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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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PARADISE The razor cuts my heart. The coldness shuts my eyes. And silence is all I hear, As the winds of change arise. I live my life while total darkness Holds me deep within its throes. I live my life the vision of a man That no one really knows. They see a painted picture, Think they can peel the guise. But they could never understand What goes on behind these eyes. For I see a world of many, And I see a world of few. But I couldn't love just anyone, I had to love just you. So as I walk the future, Bidding the past adieu. Most everyplace I see that face, But just walk right on through. For I know my destiny Might lie on wings of chance. Still, when I stare in the mirror, I see no backwards glance. For I have a tunnel vision That draws me toward a light I'm not sure what I'll find there, But I know I've paid the price. Still I may never reach it, And effort alone may not suffice. But if I do, maybe it's true, I'll find my paradise. A land where there's no sorrow. A land where there's no pain. A land where there's no emptiness. A land where there's no rain. A place that's not a giant stage, Where I just act out my part. But a place where it won't hurt to dream, Or rest an aching heart. Michael Anderson 'Tis true, Love lasts forever, Only her memory slips away. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
It should never hurt to dream Michael... This is truly a reflection of you...hang in there m'friend...and may paradise find you!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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RufffRyder Member
since 2000-02-25
Posts 143<------Over There------> |
WOW!! You have a heck of a way with word`. I can see that your heart ache`s for another. There is no feeling in the world that compares to a broken heart. I guess I didn`t need to tell you that. Ya know what you should do? Go out and have some drink`s,find a girl and....aaahhh never mind.lol Hope all work`s out ok for ya. Excellent wording here on this piece. Thank you for the read Michael. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Achingly beautiful Michael .... I hope you do find your paradise and soon ........... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Michael~ Rest your aching heart, love, for there will come a peace beyond compare. Your rested heart will again know the joy of loving from deep within ... and you will recognize what it is not. *HUGS* Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautifully written Michael. James |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Your inner strength is an inspiration, my friend... Nicely done..  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is anohter excellent piece, Michael. Very well written. Your strength does shine through this piece! Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ooooh Michael, I can't tell you how this touched me! When there will be no more tears. Most excellent! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"I live my life the vision of a man That no one really knows. They see a painted picture, Think they can peel the guise. But they could never understand What goes on behind these eyes. For I see a world of many, And I see a world of few. But I couldn't love just anyone, I had to love just you. ---- "For I have a tunnel vision That draws me toward a light I'm not sure what I'll find there, But I know I've paid the price. Still I may never reach it, And effort alone may not suffice. But if I do, maybe it's true, I'll find my paradise." M, this is so amazing...it speaks volumes...the emotions of the "man inside"... his vision...so well expressed...and as always...the search for the light...never stop looking for it... & when you find paradise...send us directions...we can have one heck of a beach party(smile)jm You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name And know my love and my desperation were one and the same... Baby it's alright... Take this pain and all this sadness It's alright Take this rain You're going to be free... Jackson Browne *I love you baby* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Michael....this is hauntingly sad  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Haunting yes, but sad, no, because you describe the light at the end of the tunnel. So, I see this poem as more of a contrast between the shades of dark and light. Quite beautiful, really. Corinne |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
The bearer of the lantern waits for you at the end my friend. . . you only have to see her. . . she's always been there. . . --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
"ditto" the nice comments already said. Good work! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
No, I don't really know you, but we seem to be sharing a similar pain. And I do envy your particular grace and strength. You make me want to do better. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Michael I have to go with Corinne on this one. Very beautiful, but more importantly, the light is there for you..all you have to do is walk to it. Marina |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"For I see a world of many, And I see a world of few. But I couldn't love just anyone, I had to love just you." This passage stood out as I read this piece...you've brought contrasting themes together so well here. You certainly can write, Mr. Anderson.  ~ Claire |
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Compgirl Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 85USA |
I had to comment on this one. What a wonderful poem. Your talent really shines. Sieze the moment and live today as if it were your last. Don't go too crazy though..  ) Let love find you. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Again, Michael, excellent writing. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Aye, Laddie - you've found your voice, and it speaks with your heart. Nicely done, Michael. You've not lost your soul in the words you write. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Don't ever give up One thing I learned in life to be true Well done your poem Michael You certainly have a way to express your feelings well The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I have to agree with Claire, those were my favorite lines as well. Sheer eloquence, Michael. --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~michael this was a poem of sheer elegance and grace, written so beautifully. this one had a theme that is a little different from your other pieces, one of hope. never lose hope or faith, and one day you will be guided to that "light". just believe in yourself, for you are a wonderful and remarkable poet and human being. hugs! amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
devina, I agree with you 100%, I just can't seem to stop it from happening. I'm hangin', though. RufffRyder, No feeling in the world even comes close. Marge, I certainly hope so. I feel like I keep stepping in that same whole on that same street...when will I learn? Janet, I will never stop reaching for that light...I'll see you at the party. Corinne, you are right. It is a contrast of dark and light. Moreover, it's a refusal to stay in the dark - to reach the light at any cost. Sven, I sure hope so. Serenity, that alone is reason enough for me to write..TY Compgirl, I'm alread crazy...but I will live for today. Longjohn, 'tis but my soul that writes for me, truly. Amy, I think hope will be a theme in my writings always. Without it - why would I even bother? Thank you all for the kind comments. Michael |
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