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haiku..... A Kiss
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haiku..... A Kiss |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
A Kiss Thunder in the mind madness engulfs the body wanton lips shall meet.  Parker (c)2000 [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-03-2000).] |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
James this is definately something very different from you. I like it. It's intriging. Marina |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Writing with the heart what the lip's intend complete in three small lines |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Woo Hoo! Pucker up, Parker! *smack* |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I don't know if this is true to the haiku form of 5-7-5, and whatever other rules apply, but its fun to write. Parker |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow Parker...that certainly speaks volumes  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Whoa ! You can just 'park-er' right here ! Great to see you playing ! ~*Marge~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Hoot, stop talking and keep kissing.  Marge, Oh I am a very playfull guy....... Parker |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Haleyja, 5-7-5 reads right to me. Well done. |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
I liked this. I do not know much about haiku either but it sounds right. You inspired me to try one. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
But not on the first date Rex}<{{{{o> I'm not ugly! I'm just visually challenged! |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
WELL DONE! I enjoy Haiku and am glad to see others practicing the style. Your form is just right by me. You will find that english poets often stray from the classical 5-7-5 format. However you choose to do it...the real challange is to pack as much meaning into as few words as possible. Again.....WELL DONE! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great Parker! Well done! ROFL Rex!!  Denise |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hiya Parker...I like, I like very much, I'm a fan of Haiku myself! Love came spring morning, rain sang in tune with thunder, found this kiss waiting. Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Seymour and KitKat, thank you, their fun to write. Rex.... sometimes the best kiss, is the first date kiss, or maybe its the challange of the first date kiss. INclan, yes meaning, packs and packs of meaning...... thanks. Corinne, waiting and longing.... Parker |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sounds good to me. Sums it up, short and sweet Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Parker, this is delicious...of course, "some" kissses defy description. ~ Claire |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Liz, thanks.... Claire, I believe that you are right, thats why they must be tasted. Parker |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've gotten quite good at this form I see!!! And don't worry, I'll wait in line for my kiss...I'm sure tis worth waiting for!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
devina, you don't have to wait in line, just lean over mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm smack. Parker |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
I think you have started a trend, dear. Inspiration is thy name: Honeysuckle red Nestled in creamy crocus Wating for the "bee" I don't know if honeysuckle can be red, but it fit, so oh well! Write more, we love it! Chinese fortune cookie say: There are many unexpected & thrilling surprises in store for you. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
sonjes, Wow that is so sensual, I like. Parker |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
as a member of the opposite sex who just melts with a deep sensuous kiss, I must say (on good authority) that this descibes it perfectly! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! |
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