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An Empty Poet Writes Tonight (anyway...)
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An Empty Poet Writes Tonight (anyway...) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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No, not even, scant reflection of myself as I looked deep into his eyes. Just an empty, guilty shrug as he turned to walk away. And I, the keeper of the words-- burned in pain-- believing had I but said it just right, well, then, he would have stayed. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Don't beat yourself up, serenity. I find myself doing that too, question what if I had said this or done that - and if their feelings were worth a squat to begin with, you wouldn't be where you are right now. I feel your pain all too well. Just remember you're not the one who walked out - their loss. Michael |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sometimes there is nothing you can do to keep someone..no matter how it hurts, you have to pick yourself up and move on. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You say in a few words what many feel at times. "If only I had..." probably makes no difference at all Liz |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Having been there once myself, I remember the intense feeling of loss ( like an addiction ) I paced the floor ... lost my job ... lost weight ... basically became a hermit ... there was no internet then and friends I had didn't care for poetry. Just had myself and my 5 year old son to keep me going ... thoughts of him pulled me out of it ... and when I found my true love that I am still with today ... I couldn't even create a picture of my first wife in my mind any longer. All the longing I felt for her vanished and thinking back, I wondered how it could even have haunted me in the first place ... but it does haunt us because it's an addiction of the worst type and the hardest one to cure sorry if I rambled Rex}<{{{{o> [This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (edited 02-26-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Succinct, but to the point, you will survive, Enjoyed the read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
serenity, I LOVE this one, so much emotion and meaning expressed with so few words...yet it has such impact. I relate to this one well... the things we didnt say... take care, janet marie ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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RufffRyder Member
since 2000-02-25
Posts 143<------Over There------> |
Love say`s more than word`s can ever say. If that wasn`t enough,then he or she, is the one that has lost. Nice read Serenity |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sometimes when people are at a crossroad in their lives words can be very powerful and if we say the right words or the wrong words can determine much. James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Serenity...if it would have taken you saying the right words to make him stay, he wouldn't have stayed for long anyway...true love is not having to say a word and still being understood. So sad, but so well written....love the line "And I, the keeper of the words--" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to all for your comforting words. I don't mean to obsess, I think i'm okay and then, i don't know. I really just don't know. But thanks |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
very simple, yet powerful. Well done! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Why, Serenity~ Of course you're okay. At least I think so ... and what am I ... wrong ? I think not ! Your writing reveals a strong person who is capable of overcoming trials that are put upon you. Friends who care can help. Writing can help. Sharing with friends can help. Keep your spirits up, gal. Believe in yourself ... for I believe in you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I'm sorry about your loss serenity but you'll find someone else though. Good poem! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fabulous poem, Serenity! It says so much with so few words! Denise |
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