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suthern
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0 posted 02-29-2000 12:47 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

Away across town, bright lights are glowing
She sits alone, but can’t avoid knowing
Her invitation wasn’t lost in the mail
She wants to be special - she’s obviously failed.
A bottle of scotch, the best she could find
Hasn’t helped the hurt that gnaws at her mind.
Another is dancing in her lover’s arms
And she’s here - sadly lacking in charms.
The tears drip down though she’s vowed not to weep
With a sob and a hiccup, she slips into sleep
For in her dreams, she’s the belle of the ball
Admired by many and accepted by all.
And no little slut could stand a chance
To interrupt this dream romance!
Entirely too soon the clock strikes midnight
Maybe just one more drink will make things all right.
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1 posted 02-29-2000 12:58 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Suthern~ How very sad and woderfully written! This really got me in the heart.-SEA
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2 posted 02-29-2000 01:29 PM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Suthern - "Maybe just one more drink will make things alright"...beautifully sad poem,
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3 posted 02-29-2000 01:48 PM       View Profile for childomine   Email childomine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for childomine

You write beautifully and this peom, even in it's terrible saddness, is beautiful.
Martie
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A sad portrait and very well written.
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Well, one more drink always works for me?...Of course, I have one more, then one more, then one more....and I'm still okay don't ya know?
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6 posted 02-29-2000 03:21 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you SEA, BSC, childomine & Martie... I appreciate your kind comments! *S*

And Toe... whatever works... especially if you share. *G* For you're more than okay in this gal's book!!!  
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Wonderful little journey into the land of rejection.    James
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You'll always be beautiful to me, every single part of you.. That means you're special..


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James: Thank you... I've pretty much quit journeying and set up house there! *S*

RG: I think you've been drinking out of that same bottle! LOL. But that's okay... I'll always share with you and Toe! *S*
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10 posted 02-29-2000 05:25 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Wonderfully sad
Successfully tragic
Good poem
Liz
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Lady Suther: A story too often true... well done.  Hope this ain't no self portrait. My best to you and yours.
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12 posted 02-29-2000 09:30 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

OK Ok OK - I will invite YOU next time.  besidesa, she WAS a little slut (woo hoo).  This is a really really well-written poem, lil Belle.  I hope you are not really the star.

smooch
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13 posted 02-29-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent poem, Suthern! Sad, touching, well done!

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....and, as she dreams of her wonderful fella,
Asleep, in her dream, she becomes Cinderella.
In her pumpkin-turned-coach she attends a grand ball
Where champagne freely flows and she is loved by all.
She is whisked off her feet by a handsome young prince
Who made love in a way she has never known since
And a face comes to mind that she really does know
As she dreams that the pumpkin reminds her of Toe!
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A poem so sad makes me feel wanting to chance her life
Makes me wanting to strife
Well written the matter of love and despair
A dream perhaps will help to clear the air
A poem so sad, I feel for her
Nicely done suthern




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16 posted 02-29-2000 11:28 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Suthern~
You've touched on a poignant piece
of loneliness here.
Alcohol-induced dreams can often
be more nightmarish than reality.

You write from a slice of life
that touches many. You are so varied
in your works. Wonderful piece.
~*Marge*~



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Suthern...oh suthern....what can I say here?
You've written a profound piece here! I am left speechless, just not knowing how to describe what's going through my mind at the moment!
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Suthern,

*dabs at eyes with hankie*  wow, what sad piece....I felt like I was that girl. Good job, and I hope it isn't true. And if it is, well, you can borrow my Daddies shot gun, i'm sure we can find that lil ole party....


 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

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Elizabeth, Andrew, dsnyder, Helmut & Marge: Thank you all very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and respond so kindly! *S*

LJA: Ya mean you had a party TOO!!!! Geesh!! Could you at least keep the slutpuppies over there? LOL

Balladeer: You know if I'm dreaming of a wonderful fella, I'm dreaming of that sweet Toerag! *G*

WhtDove: Thank you... I think! LOL

Saxoness: I may take you up on that offer. *G* Thanks!

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lol@saxoness....but really suthern this is wonderful writing, sad yes, but wonderfully done to evoke such saddness....great work...and hey....gonna tag a ditto on RG's post...cause I love you too!
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21 posted 03-01-2000 10:04 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Corazon: You mean you ditto others? *G* Geesh... and here I thought I was unique. *EG*

You and Rainbow are so dear to me... thank you both!
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Oh suthern...this is so well written but oh so very sad  
 
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