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A House Neglected

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Gemini
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On the outside you could never tell
New coat of paint and all is well.
But, the inside.
The inside, you can't so easily hide.
Ten years of neglect takes its toll.
Robs a house of its very soul.
Window sills where waters marked
Tear stained pillows hidden at dark.
Light switches and door bells lead nowhere.
Sadness replaces smiles that once were there.
Flooring yellowed over time.
As long as there is a roof everything is fine.
Ceiling is cracked and needs repair.
As long as there's hunting, no need to care.
A house neglected is not a home.
But, a wife neglected feels very alone.

© Copyright 2000 June Schultz - All Rights Reserved
childomine
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1 posted 02-27-2000 08:30 PM       View Profile for childomine   Email childomine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for childomine

A house can be so desolate when not filled with the love that it takes to make a home.  Even the most worn, run-down houses are wonderful, warm places if love and kindness are contained within its walls.  You poem speaks loudly of a desolation that needn't have been.
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2 posted 02-27-2000 08:38 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~gemini

i really liked this...it had an underlying meaning, i had to read it twice, but i got it! and you are right foundations such as housing can take weathering and neglect much more than people. take care,

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Songbird
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Very nice piece of writing, good analogies. So sad when houses crumble due to neglect, likewise as well relationships.
Denise
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Well done, Gemini. Great poem!

Denise
Janet Marie
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5 posted 02-28-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

this poem is EXCELLENT!!
im so glad I saw it...the title caught my eye...very well expressed truths here.
poetic wisdom. take care, janet marie

 She says baby,
It's 3am I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.
Matchbox20

I love you baby... always.*


Gemini
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6 posted 02-29-2000 02:42 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

childomine: Thank you.
Aimster: You got both meanings-very perceptive-thanks.
Septsong:Thank you-I appreciate.
dsnyder: Thank you.
Janet Marie: Thanks for your kind words.
 
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