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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
The light I saw, At the end of the tunnel. Is now like a drop, At the end of a funnel. The hope I felt, That my dreams would come true. Became a mess, A mess noone could undo. I stoped the pain and misery, I thought I had fixed my problems, Only today did I realize, I have yet to finally solve them. I tried my hardest, To make myself glad. It's hurts so much, To be so sad. I can no longer cantrol the hurt. The way I feel takes over my brain. I feel powerless in my own demise, As it were if I was lying under a moving train. I will try again, Or will I cease. I wish not to try, I could do so with ease. Smart men know when to quit, But somehow they never do. I should learn to quit, Yes, that's what I should do. So today I stand, As I did the day before. I will not try, And it will hurt, evermore. [This message has been edited by Jone (edited 03-06-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Don't let the pain become too comforting... you're only robbing yourself in the long run. Been there - done that. Relate well to the frustration and the futility you're feeling. I can only offer a (hug) and a  michael |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
On a lighter note ... That light you saw at the end of the tunnel was probably a train ,so you obviously got off the tracks in time , or you wouldn't have written this . O.K. , what did you expect from a guy with a name like Dr. Moose ? , something serious ? Doc |
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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
So Often in poetry it is left to our imagination to tell what the poem is truly about... i would like you to try to interpret this message.... a challange to all... Jon E. |
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Mystykyl Junior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 32 |
a tunnel is like the life we live...it can end or turn at any time and we might not know it or it could be like a fork in the road the funnel is like your life ends and you go crashing down through the little hole at the bottom your hopes and dreams changed because of a choice you made and could be taken as a mistake you turned to something that you thought would solve your problems but it only created more and turned your life into a mess then you found out what you had to do to fix your life you ended up hurting and being sad when all you wanted was happiness now you feel like you cant change or control anything in your life so you get even more depressed now it feels like you could just give up so easily and die but at the same time you want to try you are trying to become a smart man and learn to quit the things that make your life so bad and make you so sad and hurt so now you just give up and let the pain hurt you instead of dealing with the real problem so i guess i have to say that this is about a life tyhat can either end or begin depending on how we live it... your poem is very intriguing Misty |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
The poem is about contemplating suicide. Am I right? If so, don't. Life may not be easy, but it's better than the alternative. If I'm wrong, then what's it about? |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
We focus on whatever our problem is and through our own interpretation of the situation...that isn't always how it is though...words and non-verbal communication can be misunderstood and often are...it takes a very commited relationship to continue asking through the hurt until a level of understanding is reached and then the tunnel is no more for light can then be seen... Hmmmmmm, it's gone midnight, time for bed said Zebedee... HUSG I dropped a tear in the ocean when it is found, I will stop loving you... |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Initial thought without reading the other responses: Love... maybe Suicide? |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
I think this poem is about the choices we have to make in life....whether to keep on fighting and giving our all or to throw in the towel. I got the impression of a battle within, struggling to do the "right thing" I also felt like the person in this poem feels there is a way out of the "mess" if only he/she can figure out exactly why they are feeling the way they are. I see the light at the end of the tunnel as being salvation. I may be totally off base here, if so Im sorry. But hopefully something I said made sense LOL. AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
wow, a few people think suicide... not at all... it's a complete lack of suicidal thought.. i dont' believe in suicide..i'm liking the responces.... some of you are really getting close.. i'll post the answer on saturday nigth |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
To me, it's about hope in a dead-end situation, holding on to hope, used as a numbing device, until it wears off. Then reality hits and still you cling to hope but really want to give up, contemplating which is best, and in the end, you think if you don't try, one way or another, you failed. Maybe you could be at a crossroad, and guilty for standing there, waiting, but in a way, you just want to sit down. ~shadows dance by the light within~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It's about trying to quit smoking. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I agree with PdV smoking or some other sort of addiction, hope it's not passions because that is not an addiction. It's way beyond that The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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January Flowers Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 209South Carolina |
Definately about the decision between Nike shoes or Adidas. Or....maybe a decision between "to eat another donut or not". Um, is it about a decision at all?  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Obviously a fumbly fingered handyman trying to fix the plumbing and now regretting you did not call a professional. James |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
I dont think this poem means anything more than a struggle of sorts. The specifics are different with everyone who reads it. It is all based on interpretation. For me this poem is about trying in vain for the love of a girl (or boy), but being rejected every time. It hurts to try, and it hurts not to. But thats just me. You, as the author, had an intended specific idea for the poem, but it is rendered moot by writing a poem so vague and not explaining Thats not really a bad thing, it makes us use our imaginations to come up with our own conclusions rather than just accepting someone else's. Am I right? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I think Michael and Amy are closest to my take...each time i read it ... this old song came to my mind... "baby, dont you work so hard for this prize you found... it will all be gone when you turn around... NOTHING lasts forever any way"...(not even the pain) Rick Roberts well, thats what my small mind came up with...now Im gonna hear that song in my head ALL nite...COOL  janet marieWhen you see through love's illusions, there lies the danger... And your perfect lover just looks like a perfect fool So you go running off in search of a perfect stranger While the loneliness seems to spring from your life Like a fountain from a pool. Jackson Browne |
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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
Some of you are doing well.. others... well they're interesting it's not an addiction.... in the sense of an addiction sorry but i already had my fill of doughnuts.. and i don't do plumbing.. i'm 18..... Jon E |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Mmmmm Well I thought it was about a distant love. Someone you saw up close but them drifted away from you until they were almost gone from your mind, but then I got the feeling that maybe they re presented themselves and so just when you thought they were out of your mind and view they appeared and the turmoil in your heart started all over again. May be it's somebody you know you can't have, but want desperatly...I don't know  the beating heart made me think LOVE as well...sorry if I'm wrongKeep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
One more day... Jon E |
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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
So as i promised this is what the poem was about The light at the end of the tunnel was hope and the drop of the funnel was the hope diminishing I decided that i had found a way to solve my problems but in the end it just wound up compounding to create more problems In the end i decided that i would still try to quit all that i had intended to quit.. even though it was going to hurt more to do so. it was about frienship and love the things i was trying to quit. specific friendships and a specific like but i have "seen the light" and have fixed my problems... for now... but don't worry... when it becomes a problem again and the pain comes back... you'll see it in another poem Peace Out Jon E. |
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