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In a daze

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Enola
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0 posted 03-02-2000 08:53 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Enola

How nice is it to be,
All alone, out by the sea.
The gentle crashing waves,
Merge together in a daze.

A lover lost is here tonight,
Who bravely stood up to fight,
The one thing that he loved;
Besides me.

How nice is it to be,
All alone, out by the sea.
How could you take him away?
My mindís in turmoil every day.

I curl  and shake and cry,
All because you let him die.
But yet for you I feel no hate,
Because for him I was just too late.


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mete out
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1 posted 03-02-2000 10:16 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

Wow.
This poem is amazing....tragic yet so beautiful.
The person that this poem is about must be very special to you....I am sorry that you feel so bad.I hope that by writing away some of your torment you can let go, bit by bit.
My heart is with you.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
Enola
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2 posted 03-02-2000 11:28 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

I wrote the poem after being reminded of a plot from a book I read a long time ago.  I was trying to write from the main character's point of view. unfortunatly, it is too similar to certain situations present in my life.  Thank you, your sympathy is graciously accepted.
infinat3 sadn3ss
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3 posted 03-02-2000 05:18 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

debs ,  who is this about ? . please tell me its no'one i know . im not making suggestions but please come to me to talk if you ever need to , ill always listen , however stupid or insignificant you may think it is .
             LOVE FOREVER
                         mike
ps , the bear looks like bobo (simpsons)
pps , "although things in the present seem bleak , never forget to look to the future , you never know what it will bring (me)
angelswing
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4 posted 03-06-2000 11:26 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Great stuff, like cabe says, if you need to talk, shout my name, I will hear your call and 'answer quite slowly, the girl with calidoscope eyes' . Do you know that song because like diamonds, you and your poetry are precious, L.Of.L .
Tom .
P.s. That gives me a good idea for a poem, I'll write it tonight when I can't sleep . And show you tommorow when it's light again.
  


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
Thinker
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5 posted 04-04-2000 05:34 AM       View Profile for Thinker   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Thinker

This is a great poem.
It must have hurt to empathise so much with the plot that you describe.
A wonderful poem none the less.


 To think is a right
To know is to be too sure of your own exsistance
EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...


6 posted 04-04-2000 07:53 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Yes this is tragic, but I also think it has a feeling of....(I'm not sure if these are the right words here) peace and acceptance. I guess. I like this very much, thankyou for sharing this.

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien
Enola
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7 posted 04-04-2000 08:54 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

Thank you both!  
Thinker - It was a rather painful, because in ways the storyline was similar to my life at that moment.  I suppose that made it easier to write.
Eagle One - peace & acceptance, yes, it is a feeling that you can't change the past.  Also, living with mistakes isn't always easy, but you've got to try.


 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
mete out
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8 posted 04-04-2000 11:21 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***debs,
~~Also, living with mistakes isn't always easy, but you've got to try~~
it is a great comfort to me to hear you say this...
keep on looking forward.
love lou  xxx


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


 
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