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A Happy Poem(looks can be decieving)

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Mistikman
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0 posted 03-01-2000 10:29 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mistikman

After so many poems of heartache and of pain
I figured it was time for me to explain
For I have been going through a life quite hard
And scribing the story as if I were a bard

I have spoken many times of my loss
Things that had left me nothing but cross
Things such as love thrown asunder
Due to one of my horrible blunders

I have written of my difficult childhood
Living a life that no child should
Receiving my fathers irrational rage
At such an innocent young age

I have scribed of my grandmother's death
Where she lost hope and breathed her last breath
She left this world altogether too soon
Late in the darkness with only light of the moon

I have uttered of my endless depression
Speaking with truth and lack of discretion
I have spoken of horrors such as suicide
Because in you I chose to confide

Now I guess I should speak of something happy
Something joyful and hopelessly sappy
But I hope you all don't consider me rude
Because after all this I am not in the mood
© Copyright 2000 Travis Welton - All Rights Reserved
bobbycat
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1 posted 03-01-2000 10:45 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

On one hand, this poem makes me sad to think of all the things you've had to deal with in your life....but on the other hand, the last line brought a smile to my face and caused me to chuckle....please don't think me rude; I thought it was a great way to end this poem!  Excellent work!     

Bobbycat =^..^=


 ~~Blessed Be!~~
Poet deVine
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2 posted 03-01-2000 10:48 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I too liked the poem..and whether you intended it this way or not, you achieved your goal...you made me smile! Good job!  
sonjes
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3 posted 03-01-2000 10:50 PM       View Profile for sonjes   Email sonjes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sonjes

Ya know, I was feeling it and I was there, but the last lines, made me literally drop my head in disappointment for you.  You really had me rooting for you and then, it seems you saddened me.  But, you did get my attention all the way through, and got my emotion hyped up, and therefore I REALLY admire you for this poem.
Janet Marie
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4 posted 03-01-2000 10:51 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Mystik... write about what YOU want to write about..., write for your self...what you feel...and write to heal...
all I know is what ever you write you touch us.  take care, janet marie

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be...
Jackson Browne
*I miss you baby...
I love you...always.

Mistikman
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5 posted 03-02-2000 12:54 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

bobbycat- heh, thanks   My poetry is open to any type of interpretation you want. I am glad you found a humor in this piece I had not originally intended(however now that you say it I can see it, heh) I would never think anyone rude for saying what they think of my poetry.

Poet deVine- Again, thank you   I am glad that I can brighten your day with the darkest of poetry(ok, its not the darkest heh, Michael takes that award lately)   Thank you for your continual support  

sonjes- Well, I am glad that you enjoyed the poem, despite the minor emotional rollercoaster I put you on   Thank you.

Janet Marie- Oh, I do   I never write anything that I dont want to. My views are my views and no one will change them or make me write about anything different.   Thank you.    Oh, BTW, its Mistik, not Mystik  
chic
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6 posted 03-02-2000 01:54 PM       View Profile for chic   Email chic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chic

You know...this was a great poem and it had so much feeling (as does many of your others), but anyway...You put alot of heart and emotion into your poems and that's what makes them so great...But then again there is also the fact that there so far has not been any happiness in your life and if there has, there is more sadness than happiness so the happiness is basically overidden by the sadness and sorrow.  I feel ur pain and sorrow Mistik and I give u a HUGE HUG!!!! Cheer up...some day...you will find enough happiness to make up for all the sorrow that you have felt.

 "Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

[This message has been edited by chic (edited 03-02-2000).]
Corazon
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7 posted 03-02-2000 03:49 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

wow, it is incredible this place, these poets and readers with whom we are able to share our sorrow, and our smiles...am glad that you found us, and that you share...and I hope your writing helps you find a healing...so many of us here are writing for the same reasons...great poem
JamesMichael
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8 posted 03-02-2000 04:57 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I liked the message here.  Sometimes I'm happy and sometimes I'm sad.  I write where my heart takes me and hopefully my heart will take me to happiness a little more often and stay there longer and longer.   James
Mistikman
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9 posted 03-02-2000 06:17 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

chic- Thank you. There has been happiness in my life, but it seems to be few and far between all the pain I have had to feel. Thanks for the hug  

Corazon- Aye, I know what you mean. I dont know what I would have done if I had not found this place. You have all become a family of sorts for me. A place and people I can come to when I need some help, or just to be noticed. Thank you all, every last one of you  

jmlee12345- Thank you. I find if I try to write about something different than how I feel it comes out really bad. I have to be true to my heart, or I can not write.
WhtDove
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10 posted 03-02-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Yep, I agree. This is sad that all this has happened, but I too had to giggle at the end.
Denise
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11 posted 03-03-2000 12:48 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very clever writing. I enjoyed the way you ended this. I, too, am sorry for your pain.

Denise
tracie66
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12 posted 03-03-2000 04:23 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Great poem.... feel free to vent any kind of emotions here, we are all friends. HUGS
Mistikman
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13 posted 03-03-2000 10:48 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

WhtDove & dsnyder- Thank you

tracie66- Oh, I do   This seems to be the only place I can adequately vent my emotions. Im too much of a nice guy to blow up in real life  
christies heart
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14 posted 03-03-2000 11:15 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

This was a wonderful poem,not to mention it echoed so many of my thoughts as of late. The last line did not make me laugh at all. I am wondering now if that how it was intened. I saw it as clearly wrapping up much of the point. It is not only sad that you have experienced so much pain, but tragic. I speak from empathy and not sympathy. So from the same place, I say try to use such adversity to build strenth. That's all I can try to do, and the only sense I can make out of such issues. In anycase, It was a wonderful poem.

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


Severn
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15 posted 03-03-2000 04:45 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I think you're lucky to have such a form of expression to deal with it all - so use it, and don't worry about what anyone thinks - truly, just write from your heart.

Great work.



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Mistikman
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16 posted 03-03-2000 06:52 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

christies heart- I guess its all in the way you read the poem, or your mindset at the time. Whatever way you interpreted it, thank you. Whatever doesn't kill me can only make me stronger.

Severn- Thank you, I am, and I do  
hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 03-03-2000 07:36 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

This is a great poem   I really enjoyed it!
sandgrain
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18 posted 03-03-2000 07:57 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

Sharing your feelings in such a talented way, is an encouragement to others.  Thanks for sharing.
Balladeer
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19 posted 03-03-2000 09:21 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Personally, I think poets should write for themselves and, if others like it, so much the better.
Mistikman
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20 posted 03-03-2000 10:49 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

hoot_owl_rn- Why thank you   Much obliged  

a sandgrain- Your welcome, and thank you for reading  

Balladeer- I write for myself first, but once its written I have an unstoppable urge to show it off to others   Thanks.
Severn
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21 posted 03-06-2000 06:02 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

LOL - I like your honesty...

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
 
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