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The Reign of Rain
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The Reign of Rain |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
The Reign of Rain A house is a home, but the queen had her palace The king of pain now alone on the throne His lies and deceit the cause of her malice Lingering in loneliness, for his queen has flown Tarnished and tainted the left-handed jewel The sour storms of sin take the blame In ice cold sheets, congratulate the castle’s fool For he is the one that reigns the rain Marina Feb 22/2000 |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem, Marina. I can, unfortunately, relate this one to my past experiences. Well written! Denise |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
I loved the analogy here.....very beautifully told. Great job.  Bobbycat =^..^= ~~Blessed Be!~~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Yes very good Marina, I really like the rhyme scheme. Parker |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very poignat poem. Short, but definately gets the message across. Good job. Michael |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thanks to everyone, It is a little shorter then most but in this case it seemed to fit. Marina |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
well heh ... what's the use of a castle and kingdom ... if you can't rule as the queen ... fortunately ... my queen is still my princess Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Awesome! Corinne |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW! Loved this Marina, Well Done!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I think the length is just right with the ending being just due. Nice piece. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, this is great! Not a word wasted and excellently written. Love it! |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Rex: You must keep her very happy! Corinne,Dark Angel,Danny,Balladeer: Thank you, it's a little bit of a different style for me. Marina [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 03-04-2000).] |
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