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Through with You

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John Yaws
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since 10-09-1999
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Texas


0 posted 03-02-2000 02:17 AM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

MY dreams have all now faded-
And I’ve come to realize…
I must have been mistaken,
When I looked into your eyes.
The love I thought I saw in there
Has proved to be untrue-
It seems the only thing in life
I cannot have is you.
I have the open spaces
Beneath the starry sky…
I feel the longing stir in me
Each time the wild geese fly.
The urge to pack my saddle,
Load up my truck and go…
To land another ridin’ job-
Or make some rodeo.
To sit beside some mountain lake
As sunlight lifts the dew-
And strum some sad old melody
And dream awhile of you.
Those dreams I find far better..
In them you are a queen.
Your voice so sweet and tender
Your words are never mean.
I guess those dreams of “might have been”
For me will have to do.
At least this way, you’ll never say-
To me, “I’m through with you”.



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Mistikman
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1 posted 03-02-2000 02:27 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Excellent poem Gunslinger. I like all the descriptive examples you give.
Saxoness
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2 posted 03-02-2000 11:50 AM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

Great poem, and the last line ends it perfectly

 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

Danny Holloway
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since 01-15-2000
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3 posted 03-02-2000 12:09 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Nothing sader of tongue and pen, then what might have been. (not mine)
Nice poem Gunslinger.  Saddle in the pickup headed for the Rodeo.  Sounds like a good plan.
JamesMichael
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4 posted 03-31-2000 05:33 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very lovely poem gunslinger...hope for the best for you on the romantic side..  James
mete out
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5 posted 03-31-2000 05:58 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Gunslinger,
One of the hardest things to face in life is a lost love, but the strength of your poem portrays a need to ccarry on with your life.
This is highly commendable.
        
Well done, a fantatic piece.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
Posts 9561
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6 posted 04-01-2000 11:21 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

GS, the only way I'm relating right now is feeling the pain of these words. Those words...I'm through with you...are very hurtful.  Another fantastic poem!
CherylLynnMckee
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7 posted 04-01-2000 01:03 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

You took a bad situation and turned it into a great poem..lovely versus..lots of meaning!

 
Denise
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8 posted 04-01-2000 05:52 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful and sad  

Denise
Elizabeth
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9 posted 04-01-2000 06:48 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Ditto the above comments. I love your work!

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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10 posted 04-01-2000 06:51 PM       View Profile for Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Email Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roniece Dawson-Bruce

Gunslinger - this has a lovely flow to it - I enjoyed reading it       Roniece  
Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 04-01-2000 07:00 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Well written, as always, and full of romantic wanderings, that i love in your poetry
Liz
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12 posted 04-01-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Awww...Gunslinger, this is simply beautiful.
What a lovely heart you have...she'll see, you croonin' cowboy, you!  "Hog-tie" her and read this to her!  

Superb work here once again.  You've my admiration.
 
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