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Forgotten Promise
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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FORGOTTEN PROMISE He stands upon the precipice Where once an angel flew. Who'd given him "maiden's promise" That love would remain true. Staring out across the ocean And down to the crashing waves. Feeling the mist of emotion From the memory he saves. He had loved her, loved her desire, But it was her own despise. She held as a shame to her Sire, In looking from his eyes. He looked back to the fallen ruin, Their castle built on sand. Where by the glow of a lover's moon, She had refused his hand. He remembers watching in chains While she stood upon the ledge. His screams swallowed by swirling rains, In her forgotten pledge. Now the ocean calls him with her voice, A soft, seductive lure. A beckoning of no real choice For love once felt so pure. As the sun crests the horizon, In the dawn of a new day. It's but her memory that flies on, He just turns and walks away. All peace within him knowing Though her echoes may never rest... Love awaits him where he's going, He had given her his best. Michael Anderson 'Tis true, Love lasts forever, Only her memory slips away. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Another sad, beautiful, wonderful piece Michael, excellent work. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So full of emotion and beautifully written, Michael. |
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Grandma Jo Member
since 2000-01-02
Posts 51 |
Oh so sad but beautiful too. The ocean has a mesmerizing quality that bring out the feelings in everyone. Nice work! < !signature--> "Words are an extention of the soul... and poetry the most beautiful form of those words!" [This message has been edited by Grandma Jo (edited 02-27-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Your best is all than one can ever give, Michael. Sometimes it's not enough but you can walk away proud knowing you've done it. Good work. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Another beautiful poem, Michael! Corinne |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Such romantic longing and letting go...this had a sharp edge to it...utterly beautiful!!! Giving your best is all that any one can do!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful words Michael....no one can, or at least should, ask for your best...and if your best isn't good enough for them, then perhaps it just wasn't meant to be. A good relationship consists of each giving 100%, not one 100%, the other less...I hope that ahead of you is all you desire  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"He remembers watching in chains While she stood upon the ledge. His screams swallowed by swirling rains, In her forgotten pledge. Now the ocean calls him with her voice, A soft, seductive lure. A beckoning of no real choice For love once felt so pure." this one is SO amazing...it was hard to pick which verses caught me the most... "he" continues to "give his best"...(smile) take care, janet marie She says baby, It's 3am I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. Matchbox20 I love you baby... always.* |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, Love is waiting for you Michael....just keep your eyes ahead!! Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Michael as of late here, I can't pick a favorite. Your writing as been phenomenal! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Beautifully written I felt your sadness Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I read honor and grace in this poetic treasure, Michael. Excellent writing, to be sure. Claire |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Michael Once again you floor me with another poem! How do u do it my dear sir? you are talented very much so. i loved this poem, despite its sadness and longing. the ocean can be so mesmorizing as if standing time still...this captured lost love so well. Thanks for sharing.. ~Amy~ ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
OOOooohh...made me look! Purely you, Incredbible Michael, and I say a soft and sad thanx... |
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paulsm Junior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 48 |
Full of passion and feeling I loved it ! Paulsm |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Grandma Jo, the ocean is one of my favorite places. There's such a peaceful solitude on the shores out here. Indeed, it's mesmerizing. Well said, balladeer...I hold no shame there. Ruth, there definately has to be giving on both sides...otherwise it's futile. Janet, I always give my best - even if it's a losing cause. Denise, Amen to never looking back. Nothing back there to help. Claire - your words humble me. TY Amy, For awhile, I think Time was standing still. serenity, Glad to get ya peeking...LOL Thank you each and all for the kind replies. michael |
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