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mete out
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0 posted 2000-03-01 09:18 AM




For all these years all I've wanted is to drown,
                                   to fall down,
and stay down.I had no urge to get up again,
it required too much effort - and to what end?
After all, they'd only push me down again.

But recently I seem to be holding on
                          holding out for a goal.
And for once the goal is within my reach.

Fall down every now and then but you help me back up and hold me while I gather my bearings.

We will get through this together - if we hold on to our dream and keep on surviving, we will get there.
     And when this day comes they'll all know how serious we are.

I feel so close to you, even when we are apart, (even though it stings so much)
I never thought I could open up to you this much.
All uncertainty has vanished as our love and trust has grown.

Each day holds something new; more to hold on to,
                              more to cherish,
                              more to love.

I hold so much power and knowledge inside of me now you are here.
I never knew I could feel like this.
I never knew I could write like this.

I cannot be touched while you are holding me in your arms.

Fall down every now and then but we'll
                               pick each other up,
                               dust each other down,
                               keep on surviving,
And realise our dream -
Together.




 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

© Copyright 2000 Louise Parsons - All Rights Reserved
Aimster
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1 posted 2000-03-01 09:27 AM


~M.O.~

This was great! I loved the way it all flowed together. I am glad that you have found someone who makes you this happy! I am also glad that you are striving together to reach your goal...Love is all we need sometimes, to make us realize how important life really is! Great job!

AMY  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

mete out
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2 posted 2000-03-01 11:20 AM


Thanks for your reply Amy.
The person that this poem is inspired by has had the most profound effect on me...he has made me take stock of my life so far and helped me to realise that there is so much to life that i have not let myself see yet.

He has given me my life back.    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

infinat3 sadn3ss
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3 posted 2000-03-04 04:13 PM


babes , ihadent even realised youd posted this . sorry . i hope you have shown this to him . and i hope he realises how lucky he is to have someone like you , if you ever find a long lost twin let me know (ha ha ha )

love forver
always endeavour

your best mate

Denise
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4 posted 2000-03-04 06:03 PM


Sounds like you have a great relationship!
Nice poem!

Denise

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5 posted 2000-03-04 06:11 PM


It's a beautiful poem, very uplifting and inspiring in its own right and obviously written from the heart.
mete out
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6 posted 2000-03-10 09:56 AM


***Cabes,
You cheeky sod!
Thanks for being you cabee babee...
love always, lou   xxx

***Denise,
It is amazing.
After 5 years of clinical depression etc, it is certainly welcome!
Thanks 4 your words.

***Balladeer,
STRAIGHT from the heart.
The best thing I've written for a long long time.
Thanks.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

mete out
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7 posted 2000-04-03 05:35 AM


This is potentially cheeky, but in honour of the person this one is about, I'm going to shoot this one back to the top.

Thankyou babee.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



Enola
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8 posted 2000-04-03 07:23 AM


No - not cheeky at all.  How did I miss this the first time, anyway I'm glad I haven't now.  I'm on the same side as Cabes here - have you shown it to him?

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

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9 posted 2000-04-03 07:27 AM


MeteOut~
A pleasurable read.
Well done.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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mete out
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10 posted 2000-04-03 09:55 AM


***enola,
thanks love.
yeah, he's seen it...he was the first person i showed it to.
it was the first positive poem i had been able to write for a long time.
thanks...    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



just_another_fe
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11 posted 2000-04-03 09:56 PM


beautiful mete. feels great to write happy poems huh   i'm happy  that you found someone. good luck

[This message has been edited by just_another_fe (edited 04-03-2000).]

mete out
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12 posted 2000-04-04 04:55 AM


***Marge,
thankyou.
a pleasure to write also.

***just_another_fe,
it is fantastic after what seems like an age of depression, to come up with something as beautiful as this.    
thankyou for your reply.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



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