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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-03-02 05:42 AM


My poetic checks are bouncing!
There are no funds in the bank
I cannot borrow from anyone
To refill my empty tank.

So I went to the only place
I know will loan me muse
First National Bank of Inspiration
Is the lender that I choose

I drive up to the window
And talk into the speaker
The teller looks at my poems,
Which rhymes are getting weaker

I tell her that I’ve lost it
I’ve spent my last notion
I cannot write of mountains
Of deserts, woods or ocean!

She asked me ‘bout the last time
I deposited any thought to
Stretching my reflections
As any poet ought to

I confess that I still read,
Perusing every written word
To deposit into my account
Each idea, sensible or absurd

I feel I’ve overdrawn my muse
Used the stockpile of imagination
And now I’m bouncing poetry
For lack of inspiration

So all I ask Miss Teller,
Is a loan or two from this bank
I’d like to be prolific again
And fill this awful blank.

The teller turns to her boss
Whispering words quite low
Then answers through the speaker
That a debt I certainly owe

“You’re moderating a forum
of perfect passionate poetry
each poem contains some thoughtful
inspiration you can get for free

We recommend you read each verse
Accrue mental stimulation
For you have overdrawn your account
At First National Bank of Inspiration"


© Copyright 2000 Poet deVine - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 2000-03-02 05:47 AM


Oh Dear - well you finally got me laughing.  I hope your happy, it felt good.   You're wonderful PdV.  Don't ever change!  This was great.

Michael

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-03-02 06:46 AM


PoetdeVine~

If you're overdrawn,
then I'll gladly pay
any NSF charges
they send your way.

I truly believe
that you should try
the ATM of my bank
if you really want to cry !

Those banking folks of yours
are 'cashing in'
on this wonderful poem
from your pen.

This is the cutest 'rubber check'
I've seen bouncing here all month !
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


sonjes
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3 posted 2000-03-02 07:07 AM


Ah, a smile on this dismal morning!  Thank you, what a great way to start the day.
Nan
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4 posted 2000-03-02 07:21 AM


My verbiage too is overdrawn ~
My Word-Bank's in the red.
How do we put this in Re-Verse?,
Refilling empty heads?

Perhaps we can consort on this
Vast negative amount ~
Between us we can make some cents
We'll get a joint account!

Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 2000-03-02 07:31 AM


Laughing all the way through.
But I think your clever muse is still working
Liz

Enola
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6 posted 2000-03-02 08:19 AM


That was great, an inspiration! I feel the same way at the moment, hence the lack of new material.  Also, thank you for the e-greeting!
angelswing
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7 posted 2000-03-02 08:29 AM


A very clever poem, although, I never have this problem of inspiration, when I am lost for words I just take a long walk in the quite and peaceful atmosphere and breath deaply, if this doesn't work, I pear into the eyes of a loved one and let my pen do the work, hope you don't realy have a problem with finding words because your poetry is fabulous . And I want to read more,
Liked it loads .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

Poet deVine
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8 posted 2000-03-02 08:58 AM


Thank you all! If my poem has done nothing more than make you all smile, it's a success. Actually I was chatting with Mistikman about lack of inspiration when this hit me..so I am not really read for this bank yet....but I try to keep my balance current just in case..  

suthern
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9 posted 2000-03-02 09:53 AM


This is wonderful, PDV... and certainly succeeds in giving smiles!!!
RainbowGirl
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10 posted 2000-03-02 10:38 AM


I'm going to ditto Suthern..

HUSG

 I dropped a tear in the ocean
when it is found, I will stop loving you...

Mistikman
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11 posted 2000-03-02 10:44 AM


Excellent poem Ms. deVine    I am glad that our little conversation had such fruitful results   Inspiration failed to hit me a second time last night though   Keep up da good work!
hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 2000-03-02 11:06 AM


Please do tell me where I can find this bank.....certainly in need of it  
Martie
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13 posted 2000-03-02 06:44 PM


I'm in line behind Ruth..need some of that there inspiration...what a wonderful poem!
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14 posted 2000-03-02 07:44 PM


I do know what that's about. I think everyone shoots blanks at times. And those that enjoy writing are hit hard by the lack. It's good though that you have your humor, hang in. It all comes back.

 ~shadows dance by the light within~



HelmutB
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15 posted 2000-03-02 09:14 PM


Sharon this is marveless, and so thoughtful. I bet you can get a loan at any time at
"Passions First Poetic Bank"  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


WhtDove
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16 posted 2000-03-02 11:27 PM


Devine you'll never run out of funds! You always come up with something. And hey, you got Michael to laugh!  And me too! Great work!

 <*\\\><

There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins

Denise
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17 posted 2000-03-02 11:30 PM


This is wonderful Sharon! So delightful! I can certainly relate to this! Well done!!

Denise

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18 posted 2000-03-04 02:28 AM


This definitely had me smilin', much in the way one of my favorite (nonsexual) Prince lyrics does: "I cashed a check; the bank bounced." I think the same thing happened here, poor bank. Thanks for sharing.  

Mike

JamesMichael
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19 posted 2000-03-04 05:44 AM


Very nice.  It seems you have about a million dollars worth of inspiration in the bank so you will be set for awhile.  James
Nurse Crachet
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20 posted 2000-03-04 06:17 AM


This is excellent, I loved it from the first line to the end.
RobertB
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21 posted 2000-03-04 06:57 AM


hang on PDV.....it is the winter doldrums... just the lull between seasons I think....a rest between beats in the music of life.


Been there.......am there....done that... doing that.


Robert

[This message has been edited by RobertB (edited 03-04-2000).]

Pepper
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22 posted 2000-03-04 10:36 AM


Excellent PdV !!!!
Big smiles here too ....  

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