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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-03-01 01:55 AM


  sharp intake,
      frigid breath,
fingers--crude--telling lies--
  eyes that meet
      and speak the truth
in silent compromise.

   On battleground,
       the corpse, she lies,
in sad repose, sweet remiss..
   silently--
       remembering--
electric sparks on fingertips...

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
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1 posted 2000-03-01 03:08 AM


Wo - some sharp words here.  

"Speak the truth in silent compromise"

Good poem, serinity.  I think my fingertips are calloused over...


Michael

Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 2000-03-01 03:30 AM


Well I'd lend you a hand ... but all I have is a rubber sword

Rex}<{{{{o>

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2000-03-01 03:38 AM


Thank you, Incredible Michael, as always...

and dear Rex Allen, Rex Allen--tonight that
just might do!!!

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 2000-03-01 11:06 AM


Wow...this is powerful stuff here  
Martie
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5 posted 2000-03-01 01:49 PM


I have to agree with Ruth, this is powerful.
spiked
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6 posted 2000-03-02 12:06 PM


Very Interesting Serenity.
You seem to write so well in so many different directions.
Thanks,
Rich

[This message has been edited by spiked (edited 03-02-2000).]

devina
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since 1999-10-28
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7 posted 2000-03-02 02:04 PM


Always remember those sparks hon, one day- you'll find those sparks again...

This is short, sharp and very impressive m'dear sis!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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