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Senryu’s of Love--Separate But Together

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Parker
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Senryu’s of Love
Separate But Together


Vast spaces deny us
You inspires my heart songs
With those Irish eyes  …

On emerald Isle
Us running behind hedge groves
In afternoon rain   …

Stars join in night dance
Two waltz a candle lit sky
Irish eyes wink yes …

Lips seeking pleasure-
moist in delicious ventures
lost in throws of love….


James Parker Haley   Mar 2, 2000


So I thought I'd try and put together a
few Senryu or haiku's to make a poem of Love,
each being Separate But Together. Not sure if
I'm following the right format...

The title was never finished, but after reviewing, my comments above it was staring me right in the face.... I think poems just write themselves, I am just the pen?  




[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-04-2000).]
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1 posted 03-03-2000 12:13 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Looks good to me! A very original idea and you put it together so beautifully.

Marina
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These are beautiful!  

Denise
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Parker~
Format my fanny !
These are BEAUTIFUL !
I hope 'she' likes them.
I do.
~*Marge*~


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These are beautiful.  What a creative idea!
You certainly have a talent for haikus and senryus.  Keep it up!

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee  
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Parker, I don't know what "her" reaction is, but I'm melting.  *sigh* Perfect!
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Marina, Denise, Marge, Melissa , and Tara....
thank you. To melt a heart, then my work is done.

Parker
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Achingly beautiful, James, you've outdone yourself this time!

Corinne

I've never written a Senryu, looks somewhat similar to a Haiku?

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Corinne, Thank you Achingly.

As I was informed by another poets post on this site, in another poem. Haiku is about nature and Senryu is about the human experience usually with an ironic twist. It seems that they both use the same format, 5-7-5, or as some may not know what that means its
5 syliables - 7 syliables - 5 syliables.

Parker

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Parker...these are beautiful seperate or together  
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I have to agree those are nice either way
and speak books in just a few words

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.  



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Thank you hoot, and Helmut. I had some good inspiration, I look into the sky and see Irish eyes smiling.

Parker
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*devina sneaks into the room quietly...sorry I'm late with this one James!!*

I think the words and phrases you've used would be beautiful in any format...tis the feeling that counts right???

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Thanks devina, each have their own emotion.

Parker
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These are beautiful James...so few words say so much.
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~Dreams~
Rain hides starry lights
Warm drops clense a lonely soul
Dreams of Celtic Seas

Parker


Thank you Martie, I'm having fun with these.




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I think you have a talent for this sort of poetry James....then agian I'm your number 1# fan.

Marina
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Ahh, Parker

you are a true romantic!

Corinne
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Thank you Marina, I need all the fans I can get.

Corinne, hopeless romantic, but thank you.

Parker

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