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Your Picture on the Mantle

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 03-01-2000 08:13 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Your Picture on the Mantle

Your picture on the mantle
Your bed already made
Visions of a childhood
That never, ever fade

Memories of a little boy
Always full of schemes
And in among the laundry
All those pockets full of dreams

Folded paper pictures
Drawn by little artist hands
Warriors and animals
Appeared at your command

And you, a little gentleman
Always stayed the same
Integrity, your hallmark
Artistry, your fame

This portrait of a childís face
Who now is fully grown
Looks like a little boy I know
The dear son of your own

And now I wait with open arms
As quietly I pray
For it is such a blessing that
Youíre coming home today

Itís just another gesture
A portrayal of your grace
That you would come this distance
Your father to embrace

Youíll give him words of courage
To fight his dreaded ill
Youíll give him strength to tread upon
The steps he must fullfill

A picture on the mantle
A bed already made
How can we ever thank you
For the honor you have paid

Elizabeth Santos



[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-01-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Temptress
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1 posted 03-01-2000 08:20 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

What a beautiful poem. I loved it.
I'm so misty eyed, that is all I can really think to describe it.  
RufffRyder
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2 posted 03-01-2000 08:27 PM       View Profile for RufffRyder   Email RufffRyder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RufffRyder's Home Page   View IP for RufffRyder

Your mind never stops does it?
You post one beautiful poem after another.
Im sorry for using the same words over and over again but "beautiful" is the only word that I know that describes your work.
Thank you again for the read (Queen)Elizabeth
Martie
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3 posted 03-01-2000 08:28 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Liz, the beauty of this loving makes me wish for my grown child who has not been home in years.   Your poem is full of your love.
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 03-01-2000 08:34 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
A wonderful poem, but then you are a wonderful poet. Love Sy
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 03-01-2000 09:14 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, my friend~
With the mother's heart
you've just given a wonderful
*hug* to your son.

I'm sure he gladly shares
one with you and his dad.
Bless you all.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Balladeer
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6 posted 03-01-2000 10:01 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

It appears that no event can evade your pen....thank God!  
Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 03-01-2000 11:01 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Temptress, Thank you for your kind remarks

Ruff (Hope you don't mind if I call you "Ruff") Thank you for your overwhelming compliments.

Martie, I'm always homesick for the one who lives far away. Thanks for reading all my poems. That in itself is a compliment

Sy, A wonderful remark from a wonderful friend. Thank you

Marge. You know as well as I that feeling of warmth when they walk through the door. Thanks

Balladeer, Every event is important and worthy of a poem. Thank you

Liz
Severn
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8 posted 03-02-2000 12:12 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Well Lizzy - how wonderful!

I'm glad you are having him home - and a lovely piece too...

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Mike
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9 posted 03-02-2000 12:13 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Our two youngest (twins) just left home this year.  Going from four children at home to none in a few short years.   Needless to say... your wonderful poem put me in a reflective mood, which is what all exceptional poetry should do; make one feel.
Michael
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10 posted 03-02-2000 05:50 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Liz, this is a wonderful poem.  As genuine as a mother's love, itself.  Heartfelt and warming.  A beautiful work.


Michael

kitkat
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11 posted 03-02-2000 11:07 AM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

My children too are grown and live on their own. There is no better feeling when they come home to visit. The hugs we exchange bring back memories for me. How they blossomed from young child into mature caring adults. Thank-you for sharing  

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You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat you better
You're gonna find, yes you will
That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King


Denise
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12 posted 03-02-2000 11:17 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful poem, Elizabeth. I am so glad that they are able to come home, especially at this time. HUGS

Denise
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13 posted 03-02-2000 11:35 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Elizabeth: I've been sitting here thinking that what I do doesn't matter... your poem convinced me otherwise. I know it wasn't intentional... but thanks for the boot in the rear! LOL
hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 03-02-2000 12:36 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Elizabeth....another from your hands to our hearts  
Sunshine
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15 posted 03-02-2000 01:58 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Elizabeth, you brought memories rushing back of times I visited my father during his illness - and the import I felt when mother asked me to photograph current pictures of the family to have enlarged so my father could see them all on his fireplace mantle.  I never knew what he was thinking after I accomplished this minor task, but now, thanks to you, perhaps this was it all along.  Thank you for your generous gift.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Elizabeth Santos
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since 11-08-1999
Posts 9405
Pennsylvania


16 posted 03-02-2000 04:59 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Kamla, Thanks, sweetie, for always reading and commenting. I know you are busy with your classes.

Mike, Your comment gave a little glimpse into your life. From 4 to none, huh. Well I'd call that culture shock. Thanks for your remarks

Michael, Thank you for your kind comments

KitKat, You know the feeling - Very warming. Thank you for sharing.

Denise, Thank you, our guardian angel

Suthern, It matters a great deal. It always matters, but especially when those back home are going through difficult times
Thanks for those comments

Hoot, Thanks so much, dear

Sunshine, Yes, I think this was it, you can't imagine the excitement before they come home, the joy they bring with them, and the happiness that goes on after they leave. A visit home goes a long way. Thanks, Sunshine

Liz

bboog
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17 posted 03-02-2000 06:49 PM       View Profile for bboog   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bboog's Home Page   View IP for bboog

Elizabeth: I'm new here and I hate to be the spoil sport, but everything in this poem was great until the last stanza. It currently reads:
A picture on the mantle
A bed already made
How can we ever thank you
For the honor you have paid

But if you think about it, "how can we ever thank you for the honor you have paid" sounds like you were begging for the President of the United States to show up and he did you a favor by doing so. I mean this reads like a son coming to see his father on his deathbed. So it is the son's duty to see his father, isn't it? I realize that I don't know all the family dynamics. Perhaps he was only his stepfather and they didn't get along. Anything is possible. Still think it would read better something like:
A picture on the mantle
A bed already made
Thanks for showing honor
You made your father's day.
In other words, don't make such a big deal in the last stanza over what is actually what every good son should do.
Good luck to you.
bboog
Elizabeth Santos
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18 posted 03-02-2000 07:12 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Bboog,
Thanks for your remarks. I am very open to comments on my poetry. However the way it's written is much more appropriate. "You made your father's day" sounds like a Clint Eastwood remark. It doesn't do justice to the recognition of the respect he paid his father, which is very important in Brazilian culture. It is expected, but also recognized and appreciated, and he came under difficult circumstances of his own. He truly honored his father. Thanks for commenting. I appreciate it very much
Liz
Kelly
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19 posted 03-05-2000 12:49 AM       View Profile for Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kelly

What a great poem....Needs to go back on top.
CMGrimm
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20 posted 03-05-2000 01:51 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

excuse me....I have to go call my parents...

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
Elizabeth Santos
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21 posted 03-05-2000 02:05 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Kelly and Chris, it is I who an honored by your comments,
Thank you
Liz
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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22 posted 03-05-2000 02:18 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

This is a beautiful poem.  You are a very talented poet.  I'm going to be watching for your work.

 
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