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Rivers upon the glass

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Breathe~
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0 posted 02-28-2000 12:31 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Breathe~

Shadows deepen
as the rain softly dissolves
against the glass
like displaced water color
Branches tap quietly
in time to a desolate wind
whispering of
distant dreams
Her face one with the glass
the coolness soothing
upon her cheek
as she watches the rain
Soft sighs
spread like tiny white trails
across the pane
fading quickly
like forgotten moments
soon replaced by others
doomed to the same fate
Her eyes search the darkness
each heart beat
brings the dawn closer
Bewildered shadows
fall to her feet
love dying
within the rivers upon the glass..




 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan
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Corazon
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1 posted 02-28-2000 02:47 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

oh, I know this picture....really great writing...you paint your words well poet friend
Cerenity
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2 posted 02-28-2000 02:47 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Breathe,

What a beautiful poem, I have done this very thing, pressing against the window pane and watched the water run down.

Thank you,  Cerenity
Meadowmuse
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3 posted 02-28-2000 03:05 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

What a neat way to describe a reflective (small pun intended) moment like this. Lovely writing.

~ Claire
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Corazon
  That is the ultimate compliment..coming from you...

Cerenity
   I find it soothing...I love the rain...

Meadowmuse
  Thank you...


 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan
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5 posted 02-28-2000 09:18 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Breathe, this is just stunning.  Been there
many times myself...I could actually feel
the coolness of the glass.  Beautiful portrayal.
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6 posted 02-28-2000 09:42 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Breathe~
Your work keeps getting lovelier
and lovelier.
I like the softness of the rain as it slips down the window pane.
Is there a woman who has not 'been' there?
Nope, don't think so ...
thanks for painting the moment so well.
~*Marge*~



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Denise
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7 posted 02-28-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful writing, Breathe! This is excellent!

Denise
Martie
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8 posted 02-29-2000 12:34 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

"fadded quickly like a forgotton moment", lovely lines.  Wonderful poem
Mistikman
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9 posted 02-29-2000 12:39 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Great poem Breathe~ I have sat and stared at a window pane during a rainy day, and I find it rather soothing, although at the same time a little saddening. It is a good time to sit and reflect on life
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 02-29-2000 07:24 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

What a wonderful poem, I love poems about the rain, the meloncholy puttering sound against the roof or window. It does conjure up a certain sadness. This mixed with your poetic talents wrought a poem of the highest caliber.
Liz
Breathe~
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11 posted 03-01-2000 02:26 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Thank you all... )

Martie...somethings fade...while others remain for a lifetime.. )

Marge...as usual...your comments warm my heart...

Serenity...you are too kind...thank you!  

Mistikman...I like your perception...reflections of life...think I may retitle this...*g*

Elizabeth...a true compliment coming from you...Thank you...

Denise...last but never least...thank you too!...


 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan
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12 posted 03-01-2000 02:43 AM       View Profile for RufffRyder   Email RufffRyder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RufffRyder's Home Page   View IP for RufffRyder

Breathe~this is a very nice piece here.
I can visualize every word that you`ve written.
Thank you for the read Breathe
Michael
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13 posted 03-01-2000 03:03 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

This was a wonderful poem, ~Breathe.  Exceptional ending.  Loved it.


Michael
Severn
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14 posted 03-01-2000 07:07 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Just wonderful!!
Well done
January Flowers
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15 posted 03-01-2000 07:13 AM       View Profile for January Flowers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for January Flowers

OH! This is super!  I W A S that girl with her face pressed up against the cool glass...your words put me right there, feeling everything I read.  Sigh.  You have done a great job in this writing, Breathe!  I'm envious of your talent for putting such a "happening and thought" into such perfectly descriptive words.
Mike
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16 posted 03-01-2000 08:43 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Nicely done...  I enjoyed muchly.
 
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