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A Vision

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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 02-29-2000 03:50 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoeticKnight

At midnight in the month of June
I stand beneath the silvery moon
The fog flows through and around
As I hear Nature’s mythical sound
From this dream ‘ere do I wake
Walking slowly I behold a lake
Voices murmur softly like angels
From distant mountains and distant dells
I feel terror that is far from fright
As I listen, I fill with delight
Like ghosts, shadows rise and fall
Becoming the night, high as a wall
So great was this solemn loneliness
Like a sweet summer wind’s caress
Something awakens my consciousness, my soul
Like a bell sounding, it begins to toll
That thing like a light, it beckons me
I race along edge of the lake for this melody
Vision of her fills me inside
Rising like thunder, softly it dies
Onward I press, onward I go
Searching while running, and lo,
I behold the creation of this beauty
This paradise, to find, my sacred duty
Like light from jewels floating on black
A vision from mirror un-cracked
Immaculate as the morning dew
The vision I behold is you


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1 posted 02-29-2000 03:55 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

JML~ your talent shines in this poem! Excellent!-SEA
PoeticKnight
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2 posted 02-29-2000 03:57 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Thanks SEA! That is humbling indeed.
Aimster
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3 posted 02-29-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~JML~

Now this...this was just plain awesome. This told a story of sorts, had beautiful imagery, and made me want to read more..where's the rest? LOL...Thank you for posting this...Good stuff indeed!

Amy  

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PoeticKnight
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4 posted 02-29-2000 04:35 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Thanks Aimster, i never really thought about it like a story before. But a sequel....hmmmmm....good idea, only if i can think of where to go with it. LOL
I'll try thinking about that.
RufffRyder
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<------Over There------>


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You show alot of beauty from the heart for someone here..(did I read right?)
Nice visual piece here JML.
Thank you for the read
KathieO
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6 posted 02-29-2000 04:50 PM       View Profile for KathieO   Email KathieO   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for KathieO

Very discriptive.....you had me there with you. Thanks for sharing this...I love the perfection of the "A vision from mirror un-cracked"......beautiful.

KathieO
Janet Marie
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7 posted 02-29-2000 04:55 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

see...I'm not the only one stalking you.. ...snuck this one in on me did ya...


"From this dream ‘ere do I wake
Walking slowly I behold a lake
Voices murmur softly like angels
From distant mountains and distant dells
I feel terror that is far from fright
As I listen, I fill with delight
Like ghosts, shadows rise and fall
Becoming the night, high as a wall
So great was this solemn loneliness
Like a sweet summer wind’s caress
Something awakens my consciousness, my soul
Like a bell sounding, it begins to toll"
--------
Vision of her fills me inside
Rising like thunder, softly it dies
Onward I press, onward I go
Searching while running, and lo,
I behold the creation of this beauty
This paradise, to find, my sacred duty
Like light from jewels floating on black
A vision from mirror un-cracked
Immaculate as the morning dew
The vision I behold is you"

this one is superb...and you just know I wanna know the inspiration for this!!!!
very nice, indeed.
stalk ya later gator
JM
Parker
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8 posted 02-29-2000 10:17 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

JML, I really loved this it is a vision.

Parker
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