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An Empty Poet Writes Tonight (anyway...)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 02-26-2000 04:25 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

No,
not even,
scant reflection of myself
as I looked deep into his eyes.
Just
an empty,
guilty shrug as he turned to walk away.

And I,
the keeper of the words--
burned in pain--
believing
had I but
said it just right,
well, then, he would have stayed.
© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 02-26-2000 04:30 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Don't beat yourself up, serenity.  I find myself doing that too, question what if I had said this or done that - and if their feelings were worth a squat to begin with, you wouldn't be where you are right now.  I feel your pain all too well.  Just remember you're not the one who walked out - their loss.


Michael
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2 posted 02-26-2000 06:54 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Sometimes there is nothing you can do to keep someone..no matter how it hurts, you have to pick yourself up and move on.
Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 02-26-2000 10:25 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

You say in a few words what many feel at times. "If only I had..." probably makes no difference at all
Liz
Rex Allen McCoy
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4 posted 02-26-2000 11:42 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Having been there once myself, I remember the intense feeling of loss ( like an addiction ) I paced the floor ... lost my job ... lost weight ... basically became a hermit ... there was no internet then and
friends I had didn't care for poetry.
Just had myself and my 5 year old son to keep me going ... thoughts of him pulled me out of it ... and when I found my true love that I am still with today ... I couldn't even create a picture of my first wife in my mind any longer.
All the longing I felt for her vanished and thinking back, I wondered how it could even have haunted me in the first place ... but it does haunt us because it's an addiction of the worst type and the hardest one to cure

sorry if I rambled

Rex}<{{{{o>


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Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 02-26-2000 11:48 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

serenity,
Succinct, but to the point, you will survive,
Enjoyed the read.
Janet Marie
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6 posted 02-26-2000 01:23 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

serenity,
I LOVE this one, so much emotion and meaning expressed with so few words...yet it has such impact. I relate to this one well...
the things we didnt say...
take care, janet marie

 ...there are places inside all our souls...
that have never been touched...
there are places inside our hearts...
that need to be loved this much...
Janet Marie

*I miss you baby...
I love you, always.*

RufffRyder
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7 posted 02-26-2000 01:32 PM       View Profile for RufffRyder   Email RufffRyder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RufffRyder's Home Page   View IP for RufffRyder

Love say`s more than word`s can ever say.
If that wasn`t enough,then he or she, is the one that has lost.
Nice read Serenity
JamesMichael
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8 posted 02-26-2000 04:21 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Sometimes when people are at a crossroad in their lives words can be very powerful and if we say the right words or the wrong words can determine much.     James
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 02-26-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Serenity...if it would have taken you saying the right words to make him stay, he wouldn't have stayed for long anyway...true love is not having to say a word and still being understood. So sad, but so well written....love the line "And I,
the keeper of the words--"
serenity blaze
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10 posted 02-26-2000 07:32 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thanks to all for your comforting words.  I don't mean to obsess, I think i'm okay and
then, i don't know.  I really just don't know.  But thanks
Martie
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11 posted 02-26-2000 08:00 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

very simple, yet powerful.  Well done!
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12 posted 02-26-2000 11:26 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Why, Serenity~
Of course you're okay.
At least I think so ...
and what am I ... wrong ?
I think not !

Your writing reveals a strong
person who is capable of overcoming
trials that are put upon you.
Friends who care can help.
Writing can help.
Sharing with friends can help.
Keep your spirits up, gal.

Believe in yourself ... for I believe in you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Nate Dogg
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13 posted 02-27-2000 02:46 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

I'm sorry about your loss serenity but you'll find someone else though. Good poem!
Denise
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14 posted 02-28-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Fabulous poem, Serenity! It says so much with so few words!

Denise
 
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