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The Awakening

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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 03-02-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoeticKnight

A star shone, the truth was known
The mist parted, a plain I beheld
A bottomless well, an empty shell
Somewhere in time I awakened

In my hand once nothing, now a rose
Upside down, I turn it right
Through the seven seas I make my flight
From the land of despair to who knows

Still there is sadness as I wipe a tear
But I know I will never fear
Remembrance of melancholy days
Before was one, now many ways

Know not whence I go, only my wisdom grows
Madmen play on words and we all dance to their song
From hither to yon and beyond took oh so long
To mountain top I strive, shout to the crowd:
“I have arrived”

© Copyright 2000 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 03-02-2000 01:56 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

In my hand once nothing, now a rose
Upside down, I turn it right
Through the seven seas I make my flight
From the land of despair to who knows

Still there is sadness as I wipe a tear
But I know I will never fear
Remembrance of melancholy days
Before was one, now many ways
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this one is perfect, the rhyme flow is superb...and more sharp imagery...another new one?  I like it..MUCH...
stalking you still, jm

 When you see through love's illusions, there lies the danger...
And your perfect lover just looks like a perfect fool
So you go running off in search of a perfect stranger
While the loneliness seems to spring from your life
Like a fountain from a pool.

Jackson Browne

PoeticKnight
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2 posted 03-02-2000 02:25 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Nope janet. Still a high school poem. I might start putting the dates with them *L*. I really used to be embarrassed by them. I can see so much growth between now and then. Only 12-13 years, but still...
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