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Nurse Crachet
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since 1999-09-27
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0 posted 2000-03-03 11:26 AM


I Touch The Flame

I touch the flame
upon the wick
of your candle
knowing
that's the closest
I'll ever be
to your heart.
It flickers in unison
with the pulse of my soul,
only my pulse beats faster
with the thought of you.
I watch the candle
as it's flame
floats me away
day dreaming
about the glowing smile
upon your face,
the intensity of your bright
spectrum personality
that lights up
even the darkest corner
of my mind.
As I return to reality
the flickering of the flame
has died
I go over and touch
the cold wick
and my heart stops beating.

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Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
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1 posted 2000-03-03 11:33 AM


intense...really great writing....whew...made my heart beat harder just to read....sigh
Denise
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2 posted 2000-03-03 12:31 PM


This is excellent writing, Nurse! Well done!!

Denise

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3 posted 2000-03-04 07:52 PM


Nurse C~
The flame still flickers ....
back to the top for another round.

I like this very much.
~*Marge*~


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HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
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4 posted 2000-03-04 07:59 PM


This really touched me deep
As the candle is a seed
To show emotions that I know
To know these feelings I cannot show

Well done, excellent writing

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


JamesMichael
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5 posted 2000-03-10 06:34 AM


Nurse this is excellent writing.  Just the right touch of romance.  James
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