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The Reign of Rain

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Marina
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0 posted 03-02-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marina

The Reign of Rain


A house is a home, but the queen had her palace
The king of pain now alone on the throne
His lies and deceit the cause of her malice
Lingering in loneliness, for his queen has flown


Tarnished and tainted the left-handed jewel
The sour storms of sin take the blame
In ice cold sheets, congratulate the castle’s fool
For he is the one that reigns the rain

Marina Feb 22/2000

© Copyright 2000 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-02-2000 11:47 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent poem, Marina. I can, unfortunately, relate this one to my past experiences. Well written!

Denise
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2 posted 03-02-2000 11:50 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

I loved the analogy here.....very beautifully told.  Great job.  

Bobbycat =^..^=


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Parker
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Yes very good Marina, I really like the rhyme scheme.

Parker
Michael
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4 posted 03-03-2000 05:31 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Very poignat poem.  Short, but definately gets the message across.  Good job.

Michael
Marina
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5 posted 03-03-2000 11:45 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Thanks to everyone, It is a little shorter then most but in this case it seemed to fit.

Marina
Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London


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well heh ... what's the use of a castle and kingdom ... if you can't rule as the queen
... fortunately ...
my queen is still my princess

Rex}<{{{{o>
Corinne
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state of confusion


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Awesome!

Corinne
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WOW! Loved this Marina, Well Done!!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Danny Holloway
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9 posted 03-03-2000 06:22 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

I think the length is just right with the ending being just due.
Nice piece.
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Oh, this is great! Not a word wasted and excellently written. Love it!
Marina
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Rex: You must keep her  very happy!

Corinne,Dark Angel,Danny,Balladeer: Thank you, it's a little  bit of a different style for me.

Marina


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