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Belle of the Ball
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Belle of the Ball |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Away across town, bright lights are glowing She sits alone, but can’t avoid knowing Her invitation wasn’t lost in the mail She wants to be special - she’s obviously failed. A bottle of scotch, the best she could find Hasn’t helped the hurt that gnaws at her mind. Another is dancing in her lover’s arms And she’s here - sadly lacking in charms. The tears drip down though she’s vowed not to weep With a sob and a hiccup, she slips into sleep For in her dreams, she’s the belle of the ball Admired by many and accepted by all. And no little slut could stand a chance To interrupt this dream romance! Entirely too soon the clock strikes midnight Maybe just one more drink will make things all right. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Suthern~ How very sad and woderfully written! This really got me in the heart.-SEA |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Suthern - "Maybe just one more drink will make things alright"...beautifully sad poem, |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
You write beautifully and this peom, even in it's terrible saddness, is beautiful. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
A sad portrait and very well written. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well, one more drink always works for me?...Of course, I have one more, then one more, then one more....and I'm still okay don't ya know? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you SEA, BSC, childomine & Martie... I appreciate your kind comments! *S* And Toe... whatever works... especially if you share. *G* For you're more than okay in this gal's book!!!  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful little journey into the land of rejection. James |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
You'll always be beautiful to me, every single part of you.. That means you're special..  HUSG Live in my heart and pay no rent... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
James: Thank you... I've pretty much quit journeying and set up house there! *S* RG: I think you've been drinking out of that same bottle! LOL. But that's okay... I'll always share with you and Toe! *S* |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderfully sad Successfully tragic Good poem Liz |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady Suther: A story too often true... well done. Hope this ain't no self portrait. My best to you and yours. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
OK Ok OK - I will invite YOU next time. besidesa, she WAS a little slut (woo hoo). This is a really really well-written poem, lil Belle. I hope you are not really the star. smooch |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem, Suthern! Sad, touching, well done! Denise |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
....and, as she dreams of her wonderful fella, Asleep, in her dream, she becomes Cinderella. In her pumpkin-turned-coach she attends a grand ball Where champagne freely flows and she is loved by all. She is whisked off her feet by a handsome young prince Who made love in a way she has never known since And a face comes to mind that she really does know As she dreams that the pumpkin reminds her of Toe! |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
A poem so sad makes me feel wanting to chance her life Makes me wanting to strife Well written the matter of love and despair A dream perhaps will help to clear the air A poem so sad, I feel for her Nicely done suthern The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Suthern~ You've touched on a poignant piece of loneliness here. Alcohol-induced dreams can often be more nightmarish than reality. You write from a slice of life that touches many. You are so varied in your works. Wonderful piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Suthern...oh suthern....what can I say here? You've written a profound piece here! I am left speechless, just not knowing how to describe what's going through my mind at the moment! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Suthern, *dabs at eyes with hankie* wow, what sad piece....I felt like I was that girl. Good job, and I hope it isn't true. And if it is, well, you can borrow my Daddies shot gun, i'm sure we can find that lil ole party.... "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Elizabeth, Andrew, dsnyder, Helmut & Marge: Thank you all very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and respond so kindly! *S* LJA: Ya mean you had a party TOO!!!! Geesh!! Could you at least keep the slutpuppies over there? LOL Balladeer: You know if I'm dreaming of a wonderful fella, I'm dreaming of that sweet Toerag! *G* WhtDove: Thank you... I think! LOL Saxoness: I may take you up on that offer. *G* Thanks! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
lol@saxoness....but really suthern this is wonderful writing, sad yes, but wonderfully done to evoke such saddness....great work...and hey....gonna tag a ditto on RG's post...cause I love you too! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Corazon: You mean you ditto others? *G* Geesh... and here I thought I was unique. *EG* You and Rainbow are so dear to me... thank you both! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh suthern...this is so well written but oh so very sad  |
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