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The Visit

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Meadowmuse
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The Visit



Swift sorrow, do not bid me well
And tramp across my step
Your stealth and madness steeped in blood
As in sleep's escape you've crept

I cannot bear to raise my head
As closer within you draw
Leave out my rooms through morning's frost
Tarnished tears will never thaw

For weakened hearts cannot be cured
And softness full restored
To love, at lengths beyond one's reach,
From whence all blood has poured

No need to hesitate, half turned,
In witness to what you've wrought
Your visit's come full to its closing now
With nary a battle fought



Dear LadyClaire



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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 02-27-2000 03:35 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Meadow,
A sad but beautiful poem. Well done.
Dark Angel
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2 posted 02-27-2000 03:40 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

meadowmuse, this is a lovely but sad piece. Well Done!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


JamesMichael
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3 posted 02-27-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very nice meadowmuse.  I was wondering how you can write like this with so much emotion and feeling.  Are you going thru a hard time right now or is this feelings from a past situation?  I'm only wondering how you become so inspired to write such beautiful poetry.   James  
Martie
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Sad, this is so,  but you thread your words with such beauty that even tears smile.
Mike
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Tis not the wood that makes a home,
nor words that make a poem,
A special magic must be part,
Within must rest a heart.

Me thinks I have just read a poem.

Meadowmuse
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6 posted 02-27-2000 05:12 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Seymour...thank you for the nod of encouragement.

Dark Angel...thank you for reading this and for thinking it lovely.

James...Thank you for reading and for the sincerity of your question. Sometimes when I write, I do draw on feelings and observations from the past, though this particular piece was written just a little while ago, from the moment. Thank you, James.

Martie...what a sweet thing for you to say...thank you.

Mike...I'm glad youthinks.    Thank you.

Claire    
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7 posted 02-27-2000 05:19 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Claire~
The piece exudes the pain you've felt.

'No need to hesitate, half turned,
In witness to what you've wrought
Your visit's come full to its closing now
With nary a battle fought'

Hugs, hon.
~*Marge*~




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HelmutB
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No need to see the reason why
No need to imagine
Only the need to read and know that you were hurt
Makes this heart weep
What a poetry and the words you selected
L. & S.P.



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Corinne
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9 posted 02-27-2000 07:58 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

How very poignant, Meadowmuse!

Corinne
Meadowmuse
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Marge...thank you for the hugs, Marge. I am honored to have been offered them.

Helmut...thank you for your tender words.
L.and S.P.

Corinne...for reading and responding to this so nicely, I thank you.

Claire

Denise
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11 posted 02-27-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent writing, Claire. You describe it so well.....HUGS

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 02-27-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Excellent writing, as always.
I love the softness of your poetry
Liz
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13 posted 02-28-2000 01:35 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I have to agree with Liz. There is a softness, but it's one that seems born of a hard, unflinching view and experience. If that made any sense; I'm exhausted. Anyway, I enjoyed much.

Mike
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Denise,
Elizabeth,
Mike... Thank you, each, for taking time to read and offering your kindness in words. I'm glad I had a place to share this yesterday.

Claire
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WOW!!!!! I'm not sure I need say anything more  
Michael
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I am nearly speechless.  This was so powerful and so emotion steeped.  I tip my hat to you.  Exceptional piece.


Michael
Rex Allen McCoy
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Another beautiful poem Claire
When the the day comes that you open the window and breathe the fresh air ... listen to the birds sing and savour the drift of spring flowers ... then write us another poem with the same intensity ... we can all use the smile it would bring

Rex}<{{{{o>
Meadowmuse
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Hoot Owl...just knowing that this piece evoked a favorable response from one whose work I respect as much as yours says enough for me. Thank you.  

Michael...thank you so much. I was hoping the emotion would be as real to the reader as it was to the writer.

Rex...I am looking forward to that day with pulsing heart, Rex. Thank you for your kind encouragement.

~ Claire
 
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