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Senryu’s of Love--Separate But Together
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Senryu’s of Love--Separate But Together |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Senryu’s of Love Separate But Together Vast spaces deny us You inspires my heart songs With those Irish eyes … On emerald Isle Us running behind hedge groves In afternoon rain … Stars join in night dance Two waltz a candle lit sky Irish eyes wink yes … Lips seeking pleasure- moist in delicious ventures lost in throws of love…. James Parker Haley Mar 2, 2000 So I thought I'd try and put together a few Senryu or haiku's to make a poem of Love, each being Separate But Together. Not sure if I'm following the right format... The title was never finished, but after reviewing, my comments above it was staring me right in the face.... I think poems just write themselves, I am just the pen? [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-04-2000).] |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Looks good to me! A very original idea and you put it together so beautifully. Marina |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
These are beautiful!  Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Parker~ Format my fanny ! These are BEAUTIFUL ! I hope 'she' likes them. I do. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
These are beautiful. What a creative idea! You certainly have a talent for haikus and senryus. Keep it up! Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Parker, I don't know what "her" reaction is, but I'm melting. *sigh* Perfect! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, Denise, Marge, Melissa , and Tara.... thank you. To melt a heart, then my work is done. Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Achingly beautiful, James, you've outdone yourself this time! Corinne I've never written a Senryu, looks somewhat similar to a Haiku? |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, Thank you Achingly. As I was informed by another poets post on this site, in another poem. Haiku is about nature and Senryu is about the human experience usually with an ironic twist. It seems that they both use the same format, 5-7-5, or as some may not know what that means its 5 syliables - 7 syliables - 5 syliables. Parker |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Parker...these are beautiful seperate or together |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I have to agree those are nice either way and speak books in just a few words< !signature--> The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. [This message has been edited by HelmutB (edited 03-03-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Thank you hoot, and Helmut. I had some good inspiration, I look into the sky and see Irish eyes smiling. Parker |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
*devina sneaks into the room quietly...sorry I'm late with this one James!!* I think the words and phrases you've used would be beautiful in any format...tis the feeling that counts right???  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Thanks devina, each have their own emotion. Parker |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
These are beautiful James...so few words say so much. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
~Dreams~ Rain hides starry lights Warm drops clense a lonely soul Dreams of Celtic Seas Parker Thank you Martie, I'm having fun with these. [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-04-2000).] |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I think you have a talent for this sort of poetry James....then agian I'm your number 1# fan. Marina |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ahh, Parker you are a true romantic! Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Thank you Marina, I need all the fans I can get. Corinne, hopeless romantic, but thank you. Parker |
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