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Martie
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0 posted 2000-02-26 06:02 PM



Freedom is a Gift of Love


Where has that glistening gone
that beckoned me to take
that narrow precarious trail
across the mountain with its charming?

How it whispered
like wings
in the distant appeal
of a river’s song,
come and play
this dancing water
that waits near the precipice,
it said.

How the sound soothed this withering.

I tore this satin skin
in the winding
and was lost,
the trail behind me swallowed
by the feelings that fell from me
like tattered leaves.

Now that I have come so far
I can see just beyond the rise,
the road paved
with your sweet waiting.

This freedom is a gift of love.



© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 2000-02-26 06:16 PM


(Gulp!)
Amazing!
Liz

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2 posted 2000-02-26 06:26 PM


Martie...what can I say about this other than it's beautiful and I love the imagery
"How it whispered
like wings
in the distant appeal
of a river’s song,"
wonderful lines  

Martie
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3 posted 2000-02-26 08:21 PM


Liz--Gosh, was that a good gulp or a bad gulp?.  Thanks for the amazing.

Ruth, Thank you for the beautiful.

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4 posted 2000-02-26 09:54 PM


Martie~  Martie~  Martie~
You are AMAZING lady !
This is just sparkling.
*sigh*
~*Marge*~


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Michael
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5 posted 2000-02-27 01:15 AM


Beautiful and very true words, Martie.  Well done.

Michael

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6 posted 2000-02-27 06:01 AM


Martie, I continue to admire your gift and style...lovely poem.

Claire

Martie
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7 posted 2000-02-27 11:29 AM


Marge--You are the one that sparkles--thank you so much.

Michael--thank you for reading and yes, the words are true.

Claire--Your poetry always captures me--I'm so glad you enjoy mine.

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8 posted 2000-02-27 11:35 AM


Beautiful writing, Martie.....and when love is a gift of freedom, then you have it all.
Martie
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9 posted 2000-02-27 11:38 AM


Deer, you are so right--hmmmn, now you got me thinking...may have to write another poem.  
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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10 posted 2000-02-27 09:29 PM


Oh, this is so meticulously worded!  Lovely, absolutely lovely!  Almost makes my hair stand on end, and that would be something to see, considering it's about hip length.  This poem is overflowing with keen feeling.  Beautifully said.  I love your imagery.

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11 posted 2000-02-27 10:05 PM


Simply beautiful, Martie!! I love it!!

Denise

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12 posted 2000-09-01 04:19 PM


concrete/abstract- turned real, palpable- and comprehensible - that's my way of saying - your talent for metaphor and the way it reaches inside me is beyond belief -

this goes near the top of my list of super excellent 'Martie' poems

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