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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 2000-03-01 11:27 AM


Betrayer Of Rhyme

You crafted your love
into poetry
and each word
became an extension
of you
reaching out to touch me.

You poured your heart out
in every line;
making mine skip a beat
with everything I read.

Each syllable,
every word,
each line you wrote
made me love you
even more.

You crafted your love
into poetry
...then read it
to someone else.



 Have you ever noticed
That the words...
"Goodbye"
"I'm sorry"
"I love you"
Are so easy to pronounce
...Yet so hard to say
~Javan

© Copyright 2000 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Aimster
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1 posted 2000-03-01 11:34 AM


~hoot

now this one sure is deep...i read it twice and liked it even more the second time! amazing isn't it how we honestly believe people are sincere...only to find out it was all lies. here's to moving on and forward! take care and god bless

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

mete out
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2 posted 2000-03-01 11:34 AM


Wow....the last two lines of this poem hit me like a sledgehammer...a great poem.
Fantastically moving.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Corazon
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3 posted 2000-03-01 11:47 AM


wow, no kidding this is incredible, and yep, it hits harder each time you read it....such a personal thing a poem is...and then to use it for betrayal....wow...I need to take a deep breath on this one.....
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4 posted 2000-03-01 11:51 AM


Hoot~ Wow....... this is so good! Poems are personal. This is better each time you read it! -SEA
Martie
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5 posted 2000-03-01 02:11 PM


Beautiful and romantic and then...loved the whammy at the end---
Michael
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6 posted 2000-03-01 04:21 PM


Powerful words - a very poignant poem.  Always admired your "upfrontness" <- is that a word?...Oh well, chalk it up to poetic license if not...LOL  

Michael

Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 2000-03-01 04:27 PM


Excellent poem, Hoot, with a twist.
Liz

wildbill58
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8 posted 2000-03-01 08:21 PM


Hoot,I hope you read this one to me.
Marilyn
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9 posted 2000-03-01 09:24 PM


Brilliant Ruth. I hope it hits who it was intended for as hard as it hit the rest of us.  
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10 posted 2000-03-01 09:34 PM


Hoot~
I like the way you 'crafted'
this poem ...
and then 'tweeked' it at the end.
You continue to mesmerize.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Poet deVine
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11 posted 2000-03-01 09:47 PM


Excellent! I love the premise here..
Gemini
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12 posted 2000-03-01 09:50 PM


And crafted very sad, but beautifully.
Balladeer
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13 posted 2000-03-01 09:55 PM


Very clever writing, Ruth

I guess that's why they were called wandering minstrels  

Severn
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14 posted 2000-03-02 12:29 PM


Wow...strong words Ruthy...

Well done.

K

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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Cypher
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15 posted 2000-03-02 02:49 AM


Clever poem hoot, I liked the twist at the end.
-Cypher

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16 posted 2000-03-02 02:49 AM


Clever poem hoot, I liked the twist at the end.
-Cypher

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17 posted 2000-03-02 04:10 AM


ahh how sad......love found and lost....we have all been there thats for sure....a very nice poem straight from the heart.
JamesMichael
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18 posted 2000-03-02 06:39 AM


O.K. Hoot Owl whats this all about?   Its cool, I really don't need to know unless you want to tell me, and if you do you will.  Now back to the poem.  This is a sad story and we should be writing happy poems (laugh).
Sorry, hon I'm in one of my crazy moods but my head is clear enough to tell you I think this poem is nicely written and I can only hope for better for you.  Take care   James

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19 posted 2000-03-02 09:34 AM


Wow... and ouch! *S* This is fantastic, Hoot!
Honeybee
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20 posted 2000-03-02 09:43 AM



My God, Ruth, words cannot express the impact that your poem has had on me.  Your poems are always so brilliant. I had to re-read this poem many times, just because it is truly that good. I even printed out the poem, it has moved me in such a way that I can't even begin to explain, maybe because I can really relate to your poem.  As always you have crafted a masterpiece.  I only wish that I could be as talented as you.  But, then again, no I don't because no one could ever be as talented as you, you are so unique, and kind too.  Applause for Ruth!  The last stanza, "you crafted your love into poetry the read it to someone else" just tugged at my heart, this is an excellent and bittersweet twist that ends your poem brilliantly.  You are an amazing poet.  Okay, enough rambling, us women talk too much huh? LOL  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

hoot_owl_rn
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21 posted 2000-03-02 10:24 AM


Thank you everyone for all your kind words about this piece  

James...I really didn't think this was that hard to understand. It's about a lover who finds another after pledging his love.

Melissa....you flatter me girl. Wow, what can I say, I'm overwhelmed by your comments...and blushing here. Thank you  

kitkat
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22 posted 2000-03-02 10:50 AM


Lovely poem hoot, with such a sad ending. When things happen like this it is so hard to believe things that are told to us again. But there is someone out there we can trust. Hopefully he will come around soon.

 --------------
You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat you better
You're gonna find, yes you will
That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King



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23 posted 2000-03-02 10:55 AM


WOW!! This is wonderful, Ruth! What an ending, too! Your writing is always excellent!  

Denise

Lynn
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24 posted 2000-03-02 11:45 AM



Great poem Hoot.

 If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~

Poeminister
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25 posted 2000-03-02 01:36 PM


Hoot,

This an emotionally ironic poem, straight forward and nicely written.

 "...no single sound too rude
Upon thy slumber shall intrude,
Our thoughts, our souls- O God above!
In every deed shall mingle, love."
--Edgar Allan Poe (from Serenade)



Tara Simms
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26 posted 2000-03-02 04:24 PM


Ouch! I felt that slap at the end.  I hope "he" does too.
Andrew Scott
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27 posted 2000-03-02 05:24 PM


OWWW! A finer point could not be made.  Excellent writing Lady Hoot.  You'll forgive me if I've missed so many of your latest postings.  Been playing around in the 'Stute don't cha know.  I hope all is well with you these days. As always, I bow to you and yours.
HelmutB
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28 posted 2000-03-02 09:26 PM


Short, sweet and at the end to the point.
I guess you said it clearly.
Well done
Hugs and love

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


hoot_owl_rn
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29 posted 2000-03-03 06:28 AM


Once more...thank you everyone for reading my work and always for the kind and generous comments you make  
Nan
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30 posted 2000-03-03 07:28 AM


The real world certainly does throw us some curves, doesn't it?... Nicely done, hoot..
Parker
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31 posted 2000-03-03 10:39 AM


Hoot, I must agree with everybody else, a gem of a poem, and a great twist.

Parker

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