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Denise
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0 posted 03-03-2000 03:31 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise

Missing you will never
Depart from me
Still my core cries for you
To live
To be

Missing you still hurts  
So deeply within
Deep in this bottomless sea
My soul  
Still longs
To know

Your voice
Your touch
Your love

Missing you
Forever
Binds us
As one
Together



 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~





[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 03-06-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Denise - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 03-03-2000 03:49 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Denise...this is very beautiful. It's great to see you writing free verse and very well I might add  
Dark Angel
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2 posted 03-03-2000 03:50 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

WOW Denise, this is deeply beautiful! Loved every line!   Well Done!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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Presentation:  A+
Message:  even better than A+

Denise...this is wonderful. Simple, but not, which happens to be my absolute favorite kind!  Poems like this are so versitile to me, and the meaning can change with a "blink" of my mood...I really enjoyed this.  It's a keeper!
Honeybee
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4 posted 03-03-2000 04:39 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee



Denise:

    A beautiful and bittersweet poem.  This piece really hit hard because I am in this situation right now.  Thanks for writing this.

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee  
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5 posted 03-03-2000 04:39 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Denise~
I also like the free-falling verse
of this one.
So nice read.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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Alright Denise!  Very nicely done!
Michael
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7 posted 03-03-2000 05:40 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

  Beautiful words Denise.  I could feel everyone of them...


Michael
Nan
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Intensity of emotion at its best, Denise...
Nice job, my friend..  


[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-03-2000).]
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9 posted 03-03-2000 08:38 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Beautiful writing, Denise.
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10 posted 03-03-2000 08:47 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

How lovely! This really flowed! I like it.
RobertB
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11 posted 03-03-2000 10:58 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

very beautiful Denise.....I can feel this
Denise
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12 posted 03-03-2000 10:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you everyone! You all make me feel good about my first free verse poem! I'm glad you all liked it!  

Denise
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Beautiful. Enjoyed this one a lot.  It's quite different from your usual.  Very pretty.
-Cypher
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Denise I'm in awe of you, if this is your first free verse all I can say is that YOU ROCK....

 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks
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Denise,
I love this one.  You know the more deeply we love, the deeper we fall when it ends...why does it have to work that way?
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Denise this is so sad to have someone that you care for so much...their voice, their touch, and their love, and now they are gone.
I went thru a very dark period in my life when I knew that I must release someone that I was very attached to...for her sake...and for my own sanity.  I could imagine in my mind that I was holding on so tight that my claws were digging into her.  I knew that I must release her and I have...but it took me a long time to reach that place...and it was one of the hardest things I ever did but also one of the easiest.   James
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17 posted 03-04-2000 06:35 AM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

You did a wonderful job on this, I really like it.
Elizabeth Santos
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Hey, Denise! Prose and free verse! WOW! You are quite the writer. And all well done. This is beautiful
Liz
Denise
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19 posted 03-04-2000 11:03 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you all for your lovely kind commments! I'm glad that you all liked it!  

Denise
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Your writings always leave me wanting to write another myself.
This is yet another great display of your talent.
Thank you for the read dsnyder
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Just beautiful, Denise. So well expressed.

~ Claire
Denise
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22 posted 03-04-2000 05:22 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, RufffRyder and Claire! I'm glad you enjoyed it!  

Denise
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Denise: I liked this poem but feel that it's missing something. A simile perhaps? For example: "deeper than outer space" or "deeper than the blackest sea"? Hope this is helpful to you.
bboog
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Poignant and beautiful, Denise!

Corinne
 
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