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Forgotten Promise

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Michael
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0 posted 02-27-2000 05:07 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

FORGOTTEN PROMISE

He stands upon the precipice
Where once an angel flew.
Who'd given him "maiden's promise"
That love would remain true.

Staring out across the ocean
And down to the crashing waves.
Feeling the mist of emotion
From the memory he saves.

He had loved her, loved her desire,
But it was her own despise.
She held as a shame to her Sire,
In looking from his eyes.

He looked back to the fallen ruin,
Their castle built on sand.
Where by the glow of a lover's moon,
She had refused his hand.

He remembers watching in chains
While she stood upon the ledge.
His screams swallowed by swirling rains,
In her forgotten pledge.

Now the ocean calls him with her voice,
A soft, seductive lure.
A beckoning of no real choice
For love once felt so pure.

As the sun crests the horizon,
In the dawn of a new day.
It's but her memory that flies on,
He just turns and walks away.

All peace within him knowing
Though her echoes may never rest...
Love awaits him where he's going,
He had given her his best.

Michael Anderson

'Tis true, Love lasts forever,
Only her memory slips away.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-27-2000 05:21 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Another sad, beautiful, wonderful piece Michael, excellent work.
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2 posted 02-27-2000 05:46 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

So full of emotion and beautifully written, Michael.  
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3 posted 02-27-2000 07:40 PM       View Profile for Grandma Jo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Grandma Jo

Oh so sad but beautiful too. The ocean has a mesmerizing quality that bring out the feelings in everyone. Nice work!  

 "Words are an extention of the soul... and poetry the most beautiful form of those words!"


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4 posted 02-27-2000 07:41 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Your best is all than one can ever give, Michael. Sometimes it's not enough but you can walk away proud knowing you've done it. Good work.
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Another beautiful poem, Michael!

Corinne
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6 posted 02-27-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Such romantic longing and letting go...this had a sharp edge to it...utterly beautiful!!!

Giving your best is all that any one can do!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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Wonderful words Michael....no one can, or at least should, ask for your best...and if your best isn't good enough for them, then perhaps it just wasn't meant to be. A good relationship consists of each giving 100%, not one 100%, the other less...I hope that ahead of you is all you desire
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8 posted 02-27-2000 09:50 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

"He remembers watching in chains
While she stood upon the ledge.
His screams swallowed by swirling rains,
In her forgotten pledge.

Now the ocean calls him with her voice,
A soft, seductive lure.
A beckoning of no real choice
For love once felt so pure."

this one is SO amazing...it was hard to pick which verses caught me the most...
"he" continues to "give his best"...(smile)
take care, janet marie



 She says baby,
It's 3am I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.
Matchbox20

I love you baby... always.*


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9 posted 02-27-2000 10:02 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yes, Love is waiting for you Michael....just keep your eyes ahead!!  

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10 posted 02-27-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Michael as of late here, I can't pick a favorite. Your writing as been phenomenal!
Elizabeth Santos
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Beautifully written
I felt your sadness
Liz
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I read honor and grace in this poetic treasure, Michael. Excellent writing, to be sure.

Claire
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~Michael

Once again you floor me with another poem! How do u do it my dear sir? you are talented very much so. i loved this poem, despite its sadness and longing. the ocean can be so mesmorizing as if standing time still...this captured lost love so well. Thanks for sharing..
~Amy~  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
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14 posted 02-28-2000 04:03 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

OOOooohh...made me look!  Purely you, Incredbible Michael, and I say a soft and sad
thanx...
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15 posted 02-28-2000 04:42 AM       View Profile for paulsm   Email paulsm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paulsm

Full of passion and feeling I loved it !

Paulsm
Michael
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16 posted 02-28-2000 09:49 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Grandma Jo, the ocean is one of my favorite places.  There's such a peaceful solitude on the shores out here.  Indeed, it's mesmerizing.

Well said, balladeer...I hold no shame there.

Ruth, there definately has to be giving on both sides...otherwise it's futile.

Janet, I always give my best - even if it's a losing cause.

Denise, Amen to never looking back.  Nothing back there to help.  

Claire - your words humble me.  TY

Amy, For awhile, I think Time was standing still.  

serenity, Glad to get ya peeking...LOL


Thank you each and all for the kind replies.


michael
 
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