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Betrayer Of Rhyme

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hoot_owl_rn
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Betrayer Of Rhyme

You crafted your love
into poetry
and each word
became an extension
of you
reaching out to touch me.

You poured your heart out
in every line;
making mine skip a beat
with everything I read.

Each syllable,
every word,
each line you wrote
made me love you
even more.

You crafted your love
into poetry
...then read it
to someone else.



 Have you ever noticed
That the words...
"Goodbye"
"I'm sorry"
"I love you"
Are so easy to pronounce
...Yet so hard to say
~Javan
© Copyright 2000 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Aimster
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1 posted 03-01-2000 11:34 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~hoot

now this one sure is deep...i read it twice and liked it even more the second time! amazing isn't it how we honestly believe people are sincere...only to find out it was all lies. here's to moving on and forward! take care and god bless

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
mete out
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2 posted 03-01-2000 11:34 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

Wow....the last two lines of this poem hit me like a sledgehammer...a great poem.
Fantastically moving.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
Corazon
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3 posted 03-01-2000 11:47 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

wow, no kidding this is incredible, and yep, it hits harder each time you read it....such a personal thing a poem is...and then to use it for betrayal....wow...I need to take a deep breath on this one.....
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4 posted 03-01-2000 11:51 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Hoot~ Wow....... this is so good! Poems are personal. This is better each time you read it! -SEA
Martie
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Beautiful and romantic and then...loved the whammy at the end---
Michael
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6 posted 03-01-2000 04:21 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Powerful words - a very poignant poem.  Always admired your "upfrontness" <- is that a word?...Oh well, chalk it up to poetic license if not...LOL  

Michael
Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 03-01-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Excellent poem, Hoot, with a twist.
Liz
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8 posted 03-01-2000 08:21 PM       View Profile for wildbill58   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for wildbill58

Hoot,I hope you read this one to me.
Marilyn
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9 posted 03-01-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Brilliant Ruth. I hope it hits who it was intended for as hard as it hit the rest of us.  
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Hoot~
I like the way you 'crafted'
this poem ...
and then 'tweeked' it at the end.
You continue to mesmerize.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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11 posted 03-01-2000 09:47 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Excellent! I love the premise here..
Gemini
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12 posted 03-01-2000 09:50 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

And crafted very sad, but beautifully.
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13 posted 03-01-2000 09:55 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Very clever writing, Ruth

I guess that's why they were called wandering minstrels  
Severn
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14 posted 03-02-2000 12:29 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wow...strong words Ruthy...

Well done.

K

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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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Clever poem hoot, I liked the twist at the end.
-Cypher
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Clever poem hoot, I liked the twist at the end.
-Cypher
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17 posted 03-02-2000 04:10 AM       View Profile for eyesplus2   Email eyesplus2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for eyesplus2

ahh how sad......love found and lost....we have all been there thats for sure....a very nice poem straight from the heart.
JamesMichael
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18 posted 03-02-2000 06:39 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

O.K. Hoot Owl whats this all about?   Its cool, I really don't need to know unless you want to tell me, and if you do you will.  Now back to the poem.  This is a sad story and we should be writing happy poems (laugh).
Sorry, hon I'm in one of my crazy moods but my head is clear enough to tell you I think this poem is nicely written and I can only hope for better for you.  Take care   James
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19 posted 03-02-2000 09:34 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Wow... and ouch! *S* This is fantastic, Hoot!
Honeybee
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My God, Ruth, words cannot express the impact that your poem has had on me.  Your poems are always so brilliant. I had to re-read this poem many times, just because it is truly that good. I even printed out the poem, it has moved me in such a way that I can't even begin to explain, maybe because I can really relate to your poem.  As always you have crafted a masterpiece.  I only wish that I could be as talented as you.  But, then again, no I don't because no one could ever be as talented as you, you are so unique, and kind too.  Applause for Ruth!  The last stanza, "you crafted your love into poetry the read it to someone else" just tugged at my heart, this is an excellent and bittersweet twist that ends your poem brilliantly.  You are an amazing poet.  Okay, enough rambling, us women talk too much huh? LOL  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee
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Thank you everyone for all your kind words about this piece  

James...I really didn't think this was that hard to understand. It's about a lover who finds another after pledging his love.

Melissa....you flatter me girl. Wow, what can I say, I'm overwhelmed by your comments...and blushing here. Thank you  
kitkat
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22 posted 03-02-2000 10:50 AM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

Lovely poem hoot, with such a sad ending. When things happen like this it is so hard to believe things that are told to us again. But there is someone out there we can trust. Hopefully he will come around soon.

 --------------
You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat you better
You're gonna find, yes you will
That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King


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23 posted 03-02-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

WOW!! This is wonderful, Ruth! What an ending, too! Your writing is always excellent!  

Denise
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Great poem Hoot.

 If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~
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