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Miss.Queeny
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since 02-26-2000
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0 posted 03-01-2000 02:50 PM       View Profile for Miss.Queeny   Email Miss.Queeny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Miss.Queeny

Ok, this is my first poem and I am nervous, you all seem to know each other.

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Withering hopelessness.
Words are all I am to you,                        
and I can not speak my
truth,
because I know,
all I am is empty,
hollow words of forgiveness.
For I speak only the echos you long to hear.

And the night seems so grotesque now,
because I fear what I will dream,
and I fear being awake,
as the world sleeps
and my God sleeps
and dreams of honesty.

How absurd,
to watch the flouresent archives and wake,
fresh with poison, to a different,
familiar ache.

Vuglgar displays of power,
like poetry to a starved society.
An eye - dramatic and dancing with passion,
glistens with rage and catches
the soul of it spectators in the wet mouth
of its pupil.

So I create a fire and burn my skin,
so I am not perfect and I am not beautiful.
And you told me I had never looked so
damn
beautiful,
as I did when I crouched with the flame.

Because I am not like them,
I told you,
and I told you I was not
going to lose my soul to a monster -
and you kissed me and said
' Wonderful hopelessness '
as we looked at the bodies burning houses.
Through our window which filtered
reality
and shielded us from
honesty.

*** There you go, I know it is long and I apologise for my spelling. I am but young.

Love, Peace and Apathy...MISS.Q xxx

© Copyright 2000 Miss.Queeny - All Rights Reserved
RufffRyder
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since 02-25-2000
Posts 191
<------Over There------>


1 posted 03-01-2000 03:09 PM       View Profile for RufffRyder   Email RufffRyder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RufffRyder's Home Page   View IP for RufffRyder

Beautiful!!
You`ve done a excellent job with your first post
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Welcome to passion and thank you for the read Miss.Q
Michael
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Member Ascendant
since 08-13-99
Posts 6333
California


2 posted 03-01-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

This is wonderful - and full of emotion.  Welcome to Passions.


Michael
RainbowGirl
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since 07-31-99
Posts 3167
United Kingdom


3 posted 03-01-2000 04:11 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

No need to be nervous sweetheart, I promise we don't bite, well, only when we're hungry..*g*

HUGS

 I dropped a tear in the ocean
when it is found, I will stop loving you...
Miss.Queeny
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since 02-26-2000
Posts 22


4 posted 03-01-2000 04:31 PM       View Profile for Miss.Queeny   Email Miss.Queeny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Miss.Queeny

Thankyou RufffRyder, Michael and RainbowGirl...I do feel welcome now, thankyou for your kind words and encouragment.

Love, Peace and Happiness...Q xxx
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley


5 posted 03-01-2000 06:32 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Very nice for your first poem! Welcome to the family. Please check your email for a special welcome. How young are you? Would you feel more comfortable in the Teen Forum? You are certainly welcome to post anywhere here.....  
serenity blaze
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since 02-02-2000
Posts 28839


6 posted 03-01-2000 08:16 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

You?  Nervous?  After reading your first post, I'M nervous...This is just TOO GOOD.
Welcome...(so now you know a few of us...)
Parker
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since 01-06-2000
Posts 3135
... the old black rum


7 posted 03-01-2000 08:20 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Miss Queeny, May I call you miss Queeny... There's something very sexy about the way you write...

Parker
Martie
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since 09-21-1999
Posts 28608
California


8 posted 03-01-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Very well done!....and welcome
devina
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since 10-28-1999
Posts 3189
Northern Cali


9 posted 03-02-2000 12:12 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This was a wonderful show of emotion...
young or old...this simply caught my attention Miss!!! Welcome from lil ole me!!!

And don't mind James...I think everyone's in heat down there in Canada!!LOL!!!! (just kidding James...you know I love to see you blush!!!!)


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 07-17-99
Posts 8273


10 posted 03-02-2000 12:32 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wow...I am addicted to freeverse and am always looking out for new talent - WOW!!! And here I find some!

Welcome to Passions - this is excellent work.

      

K



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
mete out
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since 02-16-2000
Posts 273
england


11 posted 03-02-2000 06:23 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

This is an incredible poem Miss Queeny.
Do not apologise for the length of it, sometimes brievity will not do.
I look forward to reading more of your amazing, inspiring work.

There's an e-mail waiting for you too honey..


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
Songbird
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since 12-15-1999
Posts 2211
California


12 posted 03-02-2000 08:00 PM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

This was really a enjoyable read, no need to be nervous here. You are among the nicest company on the web. If you are afraid of getting bit just don't go in Critical Forums!! I am teasing. LOL
Nan
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since 05-20-99
Posts 24426
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA


13 posted 03-02-2000 08:20 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

This is quite an intense work, and quite brimming with imagery it is...

Welcome to Passions, Miss Queeny - You might as well dive in - the water's fine here...
HelmutB
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since 01-06-2000
Posts 989
Canada


14 posted 03-02-2000 08:48 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Welcome to Passions
A well done your poem, very nice.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


15 posted 03-03-2000 06:30 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

A very nice poem, a great first post here. Don't be nervous, we don't bite...well at least very few of us do. I myself would look out for Toerag at times...lol.
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