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A Vision |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
At midnight in the month of June I stand beneath the silvery moon The fog flows through and around As I hear Nature’s mythical sound From this dream ‘ere do I wake Walking slowly I behold a lake Voices murmur softly like angels From distant mountains and distant dells I feel terror that is far from fright As I listen, I fill with delight Like ghosts, shadows rise and fall Becoming the night, high as a wall So great was this solemn loneliness Like a sweet summer wind’s caress Something awakens my consciousness, my soul Like a bell sounding, it begins to toll That thing like a light, it beckons me I race along edge of the lake for this melody Vision of her fills me inside Rising like thunder, softly it dies Onward I press, onward I go Searching while running, and lo, I behold the creation of this beauty This paradise, to find, my sacred duty Like light from jewels floating on black A vision from mirror un-cracked Immaculate as the morning dew The vision I behold is you |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
JML~ your talent shines in this poem! Excellent!-SEA |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks SEA! That is humbling indeed. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~JML~ Now this...this was just plain awesome. This told a story of sorts, had beautiful imagery, and made me want to read more..where's the rest? LOL...Thank you for posting this...Good stuff indeed! Amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks Aimster, i never really thought about it like a story before. But a sequel....hmmmmm....good idea, only if i can think of where to go with it. LOL I'll try thinking about that. |
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RufffRyder Member
since 2000-02-25
Posts 143<------Over There------> |
You show alot of beauty from the heart for someone here..(did I read right?) Nice visual piece here JML. Thank you for the read |
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KathieO Junior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 14Canada |
Very discriptive.....you had me there with you. Thanks for sharing this...I love the perfection of the "A vision from mirror un-cracked"......beautiful. KathieO |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
see...I'm not the only one stalking you..  ...snuck this one in on me did ya..."From this dream ‘ere do I wake Walking slowly I behold a lake Voices murmur softly like angels From distant mountains and distant dells I feel terror that is far from fright As I listen, I fill with delight Like ghosts, shadows rise and fall Becoming the night, high as a wall So great was this solemn loneliness Like a sweet summer wind’s caress Something awakens my consciousness, my soul Like a bell sounding, it begins to toll" -------- Vision of her fills me inside Rising like thunder, softly it dies Onward I press, onward I go Searching while running, and lo, I behold the creation of this beauty This paradise, to find, my sacred duty Like light from jewels floating on black A vision from mirror un-cracked Immaculate as the morning dew The vision I behold is you" this one is superb...and you just know I wanna know the inspiration for this!!!! very nice, indeed. stalk ya later gator  JM |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
JML, I really loved this it is a vision. Parker |
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