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Dark Clouds

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 03-02-2000 07:19 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Dark Clouds

Iíve witnessed many clouds before
That filtered out my light
But never have I seen one
That would reap the black of night

For there are valid storms in life
That are a vital need
To nurture well the spirit
And give rising to the seed

And I have been in wicked rains
That turned to pelting hail
And shook the earth to tremors
From the wild and blowing gale

I have no fear of thunderous storms
Dark clouds that come and go
For I can well defend myself
With tactics that I know

But there is an impending storm
With black and ghostly haze
That threatens to eclipse the sun
And darken all my days

It is a voodoo shroud of black
A dark and hovering curse
And never have I seen such cloud
Or known of any worse

And so I pray to God above
To give me strength of will
To weather this insidious storm
And fight off all the ill

If I can somehow make this
Blackening  mist to go away
I swear I will be thankful then
For every rainy day

Iíll dance with glee upon the wet
Iíll play a jesterís role
And look upon each tempest
As a blessing to my soul

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-02-2000).]
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Michael
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1 posted 03-02-2000 07:28 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

oooh, this one was right up my alley.  Love the dark overtone.  Wonderful poem, Liz.


Michael
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2 posted 03-02-2000 07:40 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, dear friend~

When threatening storms
should come your way
an umbrella of prayer I send.
That shelters you
safe and dry
until the sun shines again.
Love you ~*Marge*~



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3 posted 03-02-2000 07:43 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~Liz


This was great! I really loved the flow, symbolism, and imagery. You have a rare gift my friend...so glad you share it with us. take care,

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
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Excellent rhythm and rhyme  
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To prance in dance, and from joy to fly
when the darkest cloud of doom comes by
is a tale that a soul in fright might buy
And a lie for the self to relieve with a lie

But to sob and cry with eyes not dry
at the tidings riding clouds in the sky
are tears to rain from clouds that cry
in tests that attest for your soul up high

*

For black clouds dark, and white ones white
Ones press shadow, and the others pass light
Confusing the eyes is unwise, not quite bright
But more you do err judging Wrong and Right

Yes,

bad is bad and good is good
but that is often ill understood
as good to be had
and to the bad
to be rude

Where you cannot do without either
in your neighborhood


I pray for you


Captain

bobbycat
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6 posted 03-02-2000 01:25 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

Excellent work here....I loved the imagery of it all  

Bobbycat =^..^=


 ~~Blessed Be!~~
Martie
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Liz, this is powerful with a pulse that lives within you, and when you dance on that wet day, I will dance with you!!
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 03-02-2000 05:34 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Michael, Glad you liked this. Thanks

Marge, I know you're always there. Thank you

Aimster, Your compliments are very kind and are appreciated. Thanks

Wave. Thank you for taking the time to respond in poetry, as you did on the goose. poem. I'm not sure I understand all of it. The dark clouds are come into my life at times and create a lot of anxiety, and now they're back. I used the words voodoo and curse only to exagerate, not to express evil.
Thanks fpr your remarks

Bobby cat, Thank you

Martie, Maybe you should come here to dance. I don't have much luck getting to California. Thanks
Liz
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Such wonderfully descriptive work Liz. Some storms threaten to drown one's soul, and this is an excellent expression of that feeling. Take good care.

~ Claire
Mistikman
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10 posted 03-02-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Excellent poem Liz   I love the way you described the impending storm  
Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 03-02-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
The poem is excellent and I never cease to enjoy reading them. Love Sy
Denise
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12 posted 03-02-2000 11:33 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent poem, Elizabeth. I wish you fairer skies soon. HUGS

Denise
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13 posted 03-02-2000 11:42 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

More excellence from your pen, Liz. I wish you blue skies...
 
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