ I like this ! 'My eyes caress like hands across your skin Let me feel you like that, and take you in' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is excellent. The flow was so very smooth, the message line great and I love the feel you gave to it by making the eyes touch...nicely done  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"My eyes caress like hands across your skin Let me feel you like that, and take you in" this poem takes me in...very nice...very!! I wish to see MORE "new ones"... stalk you later,  jmWhen you see through love's illusions, there lies the danger... And your perfect lover just looks like a perfect fool So you go running off in search of a perfect stranger While the loneliness seems to spring from your life Like a fountain from a pool. Jackson Browne |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
It's definitely a sign of talent when you can make leering seem graceful and poetic. Keep 'em comin'. I really enjoyed this.Mike |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Great to read, this was very enjoyable the poem that is.... Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Eyes can carry us to many a great places and your poem touched on the core essential of desire. Excellent writing I really enjoyed this one. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful, JML! Great poem! Denise |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Everyone, thanks. I really wasn't sure about the last 2 lines, but i think i will keep them in now. Thanks for telling me about them. I love bsquirrel's comment, it is leering only if it is unwelcome. *S* Happy Mardi Gras everyone. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
liked this, loved the ending... |
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