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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Ahh yes, another sad depressing piece from the Prince of despair  I have never had a girlfriend One who would hold me tight My heart she would mend And make everything right She would bring calm to my fears Give me hope for a new day Wipe away all my tears Tell me it is going to be ok I have demons I cannot fight I need someone to understand Someone to show me the light Someone to lend a helping hand Where can I find such a person Who will not judge me by appearance My situation will only worsen Unless someone will give me a chance. [This message has been edited by Mistikman (edited 02-27-2000).] |
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RufffRyder Member
since 2000-02-25
Posts 143<------Over There------> |
Mr.Mistikman I think that girl might be closer than you think. There are alot of young ladies in here and from what I`ve been reading I think it would be safe to say that not all of them are married? I like the way that you`ve put this one together. Good Luck and thank`s for the read. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Heh, thanks RufffRyder, but I was thinking more of someone who I could know in real life. The people in here are wonderful, but unfortunately also spread across the globe. |
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RufffRyder Member
since 2000-02-25
Posts 143<------Over There------> |
LOL sorry, I guess I hadn`t givin that reply much thought. Ya know I`ve heard that love knows no distance? Once again Good Luck |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mistik, I think this poem will help. Good words well done. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
RufffRyder- Love may not know distance, but with the inclusion of distance, the nature of the love has to change to accomodate it, or the love will die. I am more interested in a type of love that does not need to compensate for distance. Seymour Tabin- Thank you |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ya know, there's that old saying that you've got to love yourself before you can love someone else??? Sound like a nagging mom, don't I? Corinne |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My dear friend. First..the poem is very good. It's nice to see the progressive improvement in your work..I know you're working hard to become better and it shows (bravo!). Now...you are far to young to be the king of despair. Perhaps you should settle for prince of despair right now. I know these words are no comfort to you right now, but your time will come.. there is a season for everything...it's just not yet the season of Mistikan...hang on though...life awaits around the corner. I admire your spirit, your gentlemanly ways and your talent.  |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Corinne- Yes, exactly Thanks anywayPoet deVine- Thank you, I try With my luck when my ship comes in I will be at the airport I try really hard to keep a positive outlook on life, but it is really hard at times, staring in the face of so much defeat. I shall not give up the fight just yet though. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice writing mistikman. Good luck in finding a girlfriend. Maybe in the poetry club in your college. James |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
Very good writing (or typing) mistik.  I have one question...r u sure we aren't twins or something?  J/K. The only reason I ask this is because it seems as though when u write u express the same feelings and are going through the same things as I am  . Anywhoo, chin up and smell the cookies...you'll find a girlfriend that will love you and understand ur feelings and see you for the nice and sensitive person you are :  /font>< !signature-->To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet] [This message has been edited by chic (edited 02-28-2000).] |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
jmlee12345- Thanks, and its still High School  I think there is a poetry and literature club, but I'm not exactly a club type of person, thanks for the suggestion anyway chic- Unless there is something my parents forgot to tell me, pretty sure I hope you are right, I really need someone I can talk to and hold in real life. Beging perpetually alone is really bumming me out! |
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Manchester Junior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 15 |
If your words are accurate, than I am held within the bounds of the same boat as you. In a realm of superficial role models, all sense of character is lost to most. Hold on to that fire Mistik. You have no clue what will happen if it is estinguished ----------<--@ |
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January Flowers Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 209South Carolina |
When you least expect it... And when you are not looking... WHAM! You have chosen a very good selection of words here to make up the emotion of "doubt" and "want". I'm serious...the "WHAM-FACTOR" is ever-present. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
You know the hardest parts of life are those we face alone. But as those times pass us by it makes in use virtues and experience that we could not get any other way. Being alone sometimes gives us the knowledge of what it truly means to have someone. Look at this time as the forgement of you and a time where you are placed in the fire. You may be weak now but as you are cooled from the flame you will be stronger and sharper in the end. Like a sword forged in fire so is your life. I look forward to the finshed product of you in your life. You have great talent that is shared with so much life now.....Please share on There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mistikman, being young (and as sensitive and perceptive as your poetry tells me you are) is so difficult. I know, because a few years ago, I was young too. (Yes! It's true!) I know that the feelings you have are very real and natural, especially for someone with your heightened sense of creativity and awareness. I wish I had more than just encouragement for you, and I do urge you to continue examining and expressing your feelings, but don't forget to just let yourself "be" as often as you can...take pleasure in spontaneity and wonderment of the world around you...maybe you'll bump into a special someone who's just "being" too. Much peace to you tonight...keep writing! ~ Claire |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Manchester- Thanks, I plan on keeping it lit as long as I can, it is all that is keeping me going. January Flowers- Thank you First__Knight- Why thank you for that unusually eloquent response It is well recieved. Whatever doesnt kill me can only make me stronger.Meadowmuse- Thank you. Encouragement is still quite useful for people my age, even if we dont admit it I thank you for your support during this rough time in my life. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
A question...out of pure nosiness...I admit.. But how old are you anyways? (going on Poet Devines and Meadowmuses comments) It DOES happen...maybe not how you want nor expect...but it IS out there.... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Breathe~- Of years on this Earth I have but few. Only 17 to credit to my name at last count. I feel I am much older than that mentally and emotionally however. I grew up with a turbulent family life, and it forced me to grow up far faster and far earlier than most. [This message has been edited by Mistikman (edited 02-29-2000).] |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
u will find someone mistik...everyone finds someone...it may just take longer for me and you and some others to find that someone To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet] |
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